Great idea. Just the sort of short, to the point, news release that a ship at sea would get. I doubt that fax paper would be wasted on full newspapers anyway, so just a sort of "daily brief" would be what she might get at breakfast, or put under her door during the night.
~Tom
I got this notification also. I'll post in the other two when I need to.
~Tom
Me. I missed 7 posts in the thread.
~Tom
I missed seven posts here so far.
You might go ahead and start threads on those two chapters and when we fell the need, we can post in them - especially if a post here relates to something in 2 or 3 (or vice-versa).
~Tom
For some reason, I am not getting notifications, despite having subscribed to this thread. maybe they'll start soon.
~Tom
Karen:
How about moving the storm further towards the beginning? It can continue to build up until hitting a peak. As Delana is running her Yoga routine, she's sent off balance when the ship gets slapped with a large wave and rolls (or pitches). THis way, you can have her doing exercises and bring the storm into focus also.
~Tom
I tend to agree with Dirk. For the moment, let's leave the panama Canal open. Maybe alluding to a narrow band of land (of which there isn't a whole lot in our hemisphere) for production of food. In the 24th century, I would imagine that inroads have been made towards greenhouses and various other underground food production facilities. Belts may be getting tight, but staples are still being produced.
Funnily enough, I'm working on a rewrite of my novel that has an object hitting the sun and forcing it to cool down. I published the first 5 chapters here, and agreed with the critical reviews that it needed rewriting. There is no reason at all why this novel can't use somewhat the same thing. Or, if a significantly large asteroid hit somewhere like China or the Indian sub-continent, then a great deal of the 'hungry masses" would be out of the picture. Cruel, yes, but realistic as it would cause the natural equivalent of nuclear winter. But, something like that would hardly affect the oceans enough to make much of a difference. What is needed is the sun to stop outputting, or a thick cloud cover for a couple of years.
I reread the chapter again and agree again with Dirk. Let it end as Delana hang up the phone with the President's sense of urgency echoing in her head.
EDIT: I was writing this while Karen responded, so a new post is forthcoming.
~Tom
Off the top of my head, I think that conversations with the President should be kept rather short. He is a terribly busy man, and Delana knows this. Thus, she's reluctant to 'chat'. Instead, she give a report and awaits instructions. In latter scenes, when she is in the physical presence of him, she can be more friendly.
As for the Panama Canal. The news article (byline from, say, The Colon Times or the Panama City Register -- both fake names as far as I know), should mention the huge loss in revenue as shipping slows nearly to a stop, the formation of ice on the shores of Gatun Lake, and the massive layoffs of lock workers as a result.
I think the tension between Delana and her dad is just about right. You don't want either one of them to get too exasperated with the other, but at the same time Delana wants to know that she's gotten this job without her dad pushing from the other end. Maybe a solemn promise from him to her?
Right after Delana hangs up on her dad, she could review her new orders (she had to receive them as written) and perhaps wonder if she is up to the challenge they represent. She's talked to the President and gotten his assurance, She's talked to her dad with mixed feelings, now it is just her and her thoughts: Am I good enough?
~Tom
Wonderful news, Dagnee. Way to go!
~Tom
Ye[. I can access all the chapters, Karen.
The eagle picture is hosted on my web site. If anyone else has pictures they wish to display, send them to me in an email and I'll upload it and give a URL back to it.
~Tom
Testing for inclusion of an image:
Well, that worked well. We can share images also, Karen.
~Tom
I might also suggest a new thread for each chapter. That would limit commentary to that chapter alone. Then, create a different thread for overall storyline discussion and 'other stuff'.
~Tom
I've saved all of the emails between us, so if you want to you can just post your side and I'll add mine. It might look better that way.
~Tom/Bill
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As for swear words, I agree any word can become one depending on the emotion behind it.
I agree one hundred percent. Our barracks in Japan was tended to by a number of very nice women who did the laundry, cooked food, and did general cleaning. I was what was called "Charge of Quarters". This meant I kept swearing down to a minimum. One girl came up to me and asked what the American phrase 'mozzarella" meant. I told her it was a cheese for pizza topping. She looked confused and wandered off. Later, I asked one of my guys if he knew why she'd asked me that. He told me that sometimes the guys really wanted to swear (delayed football games comes to mind here) and they'd "invented" a swear word out of mozzarella. So, if they really wanted to swear they switch to pizza cheese, but say it with feeling and punch the air with their fist. Thus, even cheese can be emotive.
~Tom
Must be some sort of permissions thing between Facebook and that site. I tried once more - even while logged in to Facebook. The blue circle spun, but nothing changed. I left a comment, though, that shows the avatar I use.
~Tom
Minor annoyance here.
I was reviewing some of my pending connection requests. When I click on the link to show me the message I sent, the page jumps to the top and I have to scroll back down to read the message. Clicking on another message produces the same results. Kind of annoying to have to do all that scrolling.
~Tom
Janet:
You can get a wonderful, Windows-friendly, word processor suite with a spreadsheet, Database, Writer, Drawing, and other goodies completely FREE. It is called Open Office.. The URL is: https://www.openoffice.org/
I use it all the time when I am on my Linux machine, but from time to time I'm on my laptop or other desktop that doesn't have MS Word on it.
Their Writer will read/write MS Word-compatible files (.DOC, .RTF) or you can Copy/Paste directly into the editing windows on this site from it.
Did I mention it was free?
~Tom
I don't know what's up, Jack. I did it again using my Facebook account.
This is the picture: http://intellisigsys.net/pics/eagle2.jpg
~Tom
Published! "Knock on Maya Door". A humorous look into the future.
~Tom
They don't even give initials, Tom. What picture did you use?
I use another stylized eagle, It appears to be walking from right to left and looking down at its feet.
~Tom
Oh, I doubt if it will be that long. I estimate around 1200 to 1500 words, Darla. I like them short.
~Tom
Looks like a cool idea. I'll see what I can do. At least 1000 words, but not overly long, I imagine?
~Tom
I did it yesterday, Jack, using my Facebook account. You won't recognize the name, but the initials are B.S.
~Tom
Thanks for all the answers, Sol.
The editing problem has occurred using not only my normal browser (Pale Moon, a derivative of Firefox) but the latest incarnation of Firefox. Not all the time, but enough to me annoying, I still get gaps and stuck keys. By 'gaps' I mean I hit a key, but nothing gets entered no matter how hard I hit the key. As for repeats, I can barely tough the key and I get several repeats. This problem appears to happen after I highlight a phrase and then use the mouse to drag the highlight to a new spot and then release the mouse. Following that action, I get the kayboard failures.
I am not signed up for the class, but I've received two emails for it - both gave me 'Not Authorized'. These could have been random glitches as I imagine there have been quite a few more than just two notifications sent out.
The mass-delete failures occur in the above mentioned browsers all the time, not just occasionally. I've done some testing and found that I can check 6 boxes and all 6 will be deleted at the same time. If I check 7 boxes or more, including the 'delete everything on the page' box at the top, then none get deleted.
~Tom
SolN,
Is there some way for you to allow file and photo sharing in the message system?
Thanks, dags:)
Boy, would that be handy!
~Tom
