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Helena Seryma wrote:

Hi, I'm new here and also new to writing. I just finished my first novel and is struggling to edit it. I've received mixed reviews from friends and beta readers. It seriously needs work. So last year I started posting short stories on wattpad and someone directed me here for help and improving.

Welcome to the site, Helena.  Hope you find the help you're looking for.  We have many talented writers and reviewers here.

Good luck!
MJ

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30 words added to our vocabulary by William Shakespeare:

https://www.dailywritingtips.com/30-wor … akespeare/

Why do you think I use an alias on here anyway?  My real name is Moheeldey Juvawandereichering IV.  But that can easily be found on Google.  So I shortened it to just MJ.

Temple Wang wrote:

Dear Closing the Barn Door After the Cows Have Gotten Out,

You’re kidding, right?  What rock have you been under the last decade?
It’s there forever, man ... welcome to the internet and the Twenty-First Century ...

It’s been said ... many times, many ways ...

The one I’d like to discuss briefly today is the so-called “Front Page of the Newspaper” test, or sometimes “The New York Times Rule.” In one of its standard versions, it gets stated this way: “never do anything you wouldn’t want to see reported on the front page of the New York Times.”

“the old adage that one should never write in an email what you would never want to see published on the front page of your local newspaper.”

“26. Never electronically send ANYTHING you wouldnt want printed on the front page on the newspaper. Even if you delete it, it can still be found.”

Take heart in this: you can always hope your life will be like mine —not interesting enough for anybody to care what you ever said online ...

Sorry to break the news to you.
LOL

OMG!  You made me laugh with those, Temple!  (Sorry, Dirk, but 'tis true what she said!)

Dirk,
Pull down the tab for your profile.  Edit profile.  Half-way down there is a box that reads:  Make my profile page visible to  ... you have choices.  Choose the one that says only logged-in members that are not blocked.

I had that same problem once upon a time, and changing that setting cured it for me.  Someone else may know a different way to go about it, but I was flabbergasted to learn that even my forum posts could be seen by anyone who pulled up my name with a Google search.  These forum posts I consider for consumption only by members of this site.  After I changed it, I didn't find my posts online under google anymore.

Hope this helps.
MJ

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Congrats and kudos!  How exciting for you!

MJ

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My all-time favorite that I repeat frequently:

"I get up in the morning, put on a pot of coffee, light a cigar, and just start lying!”
~~Mark Twain when asked how he wrote so well.

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Mark S. Moore wrote:

Have you ever had a character you killed off in any of your works that you were attached to?

Yes!  I cried when Mellie died!  Though I haven't finished For the Love of Mellie yet, I got attached to her very early and cried when I had to eliminate her!

MJ

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Christine Dreier wrote:

Thanks, Marilyn. I was going to read the article, hoping to learn more about horses as they play an important role in my story as well. Any books or other resources you can recommend for learning about horses for this city girl?

Gosh, I didn't mean to hone in on njc's post here.  Sorry about that!

Probably one of the better posts I've found is here:  https://straightnesstraining.com/the-ri … our-horse/

It's not instructive so much as telling, but it brings out a lot of good points.  It stresses the part about how confused a horse gets without leadership, and how his owner becoming the leader makes a much better human/horse relationship. 

If I can help you with anything, just shout!!

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j p lundstrom wrote:

What does Marilyn think about it?  JP

Well...since you asked!!

Marilyn thinks it was written by someone who doesn't have a clue about horses.  The first thing I noticed was calling the horse IT throughout, which is a pet peeve of mine.  If you don't know an animal's gender, always say HE. 

One blatant mistake encouraged in the article is hitting a horse in the mouth for biting.  That never works and never stops a bad habit.  You control a horse with your body language, not with threats, shouts, or hitting.  You don't shove or push, and you never expect a horse to understand human emotions.  They don't.

They are prey animals.  They only know two emotions—fight or flight.  Hitting one in the mouth for biting will not change that bad behavior.  You stop a horse from biting by putting your hand firmly on his mouth and pulling his head toward you so you're looking in his eyes.  They are scared of eyes because their predators look them in the eye before attacking.  You firmly, without shouting, tell him NO!  Be consistent with this.  He will associate biting with you being a predator, and he will stop.  You never reward bad behavior with a treat.  I use clicker training on all of them.  They do what you ask, you immediately click your tongue and give them a small treat.  I personally keep a pocket full of sugar-free grain and they get a couple of grains for a job well done.  You'd be surprised how eager they are to please when they know they will be rewarded.  It makes training much easier.

I laughed out loud when the article said if a horse kicks you, kick him back.  Again, that doesn't work.  A horse that kicks does so out of fear.  Remember...they know 2 emotions...and fight and fear are the same thing.  If you get kicked, it's because you have not gained the horse's trust, so you can only blame yourself for it.  Kicking a horse does nothing but make the situation worse.

Okay, I didn't mean to rant.  But there's so much more to being around horses comfortably and safely than what this article covered.  I've successfully owned and trained horses for the last 60 years, and I've never been bitten by the same horse twice, nor have I been kicked by the same horse twice.  Patience and understanding are always needed.  You become the 'lead mare' in your herd of horses and control them with your body language.

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It's your story, and their relationship can go as fast as you want it to.  My daughter and her husband were married six weeks after they first met, and they've been together almost 25 years and still devoted to each other.  Love works in mysterious ways. 

I'm anxious to see where the road takes Brad and Molly. 

MJ

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Blessing Okebugwu wrote:

Hello, good morning please I need to get my book published for an ongoing competition, please I need your help to read my book Smashed by the axe

Hi, Blessing (love that name!)
I'd love to help you with your book, but you'll need to post your first chapter.  May I suggest you join the Premium Group for the most exposure because it's the largest group on the site. 

Then when you get the first chapter ready for posting, on the publish page check for the groups you want to post it to.  Check the Premium Group and any other group you'd like to join, and we'll review it for you.  You gain points for posting by reviewing other writers' work. 

Good luck!
MJ

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Nkechiyerem Emenike wrote:

Hello, good to be here! I am Kech.  Is TheNextBigWriter still active?  I see only three books on home page.

Hi, friend,
There are many more books than three, but you will need to join more groups to see them.  If you're not a member of the Premium Group, I would suggest joining (it's free to join any group).  Just go through the Group selections and pick out the ones that appear most active.  Once you join, the books posted in those groups will show up on the front page.

Cheers,
MJ

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D S Sistare wrote:

I live directly in the path of Florence, on the NC/SC line below Charlotte.

My dearest and best friend lives in your town.  She said Rock Hill got hit pretty hard with wind and rain.  Good to know you're safe.

MJ

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Temple Wang wrote:
Marilyn Johnson wrote:

For anyone besides myself who is in the path of this monster, stay safe!  I'm in the northeastern corner of Georgia, one mile from the SC state line at Anderson.  We're on high alert and waiting to see which way it turns.  Our governor has declared Georgia in a state of emergency.  I'm on the downside of the dam at Hartwell Lake, which is a manmade lake with 1000 miles of shoreline.  Here's hoping the floodgates open on time because we're scheduled for some massive rain in our area and high winds!  Not really a good time to live in the forest as I do!!   

Fingers and toes crossed on this one!

MJ

I was in the middle of this one yesterday from 10:00am to 5:00pm in Shenzhen/Hong Kong.  Typhoon Mangkhut (Force 10 (equivalent to Hurricane  Category 5)).  I’ve been in the middle of over two dozen hurricanes in the last twenty-two years - never one like this ...
https://www.huffingtonpost.com/entry/ty … 32ebf9186b

Oh, my gosh, Temple!  What a horrible event for you.  You had to be frightened out of your mind.  Glad to hear you're okay and lived to tell about it.  Nothing any more powerful than Mother Nature.  I haven't heard any of that on our news...guess it's because they've been so busy covering Hurricane Florence here.

Did those in charge ask for mandatory evacuation, or do they leave it up to the individual to decide if they want to ride if out?  Just wondering how your country handles these potentially catastrophic events.

MJ

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jack the knife wrote:

I' was without power for two days but now back on line. Still raining, though, and speaking of that, did the dam hold, Marilyn?

Good to hear you're okay, Jack.  I saw the videos of your town with the streets flooded and more to come.  Also saw the downed power lines in places.  I wondered if you'd evacuated, or if you rode out the storm. 

The dam held just fine.  It didn't get as bad here as they had predicted, thank goodness.  The brunt of it went just east of me.  We had some high winds and torrential downpours, but since I'm on high ground, no flooding.  No big trees blown over.  There's a measuring pole in the water where I live, and it indicated the lake had risen only about a foot, so the Corps of Engineers didn't have to take any drastic measures to open the floodgates.  All in all, it could have been much worse for us.

Hope it stops the deluge up your way soon.  Stay safe!

MJ

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Seabrass wrote:

Are you a good swimmer?

Prime example of why I rescue 4-legged asses instead of 2-legged ones.

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For anyone besides myself who is in the path of this monster, stay safe!  I'm in the northeastern corner of Georgia, one mile from the SC state line at Anderson.  We're on high alert and waiting to see which way it turns.  Our governor has declared Georgia in a state of emergency.  I'm on the downside of the dam at Hartwell Lake, which is a manmade lake with 1000 miles of shoreline.  Here's hoping the floodgates open on time because we're scheduled for some massive rain in our area and high winds!  Not really a good time to live in the forest as I do!!   

Fingers and toes crossed on this one!

MJ

What do you want your reader to believe?  The church thinks he may be Christ who has returned.  Do you want the readers to think the same thing?  Using the same route he used in the Bible will be more convincing to Christian readers.  To non-Christian readers, it won't make a difference because they are most likely unfamiliar with the original route unless they've studied the Bible as a history lesson.  So, in my opinion, it depends on what you want your readers to think.  I personally think discussing his life in chronological order makes more sense than hopping all over the place. 

For what it's worth! 
MJ

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Have you tried this page?  https://www.agentquery.com/publishing_ip.aspx 
On the left, you'll see an agent query column.  Enter your info and you'll get a list of agents accepting queries.  Each one has a profile and a list of some of their accomplishments. 
Another source is https://www.pnwa.org/page/agents_editors? 

I can't personally recommend any of them but ran across these compilations in my own search for an agent.

Hope this helps.

MJ

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Climb = ascend; go up. 

Therefore, is 'climb down' an oxymoron?  I've never been comfortable using 'climb down' in a sentence, so what's your opinion?  If you feel the same, what do you say instead?  Just curious.

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I don't mind when our threads stray a little, but I do detest ultracrepidarians.  Some closed accounts are a reason for celebration.  With that said, I personally have changed POVs in short stories, but I separate them with ***. More a matter of preference for me.

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Thought some of us may find this helpful.
http://www.writersdigest.com/revision-s … -narrative

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Ann Everett wrote:

Funny, MJ!!! If I go with a boy/girl combination...maybe I should name them Hunky and Dory!! Ritter's son should be a  "hunk" like his dad...and in the movie, Finding Dory... Dory the fish is pretty quirky...so she'd match up with True!

That would be a hoot!  It's funny when folks read For the Love of Mellie and come across the two donkeys named Hunky and Dory.  But in real life Hunky and Dory are alive and well and living on my farm!

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Ann Everett wrote:

I'm mainly looking for something that goes well with the last name Malone.

The boy could be Sylvester.  As in Sylvester Malone, not Stallone.  Sly for short. 
A girl could be Sasha (that was one of Sylvester Stallone's wives.)

But this is coming from someone who has two donkeys in her book named Hunky and Dory, so what do I know???

Never mind!  LOL!