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I like the old joke about finding two corpses on a damp rug surrounded by broken glass. Turns out they were goldfish and the cat tipped over their bowl.

The closed room idea has merit. I'll have to think about that some.

~Tom

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Charles_F_Bell wrote:
Charles_F_Bell wrote:
Tom Oldman wrote:

One of the most famous contests every year is the "It was a dark and stormy night..." contest. I absolutely love those contests. Some of the entries are extremely funny, and some a entirely sober, but so inept and inane that you have to laugh. It's a great way to let off steam and get all the bad writing out of your system.

Here's is the LINK: http://www.bulwer-lytton.com/

My $0.03 (adjusted for inflation)

~Tom

Except for the presumption of Bulwer-Lytton as a bad writer is absurdly false, and absurd, too, that his first line of Paul Clifford (1830) is poorly written even in the context of today let alone of his times:

It was a dark and stormy night; the rain fell in torrents - except at occasional intervals, when it was checked by a violent gust of wind which swept up the streets (for it is in London that our scene lies), rattling along the housetops, and fiercely agitating the scanty flame of the lamps that struggled against the darkness.

Two "purplish" words, scanty and struggled within a well-constructed, informative, descriptive, and inviting introduction.

Why double-post me, Charles? Wouldn't once have made your point? I mean, starchy is one thing, but a full-court press is another. Writing is supposed to be fun, not a Doctoral dissertation. Loosen up a little.

~Tom

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One of the most famous contests every year is the "It was a dark and stormy night..." contest. I absolutely love those contests. Some of the entries are extremely funny, and some a entirely sober, but so inept and inane that you have to laugh. It's a great way to let off steam and get all the bad writing out of your system.

Here's is the LINK: http://www.bulwer-lytton.com/

My $0.03 (adjusted for inflation)

~Tom

Excellent, Max! What a wild ride Prunella gave us all. Looking happily forward to more of her antics.

~Tom

Cobber's suggestion is a good one, Nita. Even when I write short stories, I create a whole outline and then go back and fill it in. For a novel, I might put a short paragraph on what I want to accomplish in a given chapter and move on the the next one. Once I get most of the novel in shape, then I flesh out chapters and being posting the first draft.

~Tom

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Ah. I was unaware of that, Sol. Every one of them thought they'd have to pay the money to read my story or join Facebook. I'll pass that along.

Actually, adding that bit to the bottom of the invite might be beneficial and garner a few more writers.

~Tom

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Well, it isn't just "2 cents", but I get what you're saying.

There ought to be some provision to allow those specifically invited to read a story without having to join tNBW.

~Tom

I wanted to invite family members and some friends to read my republished novel. They received the request, but were immediately asked to log in. So far so good for those with a Facebook account. BUT, what of those who are NOT on Facebook? How do they get to read the story? Now, I realize that it is near-blasphemy to say "I don't have a Facebook account", but there are people who don't. I can't think of a single way to let them read except by sending a PDF as an attachment to an email.

Is this the way it is supposed to work? If so, then that limits who can read it. If I publish the story to "Internet" then I could run into the problem of "previously posted" when I try to actually publish the novel.

~Tom

Thanks, Sol. That's what I did a little while ago. It's out there now.
~Tom

Virtually every chapter is now around 2100-2600 words, so I've added a lot - mostly dialogue, but also some more cultural tidbits and scenery descriptions.

~Tom

That does indeed help, Dirk. I was leaning in that direction already, but your reasoning is sound. I also have a couple of new chapters to introduce near the end, and they would throw off the chapter count. I'll wait until this afternoon before I make a final decision. I want to start the new year off right with my novel. I also like the fact that republishing would put it up as "new" to everyone. That was one of my main concerns - getting it out there that I'd revised the novel.

~Tom

Starting today, I will be republishing my novel You Only Love Twice. There are quite a few reviews attached to the current version (0), and the changes I've made sometimes significantly alter a given chapter. It is also quite possible that I will create additional chapters that fit between two chapters of the original novel. In order to keep things from getting out of hand, do I:

1) simply update the version number to 1, add my changes, and publish? (Even if the chapter is a completely new one and displaces what was originally there?)

or

2) Start another novel with the same name + (V1) and add chapters as I go. At the same time, "hide" those chapters previously released?

I also need to know that if I do (1) above, will I be charged additional points to publish the altered chapter? I have over 1000 points, so that isn't a problem to do either one of my choices. I think that simply re-publishing a new thread of chapters would be the "cleaner" way to go.

Any help here?

~Tom

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We have just a little less than 4 hours here to go, but I'm sure that others have already celebrated. Happy New Year, my friends.

~Tom

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Same to you, Randy, and everyone else from me and my family.

~Tom

Voted

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I can see him now, doing Shakespeare: "To be .... or whut?"

~Tom

Congratulations, Dags. *does happy dance for you*

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I was trying to do the same thing and ran into the same problem. I second the request. "Find a Group" is fine, but if you don't know the name, then what?

~Tom

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Good idea.

~Tom

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Thanks so much, Karin. #1 is quite simple, I agree, but I think that after removing the train #2 will probably be the one I go with. My daughter is visiting us from Texas for the holidays, so she is reading over my shoulder. She thanks you for the compliment.

~Tom

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Good advice, Janet. I may do something like that myself. The trouble with rabbit stew is that you first have to catch the rabbit. I may use the red idea by putting the same red sun with the Kanji character on the spine. I have several books in my shelves here that have red on the spine (or are red entirely), and my eye does gravitate to them easily.

~Tom

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Thanks, Corra. My thanks to everyone who responded to my question. I received some good input and it will be taken into account.

As far as my editing goes, I've reached midpoint. I need to scan forward to make sure I don't have to slide anything into the earlier chapters before I begin reposting the novel for comments once more.

Now all I have to do is find someone who will publish it, or figure out how to do it myself. Daunting, but not insolvable.

~Tom

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I like your last sentence, Corra. You, speaking as one who has not red the book, put your finger directly on what was bothering me. The train DOES look cut and pasted. Without it, there is a circular cohesion to the whole cover. Starting at the girl, we see her looking out the window at the buildings. Your eye reads the title and follows down through the pine tree to the tower. Then sweeps left to see the author's name (changed to the same font as the title) while above sits Fuji-san. That completes the circle. In the middle, stands the Kanji character for "Love" centered in a red ball. The train is not necessary. The girl, the font, the stylized tree, the temple, Fuji-san, and the Kanji immediately conjure up Japan.

With the girl facing away from the reader, I think it give her a sort of wistfulness.

~Tom

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#1 does have buildings in the background, Corra, but they are more subliminal and blocky in appearance. As I look at it now, printed on my laser and hung on the wall, maybe a graduated tint, starting light near the bottom and going darker at the top might work to draw out the snow on Fuji-san.

I am also reminded that the MCs use a normal commuting train every working day, so perhaps that would be better than the Shinkansen. Subway trains are quite blocky but have a distinctive front shape.

~Tom

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I really didn't expect this much response. For some reason, I am NOT receiving any notifications for this thread and that bothers me. I've tried unsubscribing and resubscribing, but that hasn't helped. Time to get Sol involved I'm thinking.

Everyone's input will be seriously evaluated by me and my daughter. She seems to be leaning toward #1 also, with an eye to lightening the yellow and changing the shade to a bit more "antique". Your last version, NJC, is a good one, too. One of the things that will happen is to make the title font a bit larger and perhaps slightly "wider". My name will change to the same font and also 1 point larger.

Would #1 improve even more if the buildings were more definid, similar to they way they are in #2 and #3?

What if the Shinkansen were removed from #2? Would that enhance the contrast from city to country, making the woman the "bridge" between them?

~Tom