Re: Acts/ Dictates/ Mandates/ Mantle - Amy's Thread
I didn't enter it in the contest yet. I want a chance to revise first.
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Re: Acts/ Dictates/ Mandates/ Mantle - Amy's Thread
Hey folks, I've integrated you reviews into Honor Amongst Thieves. I think I've made massive improvements, especially the beginning. Does anyone have time for a quick perusal?
I'm moving on to part two of this story as my next project...
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Re: Acts/ Dictates/ Mandates/ Mantle - Amy's Thread
I'll fit it in in the next 30 hours.
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Re: Acts/ Dictates/ Mandates/ Mantle - Amy's Thread
Owe you. Maybe life will let me do some new writing in the next 30 hrs. Not likely, but I remain hopeful...
- amy s
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Re: Acts/ Dictates/ Mandates/ Mantle - Amy's Thread
K, you are impossible. Send me to the corner with my computer, at least. Add on a comfy chair, a bottle of Aussie wine, and a bucket of popcorn
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Re: Acts/ Dictates/ Mandates/ Mantle - Amy's Thread
KHippolite wrote:
a comfy... electric chair. Designed to give you a friendly jolt whenever you stop typing. 10 000 volts says you get that chapter finished.
Oh, man. I would be in serious trouble if that were the case. They would pull out old sparky in Florida for me.
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Re: Acts/ Dictates/ Mandates/ Mantle - Amy's Thread
As Morticia Addams said of the furniture in the family mansion, most of it's not even electrified.
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amy s wrote:
Hey folks, I've integrated you reviews into Honor Amongst Thieves. I think I've made massive improvements, especially the beginning. Does anyone have time for a quick perusal?
I'm moving on to part two of this story as my next project...
Amy, if I check your update out this week, would you pretty please check my updated chapter (when you have the time of course, no rush! oh, and let me know if you need me to do something about that electric chair, njc's been most helpful even though that's risky given there is still one corner left)? All I need to know is whether Catherine's wound and her reaction and the treatment match in your opinion. Her reaction isn't so much only due to pain, but also a little bit of shock too. I've assumed it would be reasonable given that she hasn't been shot by arrows on a regular basis. And then, the score is deep enough to need stitches, so I don't know if it needs to bleed more than what it does or whether it now has nicked an artery or a piece of bone or something that it shouldn't have. And I'll only be sure I've done it properly once I receive your seal of approval. This ER/first aid/anatomy stuff is really hard! Thanks!
*hopes the combination of promises, threats and compliments work like a charm* 
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Re: Acts/ Dictates/ Mandates/ Mantle - Amy's Thread
I'll check it out.
Hey, aren't there four corners in a room? That means we can stick the boys into time-out!
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Re: Acts/ Dictates/ Mandates/ Mantle - Amy's Thread
You have 5 corners in the room? Bad math, sir!
- amy s
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Thou canst not declare a thirty hour time-out whilst there are five in the room, sir. Bad math and a loose grasp on props. Oh heavens, did I write that out loud?
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amy s wrote:
You have 5 corners in the room? Bad math, sir!
And Dirk has also put himself in one, so that makes 6 ...
- njc
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Six is okay. You can tile a plane with hexagons. But not any more-sided convex polygon, so we're at the limit.
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(Typing in my comfy chair and throwing popcorn at K)
- amy s
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Re: Acts/ Dictates/ Mandates/ Mantle - Amy's Thread
1300 words left and I just got Katerina to the vault. Oi!
441 2015-05-21 00:20:42 (edited by Norm d'Plume 2015-05-21 00:21:54)
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Re: Acts/ Dictates/ Mandates/ Mantle - Amy's Thread
I spent a lot of time in corners as a kid. I'm quite good at it.
In reality, we got spanked. No timeouts.
I turned out so well I have to write using a penname. :-)
Dirk
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Re: Acts/ Dictates/ Mandates/ Mantle - Amy's Thread
amy s wrote:
1300 words left and I just got Katerina to the vault. Oi!
Waiting for it.
- amy s
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Re: Acts/ Dictates/ Mandates/ Mantle - Amy's Thread
I'm still writing...
- amy s
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Re: Acts/ Dictates/ Mandates/ Mantle - Amy's Thread
Ironic because that pic is actually part of my story...
- janet reid
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Re: Acts/ Dictates/ Mandates/ Mantle - Amy's Thread
I still need to check out the updated Part I ... not our best collective moment LOL
- amy s
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Re: Acts/ Dictates/ Mandates/ Mantle - Amy's Thread
OK, I managed to write something despite the busy work and being tired all the time. FINALLY! It's another Collin short story. Next is finishing the Katerin crime story. I have to get it done in the next two days. Otherwise, I'm not going to finish in time. Wish me luck!
A
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Re: Acts/ Dictates/ Mandates/ Mantle - Amy's Thread
And Honor amongst thieves is complete for the first draft. Five days before the contest ends. Took long enough!
FYI, this story is a monster and greater than 8000 words. To any and all who review it, let me know what I can trim. I need to knock off at least a thousand words before I can submit this. Will owe any and all who dare to slog through this thing!
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Re: Acts/ Dictates/ Mandates/ Mantle - Amy's Thread
Took me a moment to find it. Okay. I'm going to print it out later and go over it carefully.
- njc
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Re: Acts/ Dictates/ Mandates/ Mantle - Amy's Thread
It's not there. You have to chase links from Amy's portfolio, or from your last review of it.
I'm not hungry for points (I don't know about KH) but if you want to encourage new reviewers you should probably repub.
