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Yes, the crew should be very interested in what is taking their leader away from them at what they think is a critical time. "What could be so important that she be pulled away from this?" and "Why Jean? I think that Xxxxx is more qualified than she is."

Another news story. The roof over a hydroponic farm in Xxxxxx has collapsed due to heavy snow atop it. So many bushels of this and tons of that were destroyed by the cold before they could be salvaged. This led to a march by protesters demanding a share from other Hydroponic farms. Etc, etc.

~Tom

I got this notification also. I'll post in the other two when I need to.

~Tom

I missed seven posts here so far.

You might go ahead and start threads on those two chapters and when we fell the need, we can post in them - especially if a post here relates to something in 2 or 3 (or vice-versa).

~Tom

Karen:

How about moving the storm further towards the beginning? It can continue to build up until hitting a peak. As Delana is running her Yoga routine, she's sent off balance when the ship gets slapped with a large wave and rolls (or pitches). THis way, you can have her doing exercises and bring the storm into focus also.

~Tom

Off the top of my head, I think that conversations with the President should be kept rather short. He is a terribly busy man, and Delana knows this. Thus, she's reluctant to 'chat'. Instead, she give a report and awaits instructions. In latter scenes, when she is in the physical presence of him, she can be more friendly.

As for the Panama Canal. The news article (byline from, say, The Colon Times or the Panama City Register -- both fake names as far as I know), should mention the huge loss in revenue as shipping slows nearly to a stop, the formation of ice on the shores of Gatun Lake, and the massive layoffs of lock workers as a result.

I think the tension between Delana and her dad is just about right. You don't want either one of them to get too exasperated with the other, but at the same time Delana wants to know that she's gotten this job without her dad pushing from the other end. Maybe a solemn promise from him to her?

Right after Delana hangs up on her dad, she could review her new orders (she had to receive them as written) and perhaps wonder if she is up to the challenge they represent. She's talked to the President and gotten his assurance, She's talked to her dad with mixed feelings, now it is just her and her thoughts: Am I good enough?

~Tom

Ye[. I can access all the chapters, Karen.

The eagle picture is hosted on my web site. If anyone else has pictures they wish to display, send them to me in an email and I'll upload it and give a URL back to it.

~Tom

I might also suggest a new thread for each chapter. That would limit commentary to that chapter alone. Then, create a different thread for overall storyline discussion and 'other stuff'.

~Tom

I agree one hundred percent. Our barracks in Japan was tended to by a number of very nice women who did the laundry, cooked food, and did general cleaning. I was what was called "Charge of Quarters". This meant I kept swearing down to a minimum. One girl came up to me and asked what the American phrase 'mozzarella" meant. I told her it was a cheese for pizza topping. She looked confused and wandered off. Later, I asked one of my guys if he knew why she'd asked me that. He told me that sometimes the guys really wanted to swear (delayed football games comes to mind here) and they'd "invented" a swear word out of mozzarella. So, if they really wanted to swear they switch to pizza cheese, but say it with feeling and punch the air with their fist. Thus, even cheese can be emotive.

~Tom

Minor annoyance here.

I was reviewing some of my pending connection requests. When I click on the link to show me the message I sent, the page jumps to the top and I have to scroll back down to read the message. Clicking on another message produces the same results. Kind of annoying to have to do all that scrolling.

~Tom

I don't know what's up, Jack. I did it again using my Facebook account.

This is the picture: http://intellisigsys.net/pics/eagle2.jpg

~Tom

I use another stylized eagle, It appears to be walking from right to left and looking down at its feet.

~Tom