“Have you talked to Mom lately?” Lauren asked her older sister.
“No, not since the nurse called about her not wanting to take her medicine. Why?” Mary was almost afraid to ask. It seemed there was always a new complaint.
“We’ve got a new problem.”
“Oh? What now? I thought she was happy at Pleasant View. I don’t know if I have the energy to keep solving problems.” Mary was exasperated, as she was the designated person the home called when they needed a decision or had a problem that needed a solution. She loved her mother, but this was taking an inordinate amount of time. She wanted a life of her own.
“I think she is settling in just fine. Maybe a little too well. I just spoke with the director and it seems that Mom is involved in a romance.”
“A romance? You’re kidding.” Maybe this wouldn’t be all bad. A love interest would give Mom something to occupy her thoughts besides her ailments.
“No kidding. It’s the talk of the home. Everyone is buzzing about it.”
“Well, they don’t have much to talk about in the home. So what exactly is the buzz?” Please don’t let this be anything I need to deal with.
“It seems the night nurse discovered a little hanky-panky. Two in a bed. That sort of thing.”
“Well, well. I guess they aren’t as frail as they look. And it’s been quite a few years since Dad died. Where’s the harm? Mom deserves a little fun. Do we know who the gentleman is? I recall seeing a couple of men that looked rather spry. And with the male-female ratio being what it is, Mom is still attracting the men. I’m proud of Mom. Hope I’m still considered attractive when my time comes.”
“Sit down, big sister. Mom’s lover is named Jane.”
Mary sat. A large breath escaped. She stared at the floor as she let that information sink in, even though it wasn’t that much of a shock. “Well, I guess there is a side of Mom that we know nothing about.”
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In less than 350 words you have encapsulated aspects of intergenerational expectations, and sibling relations of which I am sure many if not most have some experience. The sting in the tail provokes both a laugh and serious thought. The piece could almost be a section from a rather literary stand-up act, so that we easily suppress our desire to hear the next episode, and accept the story as complete, with its own moral.
I would also like to thank you because this has prompted me to post some of my own brief writings from long ago! I will dig one ou this very day...
Okay, I love this! Such a sweet moment in time - Lauren's frustration is palpable and yet her love for her mother is clear, as well. I love the trepidation she feels as the older sister describes the new "problem," which isn't as much of a problem as she feared.
This short little piece brought me through several emotions - stress on behalf of Lauren, relief that the issue wasn't serious, amusement that their elderly mother found a lover, and slight concern/confusion as "Joe" seems like he might be known to the sisters?
Anyway, I loved this, it's cute and charming with slight mystery surrounding Joe.
I've just realized I misread "Jane" as "Joe" somehow!! LOL my bad - my comments still stand though, loved it, and this is an even better ending than what I thought.
This is a great story and full of fun. Anyone who has had a relative in a care home can relate to this but I'm sure not everyone will have had the quirky twist you put in at the end. Bravo, well done. It brought a smile to my face and a go for it girl attitude. Nice work.
Ha! Funny. My grandfather was found in bed with another resident at his elderly care facility. He was 91. I cheered the old guy (grandma had already passed). Half the time he didn’t know where he was. When he “escaped” and went to the shore he could never find his way back and they had to go look for him. I didn’t begrudge him that, either. It’s what I would have done. Anyway, cheers, mom! Good for you. Men are overrated.
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