A Voyage to Guinea

I started this book years ago. Some of the writing is rather awkward. I hope I've learned a few things in the mean time. The number of detailed critiques I have received on this chapter alone justifies my membership fee. I have received suggestion on everything from punctuation to sentence structure. I am a little embarrassed by some of the things I let slip by. I really did review this chapter before I pushed the publish button.
I use a split screen and go through each review and edit my text. Some of the critiques are very detailed, so it may take a while before I get to everyone. I usually respond, in some fashion, to each in-line note.
Right now the second chapter is a mess, and I will need some time to make it presentable. I have my work cut out for me.
Thanks to everyone who has made the effort, and taken the time to review the first chapter of A Voyage to Guinea.