Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi → Northern Skies - Janet!
Challenge accepted! Now to make Catherine's knees wobbly without her losing face. 'Tis but a scratch!
*googles* Sounds like a good idea to avoid grape juice in your state! Either way, I hope it went well with the live ones and you managed to get out safely!
Oh, and Matthew is a gentleman ... *scowls some more*
Janet, be sure to spell it correctly: Lady Kay.
Janet, be sure to spell it correctly: Lady Kay.
Not sure all of that is enough to allow me to use the Lady Kay TM ... yet. Challenge accepted! 
PS: I want my name on the inside jacket with this goes to #1 on the charts
Your name is on the inside, the outside, top and bottom of this one K, whether it hits #1 or not! The money on the other hand is all mine! I'm nice like that. hehehe
You asked: Amy, the trustworthy (sic) internet indicates that roughly 6+ mm deep would probably need stitches, and I think an armour piercing arrow if it hit her just right (or rather, wrong), would be able to do that - some had tips that were wide enough. Please let me know if you disagree
I agree that the arrow slice could need stitches. She would be able to ride, but the use of the arm would be limited. If you want her on the horse with M, then have the bleeding be severe. He'll need to hold pressure on the wound to make sure it stops. Make the cut on the back of her arm so she can't reach it to hold pressure.
Got your back, mate!
A
You asked: Amy, the trustworthy (sic) internet indicates that roughly 6+ mm deep would probably need stitches, and I think an armour piercing arrow if it hit her just right (or rather, wrong), would be able to do that - some had tips that were wide enough. Please let me know if you disagree
I agree that the arrow slice could need stitches. She would be able to ride, but the use of the arm would be limited. If you want her on the horse with M, then have the bleeding be severe. He'll need to hold pressure on the wound to make sure it stops. Make the cut on the back of her arm so she can't reach it to hold pressure.
Got your back, mate!
A
Ah thanks for this Ames! I didn't yell or scream to get your attention this time, because I know you are really busy with criminal activities! 
So the next question is, if the wound is bandaged tightly, would he still need to apply pressure? Because as it is at the moment, he is busy talking with Henry and Davie and every man's dog to get the runner while this would mean Catherine is sitting there bleeding to death. It will make K very happy, but not so much my target audience. So I'm thinking just to have her adrenaline rush to come to an end (the bleeding too), so she's shaky, Matthew is concerned and he also doesn't like the idea she should ride on her own because that would cause the bleeding to start again.
Then, once she is over the worst of the shock, it's gloves off and Matthew will ask a few hard, yet pertinent questions while she can't run away ...
Mmm, this is coming together nicely, not sure I'm trusting this given the history with this part of the story?!
Bandages can shift and shoulders are hard to dress unless you know how to do them. If the lac is in an awkward place, then it could start/ stop. Also, when people relax and the adrenaline wears off, sometimes the bleeding will restart. Have M think that the bleeding is done and over with and then notice her shoulder wound is still dripping onto the ground as he talks to Henry and Davie.
Bandages can shift and shoulders are hard to dress unless you know how to do them. If the lac is in an awkward place, then it could start/ stop. Also, when people relax and the adrenaline wears off, sometimes the bleeding will restart. Have M think that the bleeding is done and over with and then notice her shoulder wound is still dripping onto the ground as he talks to Henry and Davie.
This is good enough for me! Average readers wouldn't know and will take it on face value whereas more knowledgeable readers will go, yeah, it's possible. Either way, Catherine is on the same horse as Matthew. who-hoo!
Chapter 2 is slowly ticking along. I really hope to post it this coming weekend. But at least it gives me time to return the favour to those who have reviewed my n-th Chapter 1!
I'll get to your latest Collin story and Cop contest short story hopefully sometime this week! Thanks!
Wait until I repost for points tomorrow. New Jersey gave me an entire rewrite worth of material and I'm making my way through that tonight.
Wait until I repost for points tomorrow. New Jersey gave me an entire rewrite worth of material and I'm making my way through that tonight.
I missed the deadline. 
I'm still going to read the rest - let me know if you're still interested in a review because I think you've mentioned you didn't just write it for the contest ... Next week looks good.
Amy, I also have a quick (I think so at least) question. Catherine was shot just after midnight. They eventually arrive at Dacre Tower at dawn. Only then is her wound cleaned and slathered with honey before being stitched up. And now I have no idea how soon you'd be able to tell if someone has infection ie when the first symptoms will start showing. I have it as nightfall, the same day, at the moment ...
Thanks, you're a dear!
Approx 24 hrs to close a wound. 3 days for infection to set in. Busy ally temps before wound edges get all nappy.
Sorry for automatic spell check. First sign is usually a temperature and then big redness, cellulitis and then pus collection.
Sorry for automatic spell check. First sign is usually a temperature and then big redness, cellulitis and then pus collection.
LOL, yeah, that made no sense!
I have the women keeping an eye out, but she'll leave before they know for sure whether she has an infection - I can't have her hanging around Dacre Tower for 3 days. But for now, I think she might just be at Norwood Castle, so Matthew can (organise) to have it picked up again when she's there.
Thanks!!!
welcome
Please let me know what I can pick up next ... I owe you a big one for a really great review!
Save your energy for the next chapter of Dictates. Won't be posting that for another week.
Save your energy for the next chapter of Dictates. Won't be posting that for another week.
Whoo-hoo! Another Dictates chapter!!!!!! It's going to be a long week .........
Been visiting in backcountry Indiana with a friend and very slow internet. Coming home tomorrow and might have some time to sit at the computer. Talk soon...
DON'T go back and revise this before posting a new chapter. I want you to churn out the first draft, warts and all, getting the story into a written form so that you can fix these little things later. I know the move has kept you away from the computer and revising is easier than new material.
I have been incorporating the reviews for the first/OLD draft as I moved and reworked the previous copy to match the new copy. Do I still do this (I don't want someone who had reviewed the previous copy ever think I didn't consider any of the reviews, although I doubt with the time lapse, anyone would remember without being able to access that copy) or are you saying I shouldn't even do that much?
Or are you referring to the new reviews on the copy currently posted?
I think you mean the latter, and I agree, I have to look forward and worry about it only when the first draft is done. In my defense, I piss weak one but still , I had a couple of blocks where I didn't have enough time to write (I need at least 30 minute blocks otherwise I know it will be a waste of time staring at the screen), but wanted to do something at least while it was quiet for 10-15 minutes at a time. The 10-15 minute useless blocks are done now for good (I think/hope), so that won't happen again - scouts honour!
And I know this is hard to believe, but both Chapter 2 and 3 have gone up at the same before-the-big-move-speed, meaning, I have always been a slow writer! Chapter 4 is ticking along nicely - will be up soon, but not this weekend - it's tax time in Aus! yay!!!! <------- sarcasm is one of my many faults I'm continuously working on ...
Getting to the end of the first draft before that restart/rewrite is pretty huge. Once that dart lands on the board and you re-assemble the story around its new bullseye, that second draft is much betterer.
Will do! Because I want my second second draft to be the bestest of them all!
Thanks K!
You said: I've reviewed a new member's first chapter over lunch today and it made me realise, I'm so fortunate and have come so far because of reviewers like you...
I had the same kind of help in the beginning. I have to say, isn't it nice when you can see your early mistakes in a different work and realize how far you've come? Just the fact that you are immediately aware of a tense of wording issue and know how it could be fixed...
(Sniff) They grow up so quick!
A
You said: I've reviewed a new member's first chapter over lunch today and it made me realise, I'm so fortunate and have come so far because of reviewers like you...
I had the same kind of help in the beginning. I have to say, isn't it nice when you can see your early mistakes in a different work and realize how far you've come? Just the fact that you are immediately aware of a tense of wording issue and know how it could be fixed...
(Sniff) They grow up so quick!
A
Not to mention avoiding the embarrassment of sending that through to a publisher! (We will not mention 50 shades, that's the exception?!)
HELP, PLEASE!!!!!!
So Matthew sent a message to Anthony regarding his involvement in the raid where Catherine had been injured and what could have been very likely an attempt on Matthew's life. Matthew's messenger left it with James Forster, Anthony's Captain of the Guard at Aiden Tower to find Anthony and give him Matthew's message. James has now spent more than a day trying to find Anthony only to be told by Anthony that he has no idea what Matthew is on about and that James can tell Matthew of the fact, he's not going to do so.
So my question is - would James send a messenger or do you think he would tell Matthew personally?
On the one hand, James might feel he should take the bulk of Matthew's disapproval, but on the other hand, with Anthony, Catherine and now James gone, Aiden Tower is left hanging. But then again, one could argue James has already been gone (with Catherine and Anthony also gone from the tower) for more than a day, so what would another few hours matter?
I'm leaning towards it's important enough to warrant James giving Matthew the message and that the steward at Aiden Tower should man up and make do until James is back.
What do you guys think?
Thanks! Janet
I would think that if James is left in charge, there would be others that could be sent to take messages. OR if the journey there and back is easily made in a few hours, he could do it himself. Depends on location and timing.
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