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626 2017-05-15 18:06:23
Re: Say the first word that comes to mind... (1,634 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)
627 2017-05-13 22:55:27
Re: Say the first word that comes to mind... (1,634 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)
Hedonism
628 2017-05-11 12:07:53
Re: eyes going wide (5 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)
Well, to start with if you're using "his" it isn't coming from the pov of the character speaking since he is referred to in third person. And one doesn't need to "see" that they widen their eyes; outside of looking in a mirror, it is a feeling. But beyond that, it is doubtful anyone outside a reviewing site such as this would notice or care about such a distinction. If it flows naturally within the context presented, I would not be concerned about it. Of course you could use a completely different description to show the same effect without saying it directly should you wish to eliminate the nit pick entirely. In the end, if it fits your ear and thoughts, then I would stick with your gut feeling until such time as a royalty paying entity makes such a suggestion. Good luck. Take care. Vern
629 2017-05-08 23:13:59
Re: Did you ever think of those perfect words... (14 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)
Okay, all these are wonderful ideas, but unfortunately under the situation Seabrass described, he didn't have time to use a phone or write something down, so you just have to repeat the scenario to yourself as often as can be afforded at the moment and hope it sinks in. I've also found that if I relax and try to visualize exactly what I was doing and thinking at the moment of inspiration, it often comes back to me. Other than that, you might try a voice activated recorder and strap it to your person in the least offensive manner possible. Good luck. Take care. Vern
630 2017-05-08 01:38:05
Re: Say the first word that comes to mind... (1,634 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)
Dagger to the heart
631 2017-05-07 13:55:04
Re: Say the first word that comes to mind... (1,634 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)
Because
632 2017-05-07 03:47:33
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Hummingbird
633 2017-05-06 01:17:50
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Nymph
634 2017-05-05 12:20:56
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Doris
635 2017-05-05 02:01:10
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Boxing
636 2017-05-04 22:02:16
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It's always 5 o'clock somewhere
637 2017-05-03 02:10:09
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Preacher
638 2017-05-02 22:46:55
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Shorts
639 2017-05-02 12:41:42
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Golden
640 2017-05-02 00:43:28
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Dark lightning
641 2017-05-01 23:03:05
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Flash Gordon
642 2017-04-29 22:45:57
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Amos and Andy
643 2017-04-28 22:41:36
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Any ol' ho
644 2017-04-28 12:18:55
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devil in disguise
645 2017-04-27 02:20:51
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snow halos
646 2017-04-26 22:40:28
Re: Locked Door Contest Winners (12 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)
Congrats to those who won and all who entered also. Take care. Vern
647 2017-04-25 22:56:44
Re: Say the first word that comes to mind... (1,634 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)
belly button
648 2017-04-24 20:26:07
Re: Say the first word that comes to mind... (1,634 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)
pancakes
649 2017-04-23 22:06:23
Re: Say the first word that comes to mind... (1,634 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)
corra wrote:
(I am still teasing you. Grin on my face, and such. Not easy to see online, so I thought I should say so! My uncle and I do this all the time at the dining room table. He often hauls out the "I am older and know more" empty argument as proof of things, to his detriment.)
There was no doubt in my mind it was all in jest and would hope that my perhaps less artful tongue-in-cheek grin also was evident. And with that I respond to your Buffalo below. Take care. Vern
NICKEL
650 2017-04-22 22:56:36
Re: Say the first word that comes to mind... (1,634 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)
corra wrote:
vern wrote:He walks into the sunset.
Well said!
I'm not convinced by your argument. The fact that a bunch of people who write westerns voted for their top ten favorites is still just opinion. They haven't said why they claim Shane as a favorite in this article -- only (it seems) that they personally prefer it, which is still ultimately an opinion. If what you mean to argue is that Shane is your favorite, that's a valid argument and we shake hands. Telling me that it is the best is negotiable and you haven't yet convinced me... or, it seems, the president of the group of writers you cite.
My mother used to watch westerns all the time with her brother and dad. The old kind, like Shane. She's seen A TON of them. She says Shane is good and I should watch it, and Tombstone is also good, but the greatest Western of all time is How the West Was Won. She then reminded me that I exist because of her. I find that to be an impenetrable argument.
Well, yeah, of course it's opinion - that's a given like everything about art -- and you can't argue with your mother, so let me know what you think of Shane after you watch it. BTW, as challenged, I did offer substantial subjective proof outside myself or yourself; just saying, lol. Take care. Vern
