Ames ...
I said: Just when it seemed as if Aiden was about to capitulate ...
You said: we need to work on your fighting descriptions. Hit me up on the forums and I'll give you a few ideas
I'm hitting you.
The problem might be it's too telling rather than I need help with fighting descriptions ... i.e. Anthony could stumble, shift his sword awkwardly, have Black John score more hits/make more contact, etc. instead of just having Matthew noting his strength was deteriorating fast with every blow he deflected, his counterattacks were weak or as good as non-existing, or that it seems as if he is at the verge of giving-up?
To be honest, I can describe each blow blow by blow as per your suggestion or I can give readers a bit more freedom to imagine it for themselves - I think they have enough info to be able to do that. There's a reason that I don't want to give too much time/power to Black John or Anthony and it might not be so much that I don't 'know' how to describe fights (I would hope I proved this point when Matthew got involved with a fight or two during the raid). This is Matthew's book, the other two can wait for their turn book 2 and book 3 and by going into too much detail when Matthew isn't fighting, it could create a different (bigger/more undesirable) problem - leaving readers wondering who's the hero again? Oh, yes, the guy watching the awesome fight. Why is he the hero again?
When Black J and A fight against Matthew, and believe me, it's coming as sure as winter is coming in GOT, I'll give details. They will both be worthy opponents (given they're going to be the heros in the coming books and not to make it too easy for Matthew), but as I said, only when they fighting Matthew.
It could also be simply a problem that Matthew 'should' be the one fighting against Anthony to teach him the ropes. I don't want him to do that, that's what Black J is there for - to toughen them up and just when they think they're sliced bread, Matthew cuts them to size again.
Does this make any sense? Thoughts?