I typically prefer not to use them. But several reviewers have been pretty explicit (in a kind way) that they feel they are necessary. Just so there's no confusion, here's an example of what I mean about serial commas:

The perp was tall, lanky, fast, and deceptive.

My question is:  do I really need that serial comma between "fast" and "and"?

My junior high English teacher said it was optional. He never used it and I followed suit, not using it either. In college, my Creative Writing 101 professor strongly suggested we always use it, although technically not required. He simply thought it was more appropriate to do so. My Creative Writing 201 professor, said it was purely optional; either way is perfectly acceptable.

To me, it seems redundant to use both the serial comma plus the word "and" before the last item in the series. The word "and" informs the reader that the next item in the series will be the last one. I'd love to hear your opinion on the subject. Thanks in advance!

Alan

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Dirk,

I've never been a big fan of supernatural; but when you start posting again, I'll check it out. Going back to the link I provided in my earlier post, the article, as you note, is more oriented to bloggers/non-fiction authors, but there's a lot there for novelists to consider as well.

You have some excellent folks helping you tidy up Galaxy Tales - good choices and great of them to help! Best to you,

Alan

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You're welcome. Based on your forum posts, I get the impression you're a pretty smart guy - I think you'll find your comfort zone with that, and any other things that give you pause - very quickly. I've not read any of your writing per se as it's not a genre I typically read. But I'll head over sometime this weekend and check out your work. See ya then ...

Alan

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Hi Dirk,

I try to avoid them when I can. Following is my take on the short scenario you offered:

Joseph terminated the feed. “They’re insane! They just put the fate of humanity solely in the hands of Emperor Bastardus!” Joseph's words had barely left his mouth when an explosion rocked the prison. Everyone ran from their cells and looked for the source as a siren began to wail.

I also replaced "out of" with "from". I think it's more concise.

My opinion, for what it it's worth. Hope it helps at least a little bit. Good luck with your story!

Alan

PS:  Also, if you're interested, here's a pretty good article referencing transitional phrases. I use it when my own thought process fails me. You'll notice that of the many transitional examples they suggest/recommend, "just then" is not one of them:

https://smartblogger.com/transitional-phrases/

Hi Dirk,

I don't think I've ever once paid attention to how many scenes I've had in a chapter in any if the six novels I've completed. I simply let the chapter write itself until it's done. So, your post /question piqued my interest on that. After a brief scan of several of my novels, I found chapters with one scene that varied in length between 897 words and 2,896 words. And then I had a chapter with five scenes that was just over 2400 words.

I'd never given that any thought before, so it was interesting to go back and take a look. I've been a member here since 2008 and many years ago there was a writer who typically posted chapters with 4000 - 5000 words and had as many as seven or eight scenes. So, I guess it depends on genre, writing style and necessity to say what needs to be said in whatever chapter configuration that requires.

That really doesn't answer your question, I guess, but thought I'd throw in my nickel's worth (two cents won't buy anything these days). Good luck with your writing. Wishing you great success.

Alan

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I agree with what both of you are staying. Marilyn, here in Decatur, Alabama, folks often say, when you ask where someone lives, "Oh, he stays over on third Street, just down the block from the Baptist Church." It's part of their vernacular. My former mother-in-law lived in Richmond, VA. She'd say, "Alan, can you carry me to the store, my car's not running very good."

I've decided to write as my characters would speak, given their culture and location. Here in Northern Alabama, about half of all sentences start with "I'ma fixin' to ..." as in "I'ma fixin' to go to the store. Can I pick up anything for you while I'm there?" Seriously, it's probably the most common start to a sentence in the area.

Another one I hear almost everywhere is making a noun into a verb. I've been in the music biz all my life. I recently had a guitar repaired. I called and asked if it was almost finished. His answer"  "We're efforting to have it done by tomorrow." Hmmm. I always thought it was We're making an effort to ..."

There are many more. I just shake my head and think "I'm far from brilliant and make a shitload of mistakes everyday, but give me a break!

Alan

Congratulations, DOn! I've been away for a few years - it's great to hear from you. Wishing you the very best with this and all your writing.

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Thanks, SOl. It appears the problem has been rectified. Much appreciated.

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Thanks, Sol!

On my homepage it tells me I have 2 new connection requests. When I click on to decide whether or not to accept the requests, it tells me I have no connections. So, if you've sent me a connection request and I've not replied - I tried!

Can you help me, Sol?  Thanks.

Alan

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"Well sir, at least you're dying a virgin by choice."

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Welcome to the site - we're delighted you're here!

I've been here a little over ten years. The difference between my first posts and what I post now is remarkable. As others have said, reply to all your reviews, be ready to accept constructive criticism and ... keep writing! Write whatever comes to mind, but keep writing. You can always go back and make revisions as necessary. But to simply write what comes to mind, regardless of its quality or content, keeps the idea alive. The way I see it, it's like owning a car. When it gets out of kilter, you usually take it to a repair facility rather than parking it in the backyard and letting it rust away. The suggestions you get here, combined with your own imagination and voice, serve as your repair facility for your work.

I hope you enjoy your time here as much as I have, and I hope you find we (we writers and the site administration) have a positive influence on your writing and that we meet your expectations. Wishing you the very best, and again, welcome.

Alan

PS:  What genre(s) do you write in?

Hi Stephen,

I'll be getting back to your book soon - lots of things going on with my wife's health and a recent move into assisted living.

I simply broke the first chapter of my novel "Alabama Greene" into two chapters and posted them as Chapters One and Two. When I send the manuscript for publishing, they will be combined as one chapter. You can combine, break-up, redo chapters as you see fit when publishing time arrives. That keeps it pretty simple for me. Ie., Chapter Three, as it's posted here, will be Chapter Two when it's sent of for publication. Just a thought, FWIW. And good luck with the novel!

Alan

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Nancy,

Di and I wish your dad the very best and your family strength. Our prayers are with you. I almost lost my wife (Di) twice since November (Sepsis and a stroke), so I can somewhat empathize with you. She's doing better - hoping and praying the same for your dad.

Alan & Di

Hi Dags,

What Vern said.

Norm,

I'm a professional composer/songwriter with over 1,000 songs copyrighted. I have songs in movies, commercials and the like, so I'm pretty familiar with all the copyright issues - although I am not an attorney. You can reference the singer/songwriter/composer as you will - we always enjoy free publicity! As previously mentioned, lyrics are a whole different animal - have to be VERY careful about that. Good luck with your trilogy!

Alan

When I first joined TNBW in 2008, there was a limit of 5000 words you were permitted to post in one chapter/story with a single post. I don't know if that's still true or not. If it's still true, that alone would preclude you from posting a chapter longer than that. If it's not still true, I guess your best judgment will have to make the decision. Personally, if a chapter is much over 3000 words, I tend to move on to the next thing unless, as Marilyn said, it's a "can't put down read" or someone of whom I'm very fond (there are several of you out there - you know who you are!)

Also, I think genres such as "Adventure", "Action Thriller" and "Humor" need to move quickly to keep reader interest. A new chapter generally suggests movement in the story/action, which can be an enticement for the reader to continue reading. That could be movement  in the scene or movement in a new direction.

Another thought (this applies to me and several folks I know) is that I have only so much time to read at one sitting and I don't like to quit reading in the middle of a chapter. So novels with very long chapters tend to make me look elsewhere for that very reason. I'm a huge Janet Evanovich fan and her chapters are generally 1200 - 1800 words. I have every book she's ever written and love the quick pace.

Just a few thoughts for what they might be worth. Good luck with your writing!

Alan

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Congratulations! Sure does feel good, eh??!!

Alan (My Real Name - Ha!)

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Nancy DeMarco wrote:

I could not publish my prologue to only this group, but it let me stick it here and Premium. Hope I don't live to regret the Premium posting. I don't mind the feedback, but I know I can't adequately reciprocate.


Hi Nancy,

As far as I am concerned, you don't have to worry about reciprocating everything of yours I review. Just whatever you can get to, when you can, is perfectly fine with me.  I just enjoy reading a good effort in genres of my liking and leaving a few notes and/or suggestions for consideration. The reciprocity is nice but not necessarily expected. Enjoy "Marley's Ashes" so far!

Alan

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The primary reason I left the site several years ago was the assessment of points for posting to each group. I've belonged to two other sites since then but came back here because of issues I didn't care for on the other sites. On one site, your post disappeared from view after so many days (30, I think) and you had to pay your points again to make it publicly available thereafter. Also, it was more oriented to poetry than novels or short stories. The second other site just wasn't that intriguing for me. But, I did meet one very good friend over there who has been posting over here for a while. Anyway, it's good to be back with "old friends" who took me from simply writing words to something resembling a real author.

FYI, those of you who might not have read my profile, I have Focal Dystonia and it makes typing a nightmare. My reviews and review replies often have multiple typos but I do my best (spend a lot of time) to eliminate as many of them as I can from my chapter posts. I am considering using a program called Dragon Speak in the near future. If anyone has had any experience with that program, or know someone who has, I'd love to hear from you.

Wishing everyone success with their writing,

Alan

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Hi Everyone! Good to be back! I originally joined in 2008 - wow, 10 years ago! I've been here and gone a few times. My wife is significantly disabled and in very poor health. Her needs take me away at times. But, I'll be here as often as I can. looking forward to it!

BTW, I have Focal Dystonia which makes typing a nightmare. So, in my reviews and replies you will often find typos. But in my postsed work, I do go back and try to catch all of them. FWIW.

Good luck to all,

Alan

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Hi Denise,

I wasn't one of the folks who read your books here on the site but I'd still like to offer my congratulations on the book deal. I wish you much success with it.

Alan

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Mike,

We've know each other (on line) a very long time. We've kind of casually discussed those issues. I wish you all the very best. You aree very supportive of the rest of us and I hope these few words, and a few reviews from me, help you to move along and become the best Mike you can be. You'll be in mine and Di's prayers.

Alan

Congrats and many wishes for great success!

Congrats on the book! I wish you lots of success with it!