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What is an s lazed? Are you typing willing snorting necrotic tissue again?

Thanks.
Dirk

Oh dear. I've been bleeding out my characters since chapter one whenever they get hit.

I think I need an asspull.

Amy, I wanted to follow up to your inline comment pointing out that a flesh eater burn would probably cauterize the wound, preventing bleeding. If someone's skin is burned so badly that the ribs are showing, would there be no bleeding whatsoever? Do I need to pop the spleen, or is that likely to be fatal (it will take time to reach the character and get him into surgery)? I'd like to keep it as simple as possible, gory, and cool.

Norm d'Plume

Amy's edits for chapter 36 are done, too. (Collapses) Still need to clean up the Caligula chapter, but not tonight. I thought briefly that I had killed off too many Realm characters (they're pretty much all gone except for Joseph, Paul, and Christian). Fortunately, Apollo and his mother know what the Realm planned and why, so they can explain it all in the post-battle chapter.

Dictionary

You're writing 7 books simultaneously? I'm picturing you clad in gold with Ewoks bowing ritualistically. I'm Wicket.

I'm planning my post-battle wrap-up and was wondering whether Earth's Governor Hadisius should have played more of a role in the past three chapters. His only appearance is a brief audio exchange with Lupus where he tells Lupus to fight the Ark and destroy Apollo. Other than that, he doesn't do much even though he has a vested interest in the outcome since he conspired with Lupus to overthrow Apollo. I was thinking I should have him take command of the first wave of ships when Lupus goes off to fight the Ark. He could then flee when Lupus is killed and Caligula surrenders.

Thoughts?

Don't start with me, K. You were the one who complained about banking. jI'd have Amy's edits done by now if I didn't have to invent omnithrusters. You should see her edits, BTW. There are a few words of my chapter peeking out here and there from between her inline comments. :-)

You have an excellent memory. There are primarily two POV characters: Joseph and Apollo, and I alternate between them, usually on a chapter by chapter basis. The first chapter is an exception since it takes place before either MC was born.

We are in Joseph's POV when he feels himself turn beet red. I could say he blushed severely, which eliminates the problem. We all know when we are blushing and by how much (mildly, severely), even if we can't see ourselves in a mirror.

Didn't understand this. They're flying in circles along the side of the enemy warship, hammering a shield emitter to destroy it.