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Just to keep you in the loop: I'm working on backstory involving Erevain and his prentice-master, Niccano.  What caused Niccano to pull up shop from a world near the center of sorcerous commerce and move to the sticks of the sticks, with his apprentice in tow?  He had long habit and skill snooping into the secrets around him so that he could avoid stepping into them openly and accidentally?  When he stumbled into a danger he could never have imagined, in a secret that could look back at him, what did he tell Erevain to justify the move yet conceal his knowledge?

Did he die, or just fake his death and disappear into a non-sorcerous world, beyond the eye, if not the reach, of the worst danger the Worlds ever faced?  (This question I don't answer now, but I have to know what Erevain sees and believes.)

Whom does Niccano trust as a courier and business front to bring commissions to Erevain, and completed work back?

Once I have some answers here, I can flesh out his role in the next few chapters.

Major congratulations here!  You've won a fan in the Fourth Estate, and she can't hld her praise in.

I've just had an insight on Everain and his mentor Nikkano.  I know more of their backstory now, and I have to rework the next Erevain chapter to fit.

I've got some open questions, too.  See Dr. Dmitri Vapnoodle.

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i suppose you've got a literary cockroach typing there?  Which makes the thing even  more icky.

I wouldn't tell him if I were you

Isn't there a way to tell the browser to display via local time?  I wonder if the time supplied is Zulu time, as it should be.

I took another look at Acts, and wonder whether you could break the story soon after Alina's demise, or with the announcement that Zyrtec's quarters are in Kha's building.

Also, and this qualifies as a problem, in one of the containment jar chapters, you have Katerin claim knowledge of the layout of Kha's rooms.  How can she?

This male reader is in love with Katerin.  Do you expect your female readers to lust after Anver?

Oh, that snickering knife.  I hope you're hanging something important on it.

Now, larger question: do you have an overarching title for the whole work.  Something like Long Shadow of the Chronomancer or Earthwound?  Or The Ages of Magic?  Or a quote from My Name is John Wellington Wells?

If the series title includes 'Chronomancer' you could blurb Kha's line about Chronomancers seeing multiple futures ... two apples short of a pie.

I'd hold this use for the big battle, or for a small battle critical to it in the run-up.

In the first couple of chapters, you mention The Overseer.  I'm guessing that's the Mage Master Geron.  You can use that to get the politics in, as well as the structure of the schools.

All of this works with what I wrote above.  You just need to name him--and the process--earlier  His appearance fulfills the anticipation and answers the curiosity that you set up.

The real Q? is why Geron the Mage Master allows Alina to do this.  'twould  be good to mention Geron and explain why he allows it (he would be outvoted by all the other misbirths on the council).  Maybe even mention that Anver considered approaching him, but knew if he lost everyone on the council would have a general warrant on all things and all persons Kha.

Maybe even have that as subtext (later explained) in the argument between Alina and Anver.  Give Tilly a chance to get good and riled as Anver explains--one more reason for her to hate Katerin.