Northern Skies - Janet! (Page 10 of 21)

Yes, and you're behind! Chapter 6 has been posted over the weekend ...

I'm a little bit worried now, and I'm not even sure I should ask the question for fear of waking up monsters no one has been seeing or knew existed! Deep breaths. So here goes to all that has been reading NS ...

So far no one had a problem with how Matthew is handling the attack. But his name was mentioned in close proximity of a clipboard in a recent review. Which is true, he is pretty much standing around, barking orders and asking questions ... and not much else. But he can't do everything and he is using his men (and their talents) (I think) cleverly and in optimized ways, which doesn't leave him with enough space to shine YET. He'd soon be taking a hands-on approach with Anthony, and Catherine, and a few other things I have planned.

Also, it's not exactly the easiest circumstances to have your hero and heroine meet, but that's no excuse. And I'm not going to change it in any case. I'm just saying it's not a simple "Oh dear, there floats my childhood friend down the river, I should kick my horse into flight, grab her by the arm and drag her to safety where I ravage her, punching my chest like King Kong." Matthew is more subtle and way too clever for that! IMO of course.

So basically, I'm just wondering if I should be worried about this or not? Is Matthew coming across like a complete wimp? Or is it something that is okay for now, as long as it doesn't go on and on and on for the rest of the book ....

I also have some concerns for the next chapter, but I'll leave that for when it's up for reviews.

Thanks!

To me as well. He'll need to show a bit of prowess soon, but I'm willing to wait.

You know what's coming with Anthony, so I was thinking I should be okay. Thanks!

Steve Smith was freshly promoted to an executive position, complete with a window office with (gasp!) a lock on the door.  He was getting ready to leave on Wednesday when the phone rang.  He answered it and a heavily accented voice declared "Mr. Smith, this is the Viper.  I am coming for you on Tuesday."

Steve had no time for jokes.  He hung up, locked up, and went home.

On Thursday, there was another call:  "Mr. Smith, this is the Viper.  I am coming for you on Tuesday."

"Who is this?" snarled Smith.

"I told you.  I am the Viper!"

Steve hung up.

On Friday, the same call came.  The Viper, it seemed, had one purpose in mind: To come for Steve Smith on Tuesday.

Smith tried to shake it off, but he slept very badly over the weekend.

Monday passed, and no call came.  But Steve was just locking his office when the phone rang.  He wanted to walk away, but part of him wanted to have it out with this Viper, whoever he was.  As he feared, or perhaps hoped, the call was from the Viper.  "Tomorrow, Mr. Smith.  I come for you tomorrow, at this hour!"

Steve smith wasn't so sure this was a joke.

On Tuesday, he waited, his mouth dry, as the day wound to its end.  He'd gotten a little work done in the morning, and almost none in the afternoon.  Now, as he waited, there was a noise in the hall.  Then the doorknob began to turn.

The door swung open, revealling a short man in coveralls and a battered cap.  In his right hand, he carried a red bucket that sploshed when he moved.  "Mr. Smith, finally you are here!  Every day I come, and every day your door is locked.  Finally, I can come and vipe de vindows!

My GM ran it as an episode. Had us all in fits.

Okay, that's funny!

I'm glad this week is over. It officially ended Friday evening 10pm. The last meeting was ... dinner. I love food (too much to be honest LOL) but even being fed wasn't enough to not make me wish it was over already.

Okay, so I have done a few reviews today at least. Yesterday was a complete loss. Totally. I have NOTHING to show for it. I may have made lunch for the kids. Maybe. I am so good at procrastination, I'm actually tired from doing nothing. All the while I have my next chapter written, I just need to check it and post it, but ... I don't think it's a good chapter. After a WHOLE chapter of Catherine and Matthew talking, I give you another (WHOLE) chapter of ... wait for it ... Catherine and Matthew talking. Granted, I've thrown in some stuff readers don't know about their past and a little peck of a kiss and it's Matthew's POV, but it still feels like too much talking and that I should've somehow combined this chapter and the last one I have posted. But even now, with the second chapter written, I have no way in hell how to do that.

Now, now, I know Amy will be first in line with the rest of you dears following shortly behind her to tell me to just post the bloody thing and see what the reviews come out as and not allow it to keep me from writing on. So I'm now busy to build up the courage to post something I'm not entirely happy with. I know I have to do it. But, but ... Okay, I'll just see if I can fix some first grade spelling and grammar and punctuation mistakes at least, and then I'll go all Nike on its arse. Unless I find something else more interesting (and easier) to do, like reading Gilbert toons ...

Anyways, I hope you at least enjoyed the insight into my current frame of mind and are not too frightened and will still talk to me. Honestly, it's only bad meetings that make me bat shit crazy (stupid/ridiculous/insert any word you were thinking while reading this mess). Really!

The good news is, next week is looking good to get some work done!

I honestly thought they would maybe go for half a chapter at most when I started writing the damn thing. I blinked, and then it was (more than) enough words for a stand-alone chapter. So I guess they want to talk (while convincing themselves they don't want to jump on top of each over of course!). I've given it enough time to rest, so hopefully when I review it tonight for obvious mistakes, I'd have a fresh set of eyes to look at it.

There is some exposition, but not overly so and on various things. The only thing I like about the thing is it shows how Catherine handles stress and that Matthew is all worried about her (something he'd never done of course hehehe). Or I think it does, at least. And it's in Matthew's POV - the previous chapter gave me no gap to flip POV's around. Another alternative would be just to give his POV as a flashback, so it will all depend on the reviews - I'll ask the question when I post too.

And just for you, Dirk, I'll keep a few (easy) nits for you to pick on!

I'll probably post it tomorrow night at the latest. Unless I find the Netball World Championship match on-line (for free), then all bets are off. It's one of the things I'm missing most since the move - netball, watching it and playing it. It's like basketball, just completely different.

Post the damn thing already:-) if your characters insist on talking, then they win. Consider it raising the sexual tension. Let them fight.

(Throws gauntlet down at K) Is that how you post two books a year?

Come closer so I can taunt you a second time...

Ni!