I'm a newbie on here, but Marilyn is right. If I come to post on here, I'm looking for help, not criticism that tells me I suck and I should quit. The best writers are neurotic. They swing from I'm good to I suck. Nothing good from's a review that says you suck, you should quit. The purpose of this site is to help newbie writers, not to validate you're better then them. Everyone approaches writing from a different perspective, with difference influences. They may not learn and accept it, and if so that is on them. But your job is to try to teach them how to be better, not be brutal to show the site how talented you are.

Writing is a hard endeavor, and there are many ways to go about it. It's a small club for those who want to do it well.

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For me, it is inside. I usually create a music playlist for my stuff that I play at about 20% on my comp speakers, music that represents the themes in my book.

During the day before I write, I go over the scene in my mind, trying to visualize what I want to put down in words. What I visualized and write are often different, something that took a while to make peace with, and I try to reach a compromise with. The important thing to me is to capture the essence of it. I often see my stuff as making a movie that I'm trying to capture in words. This scene all comes down to this one moment I'm hoping sticks in the readers mind.

I have only written three novels so far, and that served me well for two of them. (None published yet, I'm not in a hurry.) The third my MC took over and wrote a story I couldn't comprehend, and argued with her quite a bit in rewriting. Darn near me quit writing, as it was a weird experience.

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While in the minority on this, I'm a huge proponent for. In an action sequence, I like how it can show the results of that action in graphic detail to the reader.
For example: My sword arched out, slicing off his head and sending it rolling on the floor until it ended in a red squish up against the wall. For me it's style choice. You just don't want to use it as crutch, like you do with which or that clauses.

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I want to give everyone who responded a huge thanks. I felt the magic and was properly inspired.

The final title will be: Rekindled Vengeance.

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Thank you, everyone. You've given me a lot of great suggestions. I really can't thank you enough.

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K L van Kriedt wrote:

Hearts of Darkness
Lost Redemption
Revenge of the Lost Heart
Heart's Revenge
Love's Revenge
Flaming Hearts
Dying Flames of Revenge
Lost Opportunities
Revengeful Hearts
Hurtful Hearts

If your main character eventually takes the opportunity for redemption, which is what would make me want to read the book, it seems Redemption should be in the title, or even
Second Chances
Redemption vs Revenge
Lost in the Open

Does any of this appeal?

You gave me some good ones to chew over! Thanks so much!

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Anything that captures the heart of the book.

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I suck when it comes to titles, so I could use some help. I posted a novel on here called Lost in Darkness about a slayer in medieval times who betrayed her true love but is given a chance to redeem herself. I'm going forward to publish on Kindle as soon as I have a marketing plan and cover. (Probably December.) Themes that play heavily into it are revenge, a dying heart brought to life with the flames of revenge, a silly heart that wants to love but is resolved to kill, a flaming heart of revenge. I plan to publish on Kindle and so need something original that other books don't use while playing on the first title for the next two in the series. The series subtitle should be/reflect: Bavarian slayer. I came up with Ever so Darkly. No Kindle book has that title, but I'm open to better suggestions. Lost in Darkness already had 12 different books on Kindle with that name.

TirzahLaughs wrote:

Sure.  What kind of review do you want?  Content, pacing and plot or mechanical?

Tirzah

Any and everything I can get. beat me, rip my arms off, fire a bazooka into my face!

njc wrote:

If what you need is points, feel free to.review my stuff.  B1 is fragmented in places and has lots of known problems.  B2 is incomplete with threads separated that need to.be interwoven.

Points are good, but I love the synergy of trading reviews. This is a fun place and I've made some really good friends.

Thank you everyone,  I promise you won't be indicted, subjected to congressional hearing or impeached, despite what my characters might do.
I think I have enough volunteers.

I'm posting my novel: The Freak Show, which is an action adventure, sporting a special ops team consisting of a werewolf, vampire, Universal Soldier/Frankenstein monster and a computer geek. It's heavily influenced by Stephen King and Tom Clancy. It condenses and blends their style into a hyper-dramatized comic style version of a novel; IE: what they write in 500,000 words, I'm doing in 70,000. It's campy fun mixed with perverted horror.

The entire novel is written and I want to post the entire thing in a month. I need a few other writers posting actual novels I can trade reviews with that fast. I can handle almost anything you want me to reciprocate with--I like romance, thrillers, fantasy, Sci-Fi, actually anything. I just need a few people that can handle what I'm dishing out. and yes, it's not for everyone.

Thank you,
Ryan Maddux

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njc wrote:

A first-person narrative is a missive to the reader so the fourth wall is already broken.  The question then is breaking the narrative.  When the narrator tells us what he does or doesn't like, he's doing that.

I disagree. You break the fourth wall when you address the reader directly. Until Twilight came along, the difference between first and third is that first puts the reader in the passenger seat of the car of the adventure you're telling, while third puts them in the driver's seat. Twilight and Hunger Games made third and first the same, the reader is the driver seat.

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mikejackson1127 wrote:

LOL, Ryan! Good and funny points:-)

Another would be to have aliens seize the Titanic and the crew. Have the aliens "program" them to practice Nihilism. Then they could convert the ship into a robotic snake with the alien's answer to nuclear power. Send crew and ship forward in time to 2017 and turn 'em loose on the world! Then out of nowhere, gigantic versions of Ghandi, Jack Kennedy, and Wolfman Jack show up to oppose the nihilists. The war comes to a standstill.

The aliens show up and try to take control of the big 3, but they get devoured. WJ vomits all over the ship and its crew, offing them. So they drown, after all. Every one of them. But Ghandi and Kennedy are plagued by their consciences, so they bring back to life the aliens and the crew. The ship is restored.

Peace is made, but the Wolfman is PO'd. He stalks off, finds millions of psychopaths, and returns. Round 2...The robotic snake, formerly the Titanic, crawls up WJ's backside, destroying all of the giant's insides. Ghandi and Kennedy think the Wolfman's death should be undone, that it was "Unspeakably violent." After using telekinesis to get the crazies to off themselves, the nihilists tell Ghandi and Kennedy where to get off... The aliens, fed up with it all, go back to their planet. Ghandi and Kennedy try to undo WJ's death as the nihilists bombard them with self-destructive thoughts.

After much time, they manage to shield their minds from the nihilists. WJ's back. Again, he vomits on and drowns the nihilists before immediately going after Ghandi and Kennedy. He pursues them all over the planet.

The three of them fall into a gargantuan sinkhole. End of story.

Some good ideas there...

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MJ,

You have lots of good idea there for Mr. Kink to work on.

I'll revise two a little for you. Transport Trump into Kennedy's place during the Cuban missile crisis and have Hillary, Pennwise, and Flagg as his key advisers.

Have both TNG and Original Star Trek Enterprises  go back in time to the Titanic and have them argue the merits of interfering with history to save it.

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Janet Taylor-Perry wrote:

Funny. I just watched It for the first time last night.

The best part is that Tim Curry of the Rocky Horror Picture Show played Pennywise.

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Now with a full day to think about it...

The Stand and It (tv miniseries) were compromised by being such lengthy novels a movie couldn't give enough time to and TV had to make them PG. Both depended on intricate character development because Mr. Kink isn't just about the supernatural but the dark side of humanity. I'm anxious to see what they do with IT this time  round, but even it's a 3hr movie, that's not long enough to show how the loser club bonded.

Misery was great because Kathy Bates gave the performance of a lifetime, I swear she's the female Jack Nicholson.

Carrie and Cujo, eh, not his best novels and hampered by just average actors.

The First Shining became a Jack Nicholson vehicle  and did not represent the book. The second attempt was just bad.

Christine was ruined by a bad actor playing Dennis and not showing more how badly Arnie (and he was cast great) was henpicked by his parents and a nerd to boot. The heart of the book is he felt he was ugly and couldn't do anything about that but found a car like him he could fix. They didn't capture that so he, Arnie ends up looking like a psycho teenager. He wasn't.

Salem's lot was bad, just cheezy bad. So was Pet Cemetery.

I hated The Mist because of they way they ended it. Committing suicide vs driving on in hope, even though the narrator left his wife, never knowing what happened to her.

Maximum Overdrive is a fun, popcorn movie and the only reason to give it a thumbs down if you're a true Stephen Kink fan is because it's completely devoid of the human side of the tragedy.

I think that's why so many of his books have failed as movies. It's not all about the horror but about the character's you can so easily endear yourself to in his stuff. They're real--he writes them so well, you can understand almost all of them, feel their pain. He's not writing Friday the 13th movies where you're rooting for the characters to die by Jason's hand.

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mikejackson1127 wrote:

Good point, Ryan, reg the Stand. I need industrial strength caffeine! I agree that Walken and Hoffman could handle the job as Flagg. I'd forgotten about their bad guy roles. Again, some lattes are necessary at this point. That or I could do some lines of Maxwell House.

Chug an 8ounce can of Red Bull if you need to go from barely able to open your eyes to be chomping at the bit to charge Banzai beach...LOL Close as I can come to mainlining caffeine.

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SolN wrote:

I thought Misery was pretty good.

I stand corrected. Misery was excellent and Firestarter was good as well. Needful Things just Okay.

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Now that the caffeine has finally kicked in, Christoph Waltz would make the perfect Flagg.

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Kdot wrote:

I've often wondered why Hollywood hasn't done a Christine remake. Imagine her re-cast as a Dodge Avenger in hot pink coming out to Justin Bieber.

But on a more serious note, there's a lot you could do with that story in the hands of the write director (which, sadly, very few Stephen King movies ever seem to see)

It's funny in a really sad way that all the horror attempts have been so bad, but they nailed The Green Mile and Shawshank Redemption so perfectly.
It looks like this next attempt at IT might finally work. (Keeping my fingers crossed on that one.)

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mikejackson1127 wrote:

Hey, Ryan. Did you see the teleplay of The Stand? I think it was 'round 91...anyway, the actor who portrayed Randall Flag, flagged, imho. Randall Flagg needed to be portrayed by a serious badass!! Kink thought Robert Duvall or Bruce Dern could pull it off. I'd go with Henry Silva, a very underrated actor who, to the best of my knowledge, never played the "good guy." Christopher Lee, too. Then again, he might not've had Silva's capacity for wry humor, and I'd say that's one of the requirements to fully portray RF. Sadly, Lee and Silva are no longer with us...don't know who else, around today, could do Flagg...

I wonder if The Stand will EVER be tackled by a talented producer and screenwriter...

The Stand is just too much material for even a miniseries to do it justice. Maybe Netflix could make it a 2 or 3 yr TV series. There is just too much material to cover, to much character building that has to be done.

Christopher Walken or Dustin Hoffmann could bring enough chops for Flagg, though Bruce Dern's not a bad choice.
It's funny, I actually liked Molly Ringwald as Fanny though. That miniseries wasn't a bad attempt though.

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I'm starting this topic for those of us that are fans of Stephen King, but as Stephen Kink. I freely admit I'm a disciple, he has had a huge influnece on me as a writer.

I call him that because while he's the master or horror, his best talent is to put the reader in places we never want to be but can't bring ourselves to escape from. Also comparable to Quentin Tarantino movies. Call him a kinky, dirty man, if you will, no one understands the dark side of human nature like him.

My three favorites are The Stand, IT, and Christine.

The Stand is the Gold standard of a journey made by characters in a post-apocalyptic setting.

Other than Flagg, it shows you how to make villains real people with motives we can understand, villains you wind up begging not to make that dark choice, but they do. No, Harold, don't make that choice. We feel your pain. Franny should have been yours, but you're becoming a respected person in this new community. You'll find the right girl. Loyd, I could have forgiven you past, I liked you--but you chose wrong.

It is just an incredible book that shows how magic does exist in a child's mind. Anything is possible if you can imagine it. though it does have one scene where I'll dare to criticize King because he made a huge mistake. He made it clear only kids can imagine and use magic, yet when they had to wish they way out of the sewers, they took turns having sex with the only girl on the team. To me that was a huge fowl. Coming to age, trying to become an adult is when you lose that ability.

Christine, well its the perfect horror show of obsession for teenagers. I like how he uses the engines of cars to show how our minds wake up in those teenage years.

I met a guy named Michael Jackson on here, and we really hit it off--might be long lost soul brothers. We're shared our like/dread of Mr. Kink and I told him my ultimate fantasy as a writer would be to be invited by Stephen King to share a beer, then wonder why mine had this gray matter on it as Mr. King assured me not to worry, it was nothing.

Turns out he he wrote a poem: Christmas with Stephen King that captured that fantasy almost perfectly.