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Thanks, Lynn. My eye is healing faster than the doctor thought. I've graduated to simple eye drops every 4 hours now. Next week, the left eye will receive the same treatment. My right eye vision has improved a great deal.

Bill

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Greetings, Josh. And welcome to our group.

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Thank you so much, JP. Great song by Johnny Nash. I found it on YouTube and downloaded it. Hugely popular during my last tour in Vietnam (well, Thailand, actually, but it was still the war zone.)

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It was absolutely painless for me, Christine. I was awake during the surgery. The entire process took 35 minutes. The preparation and post-op processes took longer than the surgery. What an amazing difference to my vision.

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Absolutely. Had an appointment with my eye doc this morning. Before, I was able to read only the top letter of his eye chart. This time, even with the slight fuzziness of dilation, I read the fourth line down (one up from the bottom). The 'yellowness' tint to everything is gone from the right eye. he says that was the cataract causing it. The light snow on the ground was blazingly white instead of slightly tarnished 'eggshell white'. Wonderful. Can't wait for the right eye now.

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Roughly 12 hours after operation, my eye is still dialated a little, but I can see almost clearly enough to read without my glasses.

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Thank You, everyone. I was in the operating room a total of 35 minutes, then back into recovery. Total time at the hospital was 5.5 hours. I have a cup over my eye now, but that comes off in another hour. Expect some blurry vision for perhaps two days, then back to normal. Right eye in two weeks.

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My thanks to everyone. I inderstand what you meant now, Temple. Sometimes it takes a 2x4 to get my attention. And, yes, my left eye is scheduled for two weeks from now. Basically, I'll be out of service for the month.

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A puzzling reference, Temple. Any particular reason you sent the link? I don't consider what I offered as "overinformation" or even TMI.

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Tomorrow morning, early, I'm due at the hospital for cataract surgery. Not too worried, but it will interfere somewhat with reviewing and writing/editing my own stuff. Supposed to be an easy thing, but one never knows.

Bill

Dirk B. wrote:

My hobby is asking seemingly harmless questions that mushroom into nuclear war with hypersonic weapons. If that doesn't make the hair on your neck stand/stand up, then I/me don't know what will.

LOL. An exchange like this on another site I can name (that begins with the letters Booksie), would have resulted in exactly the above-named devastation. This thread should be made a sticky as it contins something for everyone.

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I've always classified "stood" as one of those words that fall in the mundane category. Similar words are "walked", "spoke", "saw", "thought", and a few more that could be made much more colorful and to the point. I do agree with others that "stood up" is rather redundant and would flag it myself.

Bill

"rose" or possibly "came to his feet" might work as well.

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And Happy Holidays to you and yours, Rachel. And to anyone else who responds here. I will likewise be busy with family and such, so my attendance here will be spotty at best.

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I can't think of a single person I've ever talked to about writing that hasn't gone through the same thing. It's happened to me many times. My favorite method for breaking through the doldrums is to build a scene in my virtual railroading program or go flying. Both hobbies will keep your mind so busy you don't have time to overthink a particular roadlbock in your novel.  Often enough your subconscious will provide a clue--the very key you need to turn your negatives into positives.

The writing I've done as little as a year ago is subject to my staring at it and wondering how the heck I managed to write such drivel. I gleefully rip out whole paragraphs, slash every adjective in the story, cream comma splices, and turn all tells into shows. Other times, I'll stare at it for ten minutes, then go have a cup of tea.

Trust me, you'll get through it.

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Thanks, Clarke. I've responded to your review.

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Somehow, I thought I was updating my chapters and re-publishing them. It turns out, the new stuff didn't show. For this I apologize. I've now gone back and ensured the first three chapters are now what I meant them to be. More chapters will follow soon.

I've redesigned the beginning be separating the individual POVs into chapter one and two. The old reviews are safe and sound as I printed them all off and used them as a guide while editing. I agree, the first attempt was pretty lame. i hope the second start is better.

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Welcome, Dan. SOunds like a novel I'd enjoy. Post away and I'll see what I can do during my prep for cataract surgery. Most authors (me included) will reciprocate for any reviews you do.

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I received the same email, Marilyn. Great software. I signed up for the Lifetime option. Their technical support is outstanding. I've been a member for a couple of years. I've been their Beta tester for a year now.

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Outstanding picks. Congratulations to all the selectees!

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Today is December 3, but it is Monday, not Saturday.

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I'll take one, Randy. How do we get the money to you?

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Same here. 10 seconds while "waiting for thenextbigwriter.com" on Google Chrome.

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Just voted, Randy.

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I'd rewrite the second sentence as:

"Me, the paramedics, and Father Coppola, who's waiting at the police tape."

May not be grammatically correct, but it's how I'd speak the line.

Bill