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So, some flaws although I like it overall I guess. It's a little dramatic/under developed but I'm finding a bunch of pieces on this site are, written by new(er) writers perhaps not that I'm exactly seasoned but I'm 37 and started writing (seriously) when I was 19. Although there was a 7 year break. Anyway this is not about me. It's about you and your shitty writing jk. I'm so just kidding.
I find it disturbing that you say a man shouldn't cheat because he should control himself but then if he does cheat it's "only the once" and he shouldn't have enjoyed himself. Umm....passion usually leads to cheating so that is highly unlikely. That's all I really remember to say without going back and reading the whole thing over. There was one area that was a little confusing, the part about where if they argued. He was supposed to explain what he meant to her. You should make it clear then that she's upset because she misunderstood him, because you don't make that clear.
Good job overall.
Thanks, hope I didn't offend you I'm just brutally honest these days. I don't give a f lol.
I thought the entire content at first was a description then I realized it was an essay. Still I liked it enough :-)
Keep writing, if you want to after my review lol....
Kira007