.... when a person tries to conform to someone else's style, then the author's own voice is lost.
Even worse, in my opinion, is when someone does reviews and tries to force their specific/individual style onto those authors. But this is definitely a topic for another thread!
Long sentences and sticky sentences are close enough to be considered the same topic IMO.
I’ve edited Wiki and changed Super Bowl to Grand Final. It’s easier than me having to remember all these technical terms. 
njc, as long as you know what you're doing, you're fine, because I sure as hell won't be able to help!
ps - K isn’t IV or 2, it’s potassium.
Last comment, then I'm going to snore like Alda. hehehe
Honest, this is true, I wondered what is so magnificent if one builds a satellite that needs to be manned/steered .... Clearly, I've (once again) completely forgotten about K's tendency to eliminate wanted and unwanted characters. My bad.
“Temperance is love surrendering itself wholly to Him who is its object; courage is love bearing all things gladly for the sake of Him who is its object; justice is love serving only Him who is its object, and therefore rightly ruling; prudence is love making wise distinction between what hinders and what helps itself.”
Compare it to:
Temperance is love surrendering itself wholly to Him who is its object. Courage is love bearing all things gladly for the sake of Him who is its object. Justice is love serving only Him who is its object, and therefore rightly ruling. Prudence is love making wise distinction between what hinders and what helps itself.
It's just not the same, is it? So apart from being a good example of a well written long sentence, it also serves as a really good example of using that semi-colon lad properly/with good effect. This is the first time I've read a sentence using semi-colons where it makes better sense - most writers (not all, most) should avoid semi-colons and rather go with two sentences. For them, it's most of the time an improvement. There are a few writers on the site that get semi-colons right, and making it looks easier than what it really is.
I think there must be something about unmarked change in POV that is confusing/annoying to me, and I wonder if the reason I cannot get into Romance is the tendency to swirl POV around . . . and the fact Romance is chick lit.
You're not alone! I now add "warnings" to my chapter summaries even though I only do that once. Some reviewers still struggle, and still don't like it, but instead of trying to change it according to their views/preference, accept it and soldier on. I appreciate that. But I'd still strongly recommend that if you have a problem with swirling POVs, to give Romance a wide berth unless you really need the points!
Chick lit is probably a subject for a whole new thread! I'm going to keep that one in my back pocket and use it for a discussion in the the Romance Group. Not sure it suits Literary Fiction all that much?! 
However, I satirized that same omniscient narrator (and thereby destroying the illusion it creates and incur wrath in editorial opinion) by having him introduce himself
This one I enjoyed, it's pretty original and witty IMO!
Alcohol, wearing clothes, food. Sounds like my type of gig! LOL I'll check it out!
Don't know what this has to do with cats and skunks, but it seemed pertinent as I read your comments.
It was probably the road-kill reference that done it?! LOL
And don't tell me Aus doesn't have venemous critters!
Not the furry fluffy kind ... But yeah, 6 of the top 10 deadliest snakes are from Downunder, so rattlesnakes, with a dab of vegemite, are what we call breakfast. *not really, but why not I ask*
I liked baseball - White Sox in Chicago once. I also managed a NFL game - Chicago Bears. (I have no idea who they played against!) I now believe my new team is the Seahawks - who bungled the final? In any case, I'm also nuts over ice-hockey. And to see us whoop some Canadian ass. hehehehe
StubHub - duly noted, we're going to need it! You guys are really handy - by the time we set foot on US soil, we'd be locals! 
Did I miss the special effects? *sad face too*
Not allergic to wine, but my palate is not well educated. That's a pity, since I probably have the talent for it.
My palate is educated enough. It either tastes good or it doesn't.
I'll just double up on whatever it is I'm getting Amy (and K) if that's ok with you. It's of course for all the advice you're still going to give me as well as future reviews when I start to post something one day. More on that on another thread. But the short of it is, I'm sort off in the same boat as you, I'm struggling to get words on paper these days. Never had the problem before. My third language is talking shit, we don't have problems like not being able to find words ...
njc - I was just kidding about the vegemite, poison ivy is really bad I've seen on TV. Are you allergic to wine?
Janet:
There are only two critters in North America that can face the grizzly bear without firearms. One of them is the polar bear. The other is the cat-sized, malodorous, chemical-weapon-equipped skunk.
In case you--or a household animal--should become the recipient of this nocturnal rodent's hindside blessings, you should know the remedy: bathe in fresh, cold tomato juice. I'm not kidding. You can look it up.
Please keep this kind of thing coming, we have no fluffy life threatening animals in Aus or that fart on people. For most, our wildlife is slow and sleepy - that's what happens if you're an animal on an island the size of the lower 48 states with nothing fast that wants to eat you and hence teach you how to run or counter-attack .... you eat, and you sleep, and you leave everyone alone. Snakes and spiders are not fluffy ..... And for most, our overweight grasshoppers just ignore people ....
I have no doubt my learning curve is going to go through the roof ....
*I just bought shares in tomato producers in WA - I suggest you do the same* <---- I'm joking now, but in reality, I just hope I don't ever need njc's advice!
Toledo, actually. I have a house in Cleveland as well (couldn't sell it if I tried).
I'll look up a second-hand clothing place if that idea doesn't bother you. Goodwill is one and they are all over the country. There will be something to fit everyone there and you won't have to sell your first-born (unless you want to) to pay for the clothing. It can get painfully pricey for good weather-proofing. Usually it isn't a problem to find anoraks and pullover fleece sweaters. The big bill is for coats and gloves. (Most good coats have hoods, so you don't have to worry too much about hats)
Goodwill is on the list, but only until my firstborn gives me trouble! I'll probably get you more than one bottle of wine, I have a feeling I'm going to say thank you a lot!
I''m allergic to Wixxel Grease, I'm afraid.
Latest groundbreaking research has shown that initial exposure to small quantity with a gradual increase over time to allergic substances is the best way to overcome said allergy .... So all hope is not lost yet njc!
Red, not too dry. I'd honestly like to try something that you like. It means this is recommended, so I'm sure it would be AWESOME!
No pressure! hehehe Oh well, this just means we'll have *sigh* to make time for a trip down to Margaret River ..... *big smile* Barossa Valley in South Australia is (a tiny tiny bit) better in my opinion, but please don't tell anyone, because I am proudly west australian!
Awww, thanks for the offer! I'm keeping an eye on the temperatures over there, and it looks like we will be able to survive the first week until we get our shopping done - we're geared for rainy weather at least - Perth's main rainy season is also during the winter months. And we're cooking at the moment, literally, bush fires are really bad this year, so if you hear of a crazy family of four walking around in short sleeve t's, that will be us cooling down! But seriously, if this changes for whatever reason, I'll let you know. Although I'm curious how we'd get our hands on the package without stepping out of the airport ..... You're in Cleveland, Ohio?
Vegemite: the Aussie verion of Poiled Slurgs.
Like poiled slurgs, only better!
*lovingly wraps amy's bottle of wine, and a bottle of yummy vegemite for njc who clearly has an appreciation for the finer things in life*
Lyrics playing from a group called Men at Work...
I come from a land down under...where women glow and men plunder...can you hear, can you hear the thunder?...You better run, you better take cover...(long bunch of lyrics and then) ...and made me a vegemite sandwich
Oh, the suggestion about the wine is all about getting a bottle for me. Purely selfish :-) (Hint, hint)
Hey, are you going to be buying everything new here? Or is your work going to ship your belongings over on a crate? If you're buying new, then I'll have a few more suggestions for you to save you money.
*you deserve a second curtsy* Not many people would pick that up ... and then find out what it's about. Mostly I imagine they'd shake their heads, and mumble under their breath "bloody aussies that think they speak English"
*talks shit with AFP for a little bit and then it's over and out - white noise goes away after a loud bleep*
Could you please be a bit more subtle (like in REALLY subtle) with your hinting? Red, white, dry, sweet .... I'll be able to sneak one, maybe two, pushing it but I'll try three, in!
Company is shipping our stuff over except for white goods since the voltage is different. And we didn't want to get there, something breaks and you can't get spare parts. My family thinks Xmas was late this year! So we'll need a new fridge, microwave oven, clothes dryer, etc. We were not allowed to pack any food stuff with our household goods. 
So what we bring, will have to go in the suitcases with us. But other than that, we're only planning to upgrade our winter clothing over in the States - I don't think my short sleeve t-shirts and drimac will do the trick in winter anymore ....
I want to build a clock that ticks once a year. The century hand advances once every one hundred years, and the cuckoo comes out on the millennium. I want the cuckoo to come out every millennium for the next 10,000 years.
I love it! Amy's nailed it - whimsical. Can only imagine the crowds when the century hand moves a click, can't imagine what it would look like when the cuckoo gets to fly (sort of)!
njc wrote:Janet's characters would think a tutu was an oversized neck ruff.
You guys are foggin the windows 'round here. I hope bimmy isn't blushing
says the one who started it .... *shakes head*
NJC. Wrong time period. Neck ruffs are Elizabethan and are from the 16th century.
He's got the right time period amy! We're in 1593, and during the later half of the century, ruffs were really the rage! Except on the border where some would say things were slow to happen, although in reality, they didn't have time for all kinds of shit. I don't mention it specifically to avoid confusion with the general perception of what neck ruffs looked like, namely the spectacular pieces Old Lizzie used to wear. As on the border, it was much more subdued, more collar like.
But either way, Johnny would be unmercifully mocked if he rocks up with a tutu and I won't be surprised if every single person he encounters tries to yank it up (HARD) to get it around his neck again ..... *kisses and hugs - this is specially for the guys*
Oh, latest thought about the move. Don't forget to stockpile Aussie foods when you come over. Vegemite is pretty rare around here. Also, I know there is a big wine community in the country. That would make gifts for Xmas and thank you that no one in the US would turn down.
I think I need a bigger suitcase ..... Will see what I can do! Don't need xmas gifts so much this time of year, but I have a lot of thank you's to get around to ... Aussie goodies vs thank you gifts. Life's all about hard decisions, heh?
ps - How do you know about Vegemite?! *listens to white noise while trying to radio the Australian Federal Police*
That's great news Jeanie! Congrats!!!! And thanks for remembering all the hard work I've put in. Yeah, it was blood, sweat and tears reading about Sam and fixing all those nits. *Not really, I just said that because I don't want to be kicked out of Fight Club for being too nice! *
In terms of reviews, I've started back at Chapter 1 again (it's called NS (version 2), very original!) as I got to about mid-way and then had 3 big changes I needed to work through and it was getting hard to keep up. I'm also hoping to finish the first 3 chapters for the SS2015, but I don't have a lot of time for writing these days. But I'm trying. So at least where I'm concerned, you're not too far behind!
My favourite writer, a #1 NY Times bestseller, writes paragraphs that's one sentence - I'm not talking 30-40 words, I'm talking 60+ words. But there's no need to re-read any of it to figure it out. In some scenes (love scenes specifically), she shifts between the male and female MC POV's continously (easily 6 or more POV changes) with no separation between paragraphs.
I'm so used to it, I'm really not the best person to critique the use of omniscient POV that ended up in head-hopping (I don't see a difference to be honest), so I leave that to others! (that's my excuse at least!)
I stick to short sentences for now, and limit my POV changes within the same scene to one (without using any locigal separation - I've received a lot of advice and support from writers on the site to make that transition smooth as possible). Also, it's my first attempt at writing, so I don't have the confidence (yet) to mix things up. But who knows, maybe one day?!
Sigh. Another thing I overlooked in my circuit change. I can try to shoehorn another resistor in, but instead I'm looking at yet another topology change, which might sharpen the low-level ON transition. It means trying a source follower configuration as a current source and taking the output from the mosfet drain. I've never used that before, so I expect I'll have to play with it a bit. OTOH it will get some troublesome things out of the way and reduce the congestion at the edge of the board where the power rails are.
Looks like it's idea time again ....
Idea #(x+1)
where x = the number of my last idea
A big, strong magnet to keep the headset and the phone body connected. You can even be fancy and use an electromagnet instead of a boring, normal one ....
But in any case, I think it's time for a photo or two again? Or is it way too soon so be asking?
amy s wrote:You have really wicked bugs in Australia, don't you?
I've heard the bugs aren't bad so long as you don't try to order a drink in their bars.
True! Our bugs sober are push-overs!
