Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi → Northern Skies - Janet!
I think that he would send a messanger. The rievers you mention have to be mentioned again as a real threat. The keep needs someone in charge and Catherine is gone/ unable to fill in the void. Anthony doesn't matter worth spit. All he does is eat, drink, and spend the keep's money. Therefore, James has to stay. Just make the reasoning clear and you are justified in this character decision.
Messenger it is, thanks guys!
Amy, great suggestion! *scribbles notes*
ps - Philisha, glad to see you around again! whoo hoo! 
OK, time change. It's 11 PM there, isn't it?
OK, time change. It's 11 PM there, isn't it?
Midnight actually ... we were calling friends and family back home, and it got late. Big mistake was to let hubby phone his mum last (LOL, it's good, but it's also sad hehehe). So I grabbed my phone and used the time productively (using this term loosely LOL)
Fun getting to talk in real time even if it is only one sentence.
Kajo. Kajo. Kajo. I'm sick to death of Kajo.
Oops. Sorry. That was Amy projecting. I hear voices, too, you see.
Dirk
Btw, your heroine's name "Catherine Miller". Miller is Kajo's last name he uses when he reaches our Earth. Excellent choice in names. I commend you.
No sir, I commend your excellent taste in choosing names! 
Norm d'Plume wrote:Kajo. Kajo. Kajo. I'm sick to death of Kajo.
Oops. Sorry. That was Amy projecting. I hear voices, too, you see.
DirkOi... the guy destroys the entire universe. It's very hard to beat that kind of death tally. Unfortunately, he takes out the Guiness Book of World records in the process, so there's no way to record his merits
Only because I have Black John on a tight leash ... 
Oi... the guy destroys the entire universe. It's very hard to beat that kind of death tally. Unfortunately, he takes out the Guiness Book of World records in the process, so there's no way to record his merits
The whole universe? Yeah, I don't think I'm going to be able to top that. I kneel before Chancellor Palpatine Blue. A Namika if ever I saw one.
Janet, my wisecracker has been straining at its leash. Mostly it wants to mark its territory with hyperbole.
Amy will tell you that my first review of her Cop Shop contest piece came in eight parts, each about as long as the piece. Notice I said my 'first' review.
Janet, my wisecracker has been straining at its leash. Mostly it wants to mark its territory with hyperbole.
Amy will tell you that my first review of her Cop Shop contest piece came in eight parts, each about as long as the piece. Notice I said my 'first' review.
Never hold back on the wise cracks with me - life's too short! I live for hyperbole, and think it's wholly underrated because some people don't know how to laugh at themselves or don't get hyperbole. Most of the time both. (Only reason I hold back ... hehehe)
But I digress. Amy is really tough (probably the toughest on the site, but don't tell her, she already suspect I'm slightly jealous of her for this reason! 
). I have a thick skin too, not Amy thick, but pretty decent (I think, I'm still talking to K after all hehehe). As long as the intent behind the review is clear, I'll never take anything personally and there is no need to explain anything. I actually loved the The Further Literary Offenses of James Fenimore Cooper reference (Cooper probably didn't, but I did/do - and Cooper should've, I would've taken a Twain review as a massive compliment! LOL).
Honestly, I hesitate sometimes before I read your reviews. But only because you have a knack for pointing out the things I used to think I would never miss and I tend to hit my desk with my head (lots) as I read along your reviews for the gazillion stupid things I do/say/miss ... (It's easy to pick myself up again though ... at least it's not an Amazon review on my published work!!!! LOL) So yes, your reviews, with or without hyperbole, are always appreciated.
Oh, and I'm really trying to get the next chapter out tomorrow! And then I'll do some reviews.
Well, then I suggest you look at the stuff I've done recently rather than try to follow in overall linear order. But give me a few hours to catch some typos (cringe)
NJC reviews are writing lessons in real time, not rip-Em-up-and-spit-me-out kind of reviews. They are so different from what I think and process and that is what makes them valuable. Most of the time I don't even argue because he is right. It's just the content stuff that I reserve the right to veto.
He will have me writing in Tazar's POV before long. That's when the real test begins and I start writing in a totally different characters perspective. I got through a whole Anver book without this learning experience.
When I look at a review I've done, I sometimes wonder whether the author will hate me forever. I do hit hard with them, and sometimes I get overly dramatic.
Amy, you made Tazar so distinct that it's easy to see what's not in his Voice (you've got the PoV). For a less deeply carved character, it would be much harder.
Well, then I suggest you look at the stuff I've done recently rather than try to follow in overall linear order. But give me a few hours to catch some typos (cringe)
I review as you post, so we're good!
When I look at a review I've done, I sometimes wonder whether the author will hate me forever.
But we know you're all marshmallow inside njc! Like Amy says, it's hard to argue with your reviews and it adds so much value, hate will never come into play. And, I'm used to it and now I expect to see every second sentence highlighted!
Tazar's thanks you for noting he is cast as the gentle giant.
njc wrote:When I look at a review I've done, I sometimes wonder whether the author will hate me forever.
But we know you're all marshmallow inside njc! Like Amy says, it's hard to argue with your reviews and it adds so much value, hate will never come into play. And, I'm used to it and now I expect to see every second sentence highlighted!
I decided to wait until my fifth draft before daring to approach NJC. Let Amy and K rewrite it a few times before I approach Chancellor Palpatine.
But we know you're all marshmallow inside njc! Like Amy says, it's hard to argue with your reviews and it adds so much value, hate will never come into play. And, I'm used to it and now I expect to see every second sentence highlighted!
A rather crunchy marshmallow, I'm afraid. But thanks for the flattery.
More like the Grammar Goblin, I'm afraid.
On a more serious note, I'm not sure I could adapt to your style of story.
My story has a style? Obviously you haven't read it. :-)
No sweat. I'll keep picking your brain for future tech. The whole genetic engineering thing still needs work next draft, assuming I don't punt the disaster/taboo subplot for a good old world-ending runaway NSA virus instead.
Subplot for another story. As long as Kajo has an honorable mention, that is.
"And you'll wish you never were ((born)), George-man, if you call me lad again."
As to the treatment of 'mother', 'father', and such as proper nouns: If this is a change that teachers of our youth have embraced, I will reject it, digging in my heels, standing athwart history and yelling 'STOP'! Between lawyers, child welfare agencies, and teachers there's little reason left for children to respect their parents. But in your period, at least, there is such reason.
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