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(1,217 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)

Okay, now that flight cocoons have been largely discarded, I could use some help with interstellar travel. I created something called the starlanes in chapter one that serves that purpose. As one might expect, it provides FTL travel by way of a higher dimension. Ships use a stardrive (aka the Hinkley drive) to reach the starlanes and travel through them. They then drop back into spacetime  once they get where they're going.

The starlanes are more like Star Trek than they are Star Wars. You can still see stars, planets, and other ships in the starlanes, but there are visible connections (flows) between stars. The flows connect all stars to each other, but the closest stars have the strongest flows, yielding the fastest travel. Imagine tubes interconnecting all the stars, except they're ethereal.

Ships travel within these flows to hop from one star to another. The overall route is then a series of starhops. The closest stars are one hop apart. Travel time can be as little as thirty minutes. To get from one end of colonized space to the other is 13 hops, which takes about a day. Travel from one end of the galaxy to the other is 10,000 hops and takes a year. Although it is possible to travel directly from any star to any other star, it is generally the case that it is faster to star hop your way to distant stars, along the strongest flows.

Flows are hazy with fuzzy boundaries. You can see what's out in spacetime around you (planets, moon's, asteroids, etc.) but things appear ghost-like until you drop back into spacetime.

My original idea was that these flows are natural and omnipresent, connecting interstellar bodies powered by nuclear fusion, hence all the stars connect to each other. Hadn't considered until just now what happens when a star becomes a black hole, but let's roll with it.

This is a lot to take in in a single dose, so I spread things out across several chapters throughout the book. Based on this description, can you envision the starlanes? Basically, it comes down to fuzzy tubes and starhopping.

One variation of this that I'm considering is making them artificial, constructed by some dead race of sentient beings. In this case, the only connections would be between starhopping points, and the number of them would be vast but finite. Even so, there would be something visible that has to be traversed between connected stars. Imagine all the highways feeding into NYC from surrounding areas, where NYC is the star. Newark, NJ is another star. Although I call it starhopping, they are not jump-gates. Perhaps I need a better term than starhopping, huh?

Thoughts?

Thanks
Dirk

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(213 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)

I've made great progress myself. Today I printed my notes for the next chapter. It may not sound like much, but I have an HP printer with a fussy output tray. It took at least 5 seconds to open the thing. After that I took a break to read more of my new physics textbook, watched the "Passion" episode of the Bible series on Netflix (too graphic), watched part of the Dune miniseries while in a deep tub of hot water (it was Heaven, if you'll pardon the pun) reread my Caligula chapter for further tweaks before Amy makes me rewrite it, and am about to read the news, followed by a reread of the first New Testament chapter, since I forgot it all. So basically, I didn't write a damn thing today. Tomorrow I'll read the notes I printed today (7 single spaced pages of drudge!), and then I may actually write something. I'll start small: one sentence. I'll report back after it's written.

Nite all!

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amy s wrote:

Tommy's dream was to merge into his favorite books, transporting between the pages, and living within the backstory. Then a character was clever enough to escape, cursing the real world to certain destruction.

I like this one best so far. What most intrigues me about your story is that there's a character who can live in his books. Plus it covers the threat to the real world, all in two sentences.

njc wrote:

a chamber pot.  Valuable resource, that.

I'm old enough to remember those. And who can forget an indoor outhouse? Vented, but not heated.

njc wrote:

Hmm.  'Hinkley' should be 'Hinkles' or 'Hinklettes'.

Professor R. Hinkley is from Gilligan's Island but with Roy abbreviated. It's intended as an homage. Too similar?

No, Amy's is done. Professor Hinkley, too. You, however, get a recurring role as Caligula's highly inappropriate mother. I can't wait to put her together with Apollo in Mama's bar. Apollo: Um, ugh, er, Lady Kay, I mean, we shouldn't, oh dear Lord, don't stop!

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Congratulations, Janet. Keep it up!

You too? 50 is the new 80.

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Tried it. Closing a thread does not delete it, and you can even re-open it.

Thanks, Janet.
Dirk

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Can someone please tell me if the operation to close a thread still leaves the thread in place (and doesn't delete it). I want to prevent further posts to the thread without deleting it.

Thanks.
Dirk

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One of the most click-intensive features is the pop-up text boxes when doing an inline review. It would be great if the cursor was inside the box without the extra click.

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One advantage of multiple POVs in my story is that I could change POV between scenes without having to wait for the next chapter. I had to jump through hoops to split up the first attack on New Bethlehem into three chapters (Joseph pre-battle, Apollo in battle, Joseph post-battle).

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(1,528 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)

K caused all kinds of work for me in the Caligula! chapter. Changes still in progress.

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Below is the last topic I posted in the old thread about POVs.

POV Topic From Old Thread wrote:

Currently I alternate one chapter per MC (one Joseph chapter, followed by one Apollo chapter, etc.). Caligula got one chapter because I needed Apollo dead for the story to work. Caligula turned out to be a great character to write for, though. Were I to get inside the heads of key characters, I probably couldn't do a plot like the one Caligula hatched, but it would allow for more interesting secondary characters. I could get into the head of Apollo's father, who's a full-blown psychopath. I suppose I could try to make the secondary characters more interesting through the eyes of the MCs without adding additional viewpoints.

Should I keep with just the two alternating POVs, or open it up to other characters? What about Dune-like head-hopping? I plan to self-publish, so I'm not sure if I should worry about limited POV. Clearly, however, writers on this site strongly recommend it. I wonder what a non-writer thinks about head-hopping. Do they even notice? Also, does anyone know what POV was used in the Harry Potter series?

K, are you for or against additional POVs? I gather from your post you're against it. I always thought that Jessica's POV was very useful, especially when they first meet the Fremen. Admittedly, Frank Herbert could have written some (all?) of her POV as dialogue with other characters, especially Paul.

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This thread is intended to replace the old one since I'm naming the book series 'The Galaxy Tales' and want the thread to be easy to find/spot. I'm keeping the other for reference purposes.

Elisheva Free wrote:

Norm, I need to take lessons from you on villains. Damn.
-Elisheva

I don't have great villains yet. I tell everything from Joseph's and Apollo's POVs (except for the Caligula chapter), so I have to portray my villains through their dialogue and actions, which is limiting. The only half-decent villain I have is Caligula, and he's due for an overhaul next draft to make everything consistent with the chapter you read. He was pretty much a cartoon before now. In Dune, Frank Herbert got inside the head of the Baron Vladimir Harkonnen (what a great name!), among many other characters. He sometimes used multiple POVs per scene. Sold 20 million books while head-hopping. Clearly he was doing something right.

That's because they were written as cute 2D kids. Imagine how much better Ani would have been if he had been a sadistic child when the adults weren't looking. Or someone who was teased by the other kids for being a slave. He had a tormentor, we'll call him Biff-Biff, who made his young life a living hell. He's too weak in the Force yet to defend himself, but he's practicing twisting the heads off newly hatched baby Rancors. Then, as he and Padme lift off from Tatooine, the camera pans down into a waste pit with Biff-Biff inside, his head twisted off in an all-too-familiar way. The viewing audience would be salivating for this kid's next move. Probably couldn't take 5-year-olds to see it, though.

Can you tell I've been writing Caligula? tongue

Give us some hints that all is not well with young Yunker. Make him into an interesting puzzle. Eavesdropping on Anver and the others. Caught trying to sneak out of school at night. A series of recurring bouts of magic sickness, typically caused by practicing dark spells that Yunker has no access to. You get the idea.

He may need his own book. tongue

Hubby's just afraid of what your twisted ... er, creative mind is capable of. Don't forget Yunker - he's your Anakin Skywalker.

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I find the interface generally easy to use and logical. I went through it briefly tonight and following are a few areas that could be more convenient:

- It takes a lot of scrolling on the home page to get to those "lists" that I'm interested in. I know you want maximum exposure for all work on the site, but I rarely stop to read an essay or poem. My interest is in new books/chapters and new work from my connections. If there were some way to minimize the others (varies by user), that would be a breath of fresh air. It's even worse on my smartphone, since I have to swipe my way close to the bottom to get at my groups' forum posts.
- The search icon on main screen (the magnifying glass) should include the ability to do a quick search in all forum posts (in addition to search for writer and search for works). That feature is currently too well hidden.
- The detailed search deserves to be more visible, too. That thing is a gem. I think it would eliminate some of the gripes about forum structure if you can easily find an old post by keywords. The detailed search could use tweaking as well. The list of groups to search should be sorted alphabetically and there should be a control that selects "all of my groups" in the list with one click.
- Ideally, it would be nice if the quick search and detailed search could treat the words in the search field as individual keywords, rather than treating the whole field as a single string. Sometimes you can remember a few keywords of an old post, but not the exact string. If someone wants a single string, they can put them in quotes.
- My Reviews screen should default to Inline Received instead of Regular Received. I think most would agree.

Hope this helps.
Dirk

Ooh! What if Yunker is secretly working for/with the necromancer? That would be so cool!

amy wrote:

And Norm, I always liked the idea of having Yunker and Anver in the first book, but it got panned. I'd love to put them back into play. I like the idea of making a side-story that allows Anver/Yunker to be featured earlier. I'll see what I can do.

Perhaps it could be a series of very short stories/parables that Anver tells Yunker that are directly related to Kha's experiences as the book goes on. Of course that breaks with your current storytelling style of independent books.

Please don't spend your vacation reviewing my crap ... er, masterpiece. You already review bombed me, so there's no rush.

Moving on to Acts. FYI, I think it would be great if Yunker had a bigger role throughout Acts. He'd be someone that a younger audience could relate to.

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Thanks. Ponder my navel, I must.

I started by researching dark energy for power production this evening. To achieve the amount of dark energy believed to be in our universe only requires the mass-energy equivalent of 4 hydrogen atoms per cubic meter of space. I was going to drop it as a power source, but I found another article that talks about harnessing dark energy for everyday needs, although not in the author's lifetime. So I've got only a few hundred years before Professor Hinkley is supposed to make his major breakthroughs in astrophysics. I'm trying to think if there's one unifying concept that allows for FTL, flight cocoons for atmospheric-like mechanics in space, a great source of power, and cool weapons.

I'm going to punt this topic over to my thread, so I don't hijack yours.

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Norm d'Plume wrote:

The only thing that I think may be unique in my battles is that I use heavily armored raiders to board enemy ships when hangar bay shields are knocked out.

Hhm. I just remembered that stormtroopers boarded the Tantive IV carrying Princess Leia at the beginning of Star Wars IV. That means there's not a damn thing unique about my space battles. Meh.

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njc wrote:

Okay, I can't speak for NormD.

Mine need serious work. I don't do anything creative yet. Just blast cannons ("novas" and "supernovas") and missiles. The only thing that I think may be unique in my battles is that I use heavily armored raiders to board enemy ships when hangar bay shields are knocked out.

I have something called brilliance cannons (prototypes) in chapter one, but they're all just variations of Star Wars/Star Trek tech. I need something different. I was thinking of something that involves either dark energy and/or dark matter. And maybe something that uses the starlanes to pop out of spacetime, travel to the other ship, and then re-enter spacetime and blow up. Another could be a weapon that sends powerful gravity waves at the enemy.

All need plenty of research.