The Gathering Darkness (the Connor series) - Dirk B. (Page 25 of 57)

'Tis a bit of a tennis match. One solution may be to group actions to reduce camera movement

Easy to fix.

Nuts! I'm reading The Exorcist and there is far more overlap between my chapter and the book than there is between my chapter and the screenplay. I was afraid of that. However, I only use a fraction of the prayers from the Rites of Exorcism compared to the book. I even went with a different subset of the prayers compared to the screenplay, but the book uses some of those, too. No wolf-like growing or biting yet, although the girl does make animal noises. At one point the exorcist reads the verses from Luke about Legion, but fortunately, there is only one demon in the book, whereas my reverend mother is possessed by all of Legion. I have more to read tomorrow, butt I'm hoping the similarities don't get any worse.

Dirk:

Further to our 'discussion' about speech tags: asked, screamed, gurgled, what have you, are considered telling rather than showing. In fact, there are plenty of purists who hold there should be a comma after 'said', and then the 'show' (if necessary), preferably without using a dreaded 'ly' adverb. Example: 'Blah, blah, blah?' she said, [deflated] voice making it clear she found it an unanswerable question OR '…..?' she said, daring him to object, challenging his authority in a loud, unprofessional way.

You know, shit like that.     )

Merry Christmas. Gelukkig kerstfeest. Frohe Weihnachten. Joyeux Noël. Buon Natale. Feliz Navidad.

Ray

I'm soaking in

Imagine me telling J's tale from the POV of the less exciting Marsha. At some point Marsha would have to prove she has a contribution worthy of eclipsing J direct relationship with the reader. I think Mary Shelley's Frankenstein his this because the narrator indicates he's carrying an important letter in chapter one and that the missive could not be otherwise delivered. But I think her resolution of this condition falls shy of a true denouement

Don't forget Sherlock Holmes. If I remember correctly, the mysteries were told from perspective of Dr. Watson. I have yet to plan out Romano's guilt trip, which should make him a more interesting character beyond him carrying Connor's water. I'm not sure yet how far too push that subplot. He'll definitely be interacting with his dead ex soon. Unlike my last book, though, Romano will have to verbally communicate with his ex. Makes it much more interesting to write.

Hmm. The Star Wars reviews are all over the place. One said it's exactly what Star Wars fans want, but not where the story should have gone. Another from GameSpot shredded it. My money is on the Emperor as the character whoo can bring this story to a somewhat satisfying conclusion. TBD.

To be fair, the books rehashed old concepts. If they stayed remotely close to the books (eg Ray's parents) then the plot will come across as non fresh

Just saw Star Wars 9. Surprisingly, I'd give it an A, and I rarely think that about any film. Some of the critics who said Star Wars fans would really like it were correct. It was a very nostalgic story, with familiar planets, music, tech, heroes, and villains. I'd give it an A+, but there were some huge plot holes, even for Star Wars. Besides that, I would have liked more scenes with the Emperor in this one. He had more screen time in Return of the Jedi.

The only other movie I want to see in the theaters is the remake of Dune (a franchise wannabe), which I think is going to be released in 2020. I occasionally check out new films on Netflix, but I have yet to find anything where I wish I had seen it in theaters or on a big-screen TV. I watch everything on a 24" computer, with a hard drive that sounds like a death rattle. Besides Dune, The Skywalker Saga, and The Lord of the Rings, I can't think of anything else that would draw me to a theater.

I read the star wars spoilers. The ending takes it where they shouldn't have gone. It has like 5 mitichlorian reveals. Aside from that it sounds like fun. I'll probably never see it because I don't have Disney+

For my audience of two, are there any objections to my making "demons in human form" be entirely corporeal?

I have the exorcist, who is a demon, and I wanted to make his disintegration more interesting by listing the parts as they dissolve, including clothes, skin, muscles, internal organs, bones, and everything in between. I haven't decided yet whether his bodily fluids will dissolve with him, or if they will spill to the floor.

Also, another demon will father a child. I could have the demon possess a human male, who inseminates the mother, but then there wouldn't be a supernatural element to the baby, which I need. I figure if the demon is corporeal, he can produce his own semen. In this case, the demon doesn't want to possess the baby, but rather create a half-demon offspring.

Thoughts?
Dirk

If the demon is not corporeal, then it just appears human, but can't leave anything behind, such as blood, sweat, and semen. It has none of these, so it can't leave them behind. Possessing a human male and then having sex, also leaves nothing of the demon behind, since the semen belongs to the possessed male, hence no demon child.

On the other hand, if the demon is corporeal, it appears fully human, with actual blood, sweat, and semen (with demon DNA), which would result in a half demon child.