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Marilyn Johnson wrote:

They are not saying don't use the words on that list in your book.  Just don't use them in a tagline.  If you use something other than 'said,' then ask yourself 'how can each word smile out of my mouth?'  Or how can each word chide out of my mouth, volunteer out of my mouth... etc.  Most of them cannot be done physically.  As Moonshine told me, there are always exceptions, and there are places where nothing else you use can hammer that one important thought any better than a tagline.

Grammatical or not,l I think the site has a pedantic take on the whole issue. Anyone, with a modicum of critical thought, understands very well that "Hello," he smiled means that the speaker smiled as he said hello. That is different than saying, "Hello." He smiled. or He smiled. "Hello."

Not only does it create a clear picture of a man saying Hello with a smile on his face, but does so more efficiently than it would if he wrote out what a vast majority of readers would understand without a second thought: "Hello," he said with a smile. The quotation marks should make clear to any reader that he said, so including those words is redundant, whereas "smiled" draws a clear picture of how he said it and what his mood was in the greeting. A clear, concise, and efficient piece of writing.

Memphis Trace

Here's a great bio of Kady: https://www.civilwarwomenblog.com/kady-brownell/

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cobber wrote:

I've been reading numerous articles on eBook pricing and was wondering if some veterans had advice  on what a good price point is for a first time author publishing a fiction book. The book is 450 pages, so rather substantial. I workshopped it here and had it edited so it's pretty well written. I was thinking $4.99. Not expensive but also not so cheap that people think it's a real self-publishing hack. Thanks for any advice.

3 or 4 years ago, I read something that said $2.99 was the best price point in general. I have priced a 400 pp. book at $3.99 much for the same reasons you give (Not expensive but also not so cheap that people think it's a real self-publishing hack.)

Here https://www.justpublishingadvice.com/7- … egy-ideas/ is an article that talks about pricing strategies.

Memphis Trace

vern wrote:

I Have a Dream! That we as a nation rouse our sleeping common sense and shout at the top of our lungs, "No more. No more." No more of the incompetent political juggernaut which is destroying the hope which gave birth to this great country. No more political acquiescence to the lies and hatred emanating from what should be a bright and shining light beckoning the rest of the world to follow our path to freedom and tolerance. No more threats to any who would question a would be god who dresses in self glorification demanding loyalty when none is due or given in return. No more ....

Take care. Vern

Hear, hear!!!
Memphis Trace

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Dill Carver wrote:

I suppose that'd be crème brûlée?

Why do North Americans feel a compulsion and the sense of entitlement to hijack bastardise and dumb-down every word they find personally inconvenient? 

Ignorance, arrogance or both?

I'm afraid that is what first comes to mind when I read...

Norm d'Plume wrote:

creme brule

Sorry, but it just is.

In my case it is the arrogance that comes from knowing my audience. I know I can save a few disremembered keystrokes and have a proper picture of what I am communicating flash up for colonists. When there is even the slightest chance it will also render apoplectic a Brit—or preferably a Frenchman— spellchecking hall monitor, I consider it a triumph of wordsmithery.

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From the same writer's site
Sid's family hires a stripper to entertain him in the old folks' home for his birthday.
After she gets down to her nothing-at-all, the stripper whispers in his ear, "Would you like some super sex?"
Sid thinks for a second, then replies, "I'll take the soup."

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Saw this on another writer's site:
An Irishman walks into a bar on Saturday and orders four beers.  He clinks his glass to other beers and drinks them all down. 
He does this every Saturday so the bartender asks him why the four beers ritual.  He replies" Och you'd be noticin. I miss me three broders in Ireland.  We agreed that every Saturday we'd toast each other with glass o' Guinness.
This goes on for some time ordering the four beers and downing them each week.
Then one Saturday the Irishman comes in and only orders three beers which he downs easily.  The bartender approaches cautiously.  "I'm so sorry to hear of your loss."
The Irishman replies "Och. Wad y'a mean?"
"Well," the bartenders says, "you have been toasting your three brothers with your beer and now you are only ordering three beers instead of four so I assumed one of your brothers has died."
The Irishman laughs. "Oh no.  Me broders is all in the best of health" he says, "its me that given up drinkin."

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RIP, Sonny.

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Westinghousestation

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njc wrote:

This was a book recommendation, not an invitation to a Jaegermonster bar fight.

For me, it turned out better than you intended. Almost any controversial subject, or subject that can be made controversial, brings out the best in the good critical thinkers and the worst in the poor critical thinkers.

It is the way humans have separated the wheat from the chaff ever since they started to communicate. You've advanced civilization even further than you expected to.

Memphis Trace

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Ask not for whom the Bells of the world troll, they troll for thee.

I appreciate your taking the time Mr. Carver to expose him, once again, for what he is.

Memphis Trace

Memphis Trace wrote:
Mariana Reuter wrote:

Where can this short story be read?

Kiss,

Gacela.

I don't believe either of Paul's winners these last two years have been published. I will check.

It occurs to me that it would be a great thing for TNBW members if winners of prestigious contests could post their winning entries on TNBW, even if they are no longer a member.

¿Maybe members interested in reading contest winners could form a group that would donate the points needed to post contest winning entries to be read by their members?

In the meantime, I will ask Paul if he would be interested in my posting his stories here for his friends, fans, and public to read.

Memphis

Hello again, Mariana.

I contacted Paul and he sent this reply:
I think I am a non-paying member of the site but can't post anything. At one time "Gracie" was posted there, but I think I took it off when I sent it to the Faulkners, as it's not supposed to be available anywhere when it's in competition. As the winning piece they will publish it in their ezine, The Double Dealer, which seems to come out irregularly. If Mariana would like to read the story you can forward it to her or I can send it if you give me her email.

Paul operated on TNBW under the pen name of skeptikoi. I don't want to flash anyone's email address publicly, but let me know how I can put you in communication with Paul.

Memphis

Mariana Reuter wrote:

Where can this short story be read?

Kiss,

Gacela.

I don't believe either of Paul's winners these last two years have been published. I will check.

It occurs to me that it would be a great thing for TNBW members if winners of prestigious contests could post their winning entries on TNBW, even if they are no longer a member.

¿Maybe members interested in reading contest winners could form a group that would donate the points needed to post contest winning entries to be read by their members?

In the meantime, I will ask Paul if he would be interested in my posting his stories here for his friends, fans, and public to read.

Memphis

Former TNBW stalwart, Jim Bourey, won 2nd place in this year's poetry competition for his poem  A Charm Against Loneliness, Rashes, Bad Days, Loup Garou and the Early Stages of Despair

Jim entertained us with his poems and helped us with his fine and witty reviews for many years here on TNBW.

Judge Mark Yakich, widely published poet and editor of The New Orleans Review, had this to say about Jim's poem:
One tends to forget that charms and chants were among the first poetic utterances…this one offers an anodyne for modern despair.

Here is a link to all the winners in this year's William Faulkner-William Wisdom Creative Writing Competition: https://wordsandmusic.org/2016-william- … mpetition/

Join me in congratulating Jim for his win. He also won in 2014.

Memphis

Former TNBW stalwart, Paul Negri, was the winner for the 2nd year in a row in the Short Story Competition. This year Gracie under Fire won.

Judge Adam Johnson, winner of both the Pulitzer Prize and the National Book Award, had this to say about his choice for winner:

Closely observed and darkly comic, Gracie under Fire disarms the reader early. Though the story opens with a young narrator revealing her sexuality at a funeral, this deft story is neither a meditation on loss nor a coming-out narrative; instead, themes of frailty, exclusion, vulnerability and inevitability intersect when Judith insinuates herself into the life of an ailing Gracie. A rare and delicious character, Judith can’t help but usher herself into front-row seating for the final screening of other people’s lives.

Also, Paul's story Saving the Jews was a finalist, and his story The Plumber's Daughter was a semifinalist.

Here is a link to a list of all the winners of the William Faulkner-William Wisdom Creative Writing Competition: https://wordsandmusic.org/2016-william- … mpetition/

Many TNBW folks were the beneficiaries of Paul's wise counsel and reviews for several years. Join me in congratulating him.

Memphis

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The scruffy cockalorum has nothing to say now: I'm five months gone, but where are the breasts he promised?

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Charles_F_Bell wrote:
Memphis Trace wrote:

Donald Trump did not call women "pussies." And, obviously, he was allowed to speak this way in private about assaulting women by grabbing women by one of the few parts of a woman's body that he seems to be interested in.

A woman of a self-identified undecided's Fox focus group stood up and actually said that any man who would say those things even in private is wrong. That is what I mean. A kind of thought-control policing.

Losing the votes of women who think he is wrong is the price of sexual assault. Notice how quickly he backtracked. He now says it is only words. 

Memphis Trace wrote:

Since that time he has claimed he has never done the things he bragged about in his "locker room" talk; since that time several women have stepped forward to say that he has done just that.

The floodgates are now open.

At which point, by action, the braggadocio, then and only then, becomes relevant.  But through the last 40 years of Trump's life, no such accusation ever came forward until three weeks before a Presidential election (and uncorroborated) - unlike for Bill Clinton, and, by the way, for Bill Cosby where all along through decades there had been some accusations of indecent conduct.

Now we will see how well he holds up under the ordeal. It is the price one pays for locker room talk.

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Charles_F_Bell wrote:
njc wrote:

I still feel that 'tw*t' is obscene.  I note that 'twattle' has also been spelled 'twaddle'.

https://en.oxforddictionaries.com/definition/twat

2. A person regarded as stupid or obnoxious.

https://en.oxforddictionaries.com/definition/twattle

Trivial or foolish speech.

When I first came across the word 'twat' in England I did not actually know some Americans' use of the word and associated it then with 'twattle.' I still like the association because metaphorically I think the words are associated with women, and in England both words are used by and against men in exactly the same way when the coach or army sergeant calls his men "pussies" when they underperform. This line of association brings to mind the  pc climate in which now men are not allowed to speak this way to other men even in private [viz. Donald Trump/Billy Bush].

Donald Trump did not call women "pussies." And, obviously, he was allowed to speak this way in private about assaulting women by grabbing women by one of the few parts of a woman's body that he seems to be interested in.

Since that time he has claimed he has never done the things he bragged about in his "locker room" talk; since that time several women have stepped forward to say that he has done just that.

100 years ago a man running for president would have lost no women's votes because of his locker room talk. Apparently, he has lost very few votes among the women of the modern day "Party of Lincoln". Indeed, one woman at a recent Trump rally was standing in the crowd with a tee shirt that read, Talk dirty to me, Donald.

I can see how it would be hard for a poor fellow like Donald to know how to win the hearts and minds of women voters, particularly since those aren't the parts of a woman's body that interest him. ¿Maybe he should try grabbing them by the hand? That's the voting part of the body in most states.

Memphis Trace

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Dill Carver wrote:

Barbiturate

For my whole life since I first read this word, I have written barbituate. ¿I guess I've not written it since I got a spell corrector?

Memphis

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njc wrote:

Having tantalized us, Corra, will you please tell us what that's from?

It is an excerpt from Their Eyes were Watching God by Zora Neale Hurston.

The story made Time's 2005 100-best novels published since 1923 http://entertainment.time.com/2005/10/1 … 0-novels/.

Memphis Trace

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bimmy wrote:

Only one report of a head injury. Some structural damages near the epicenter. Our governer demanded all fracking cease immediately since the epicenter was an injection well.

A while back a friend told me that Oklahoma had more earthquakes than any other state. He said they blame it on fracking.

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Janet Taylor-Perry wrote:

Short Story


OTHER FINALISTS
Saving the Jews, Paul Negri, Clifton, NJ

SEMI-FINALISTS
The Plumber’s Daughter, Paul Negri, Clifton, NJ

Great to see that former TNBW stalwart, Paul Negri, aka skeptikoi is busily writing award-winning stories.

Memphis

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A.T.Schlesinger wrote:

Different people will see different things when reading this.

Some will see a list of lottery winners. Others will see hard working, creative geniuses and think, "I could be on that list one day."  Others will see a list of writers who compromised their art to appeal to the Great Unwashed.

Me?

[SNIP]

Who was 15th?

Memphis Trace

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wiener

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in purgatory