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Malarkey

Bunny

Suitable for framing

Well, to start with if you're using "his" it isn't coming from the pov of the character speaking since he is referred to in third person. And one doesn't need to "see" that they widen their eyes; outside of looking in a mirror, it is a feeling. But beyond that, it is doubtful anyone outside a reviewing site such as this would notice or care about such a distinction. If it flows naturally within the context presented, I would not be concerned about it. Of course you could use a completely different description to show the same effect without saying it directly should you wish to eliminate the nit pick entirely. In the end, if it fits your ear and thoughts, then I would stick with your gut feeling until such time as a royalty paying entity makes such a suggestion. Good luck. Take care. Vern

Dagger to the heart

Hummingbird

Doris

It's always 5 o'clock somewhere

Shorts

Dark lightning

Amos and Andy