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Thanks, Vern. I usually research way more than I use. I'm sure we all do. It will probably distill down to just one to two paragraphs, but I'd like it to be at least theoretically possible. I posted my question on a few science forums as well. If the real answer is too complicated to write simply, then I'll probably just write it as a rushed vaccine that caused sterility in the kids.

However, as a result of this exercise, I realized that the human engineering disaster can be the same one that causes civilization to collapse in our century, leading to the future world as I've written it. If I weren't doing the homework and thinking about it, the book would have had two major disasters to describe instead of one.

I went through the same exercise with a future version of an auto recycling plant that allowed me to create a very simple solution that accomplished what the scene needed without totally ignoring reality. Otherwise, I would have had acids, and one-way force fields, huge vents, etc., none of which is needed in the version I eventually settled on.

I can't wait to write the physics for dogfights in space. tongue

Dirk

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(11 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)

Adrian, below are the details to one of the Kindle books I found to be a great primer on Mayan civilization. If I remember correctly, it was only a few bucks. Charles River Editors make a nice series like this of other ancient societies. I considered Egypt, among others, for my book.

Chichen Itza: The History and Mystery of the Maya’s Most Famous City By Charles River Editors
Harasta, Jesse; Charles River Editors (2013-10-10).

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I think this may be easier than I thought. Most of us are carriers of one disease or another due to recessive genes. It's only when you pair up two recessive genes that you get an actual disease. Given that, I think it would be easy to create an effect with an undertested vaccine. You vaccinate the population in one generation causing recessive gene damage in that generation, leading to a pair of damaged genes in 25% of the offspring, who then have an actual disease. In this case, the disease is sterility.

How's my logic?
Dirk

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Assuming I can figure out a way to accidentally sterilize a few billion people with a hurriedly engineered vaccine against an ebola-like pandemic, I can also use that as my humanitarian disaster that brings society to its knees in 2071 A.D. No more need for a separate disaster from a runaway computer virus unleashed by the NSA.

I could make the vaccinated humans the ones who are sterilized, although I think that would be noticed before the vaccination got far. Ideally, it's the children or grandchildren who should be sterile, so there's no way to stop the disaster once it becomes known. I don't use an ebola-like disease to wipe out billions because I also need a reason why humans would impose a permanent ban against genetic engineering, preferably this century.

Worst case, I could have a genetically-engineered virus with a lengthy incubation period escape from a medical lab, not unlike the morons who just shipped live anthrax around the world.

dagnee, I haven't forgotten about David DiSalvo. I just wanted to wait until I understand the genetic process better.

Thanks to all who can help.
Dirk

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(11 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)

Have your mages/characters be responsible, whether intentionally or not, for either the rise or fall of the entire Maya civilization, before the Spanish arrive, of course, and kill everyone off with new diseases and weapons. That would give you epic scope. Maybe even more than one book.

Okay, I did the hard part. All you have to do is figure out a few details.
Dirk

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(11 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)

Throw some ideas up in the group forum asking for feedback. I suggest using a new thread with a better title to draw more interest. Something like "Need help defining a fantasy story revolving around the ancient Maya". Include a few ideas for stories and see what kind of feedback you get.

Dirk

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(11 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)

I researched the ancient Mayans, Inca, and Aztecs for one of my chapters. All three would be fantastic settings/cultures for a fantasy story. I focused on the Mayans (technically, it's Maya, but whatever). Their pyramids, monuments, culture, and technology rivaled those of the Egyptians. All three of the aforementioned societies could be quite violent, though, including human sacrifice. If you want to see how bad it might have been, rent Apocalypto.

Dirk

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Max, I think I read your first chapter. I don't recall any major male characters in the story. How about a computer nerd, robot repairman, and would-be-author who falls in love with your MC. He could even be the author of the book you're writing. Don't forget to give him Harry Potter glasses held together above the nose with masking tape.

I harped on Janet TP until she gave me a male character in her latest story to identify with. Makes for a much better read, I thought.

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Max, I'm very sorry about your health problems. Feel free to go off on tirades any time you like. PM me if you want and we can trade horror stories. :-) For my own demons, I tend to incorporate them into my two main characters. As a result, they are two very screwed up characters, increasing with each chapter.

Thanks

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Karin et al, thanks for the additional info. I'll start hunting where you suggest.

Following is the part I'm most unclear about. Let's say that most men and women are innoculated via gene therapy against a highly contagious and fatal disease. Everything seems fine. People go back to their normal lives and start having babies who are now probably carriers of the modified gene by inheriting it from their parents. Those children have babies, etc.

How might the modified gene eventually cause sterility or defective babies several generations beyond the original innoculation? I understand the basics of DNA from the parents combining after conception, but not how such a defect would creep in after a few generations.

Thanks.
Dirk

Sol, one of my new readers made a copy of my second draft to read offline because he didn't think he could finish it during the one week trial period. Currently, what happens when the trial is over? Will the reader still be able to read and leave reviews? I want his input, but don't want to have to track a bunch of offline reviews on top of regular and inline reviews if I can help it.

Thanks.
Dirk

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Now to put this baby on steroids!

As mentioned in my earlier post, genetic engineering of humans will be banned some time in the next few hundred years because of too many unintended side effects, including Apollo's incurable Trembler's disease. I was hoping to make the cause for the ban huge, big enough to scare the human race from ever resuming engineering on humans.

Specifically, I've always wondered if it was possible to genetically engineer ourselves into sterility that doesn't show for a few generations. Billions of people potentially becoming evolutionary dead ends. Probably the result of providing resistance against an ebola-like worldwide epidemic. The unintended consequence would be a great reason for a universal ban. They'll call it God's Law (i.e., don't mess with creation).

Can anyone envision a scenario as to how that might work?

Thanks.
Dirk

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I found a really simple example that demonstrated the Principle of Parsimony for evolution. I knew about Occam's razor, but it never occured to me that it applied so well to the construction of evolutionary trees. Cool. Thank you, NJC.

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That's a cool quote.

Mike, I just want more than "It's a mental illness and there is no cure." I'm hoping to make it a genetic change that can't be altered because, as NJC, suggested, the change would be incompatible with the human body in that future era because of too much tinkering.

I'll probably include a galaxy-wide ban on genetic engineering, enacted some time in the 22nd or 23rd century after too many severe side-effects come to light that can't be undone. Apollo's illness will just be one more resulting illness. A ban on genetic engineering will explain why humans in 4017 aren't genetically-engineered supermen, which seems to be where we're headed.

Thanks to all. I'll follow up on some of the posts to this thread.

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(2 replies, posted in Science Fiction, Steampunk, and Space Opera)

Max, how far back does the car need to bounce? If it's a few inches, just go with it. I'm probably totally wrong on the physics here (usually am), but if the car is going from 40 mph to zero, wouldn't the rear of the car lift at least a little off the ground for a moment? If so, then it can drop down and bounce backward, especially if it's on a hill.

Dirk

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(10 replies, posted in Writing Tips & Site Help)

Amy, tsk, tsk. Shouldn't you be writing?

I'm still considering Swarm as the Realm's roaming equivalent of the Praetorian Fleet.

Besides that, I want it very simple. I'll either go with Fleet/fleet or Fleet/force to distinguish the whole fleet from a subset of the fleet. Hopefully, I won't find it necessary to name battle groups.

Most readers probably won't give a damn about Fleet/fleet, but it eases my OCD. :-)

Gracias to all.
Dirk

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(29 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)

Thank you, Karin.

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Nice! So there is a potential cascade effect.
Good to know.

Thanks
Dirk

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The disease manifests as noted above, resulting in visible trembling, which can be taken as a sign of mental illness. Apollo comes from a long line of psychopathic emperors who routinely overthrow each other using the family motto for cover: Only the mentally fit shall rule! Apollo has a half-brother who wants the throne but is not in the direct line of succession, so he's looking for an excuse to move against Apollo.

There are many ways I could represent this, including a disease that's not well understood but is believed to be the result of long-term genetic engineering. With that sentence alone, I'm halfway home. I could stop there, but I'd like to throw in a little genetic depth, on the order of a paragraph.

For example, if the illness is the result of genetic engineering that modified a single gene who's only other known purpose is to, say, improve night vision, then you stop messing with that gene in humans, and the illness goes away. If, however, the gene change(s) provide the only known defense against the "Ebola" of the fifth millenium, then there is no alternative. Again, I could stop there.

However, I'd like to make it so fundamental to genetically-engineered humans that there is no way to change the gene(s) in question without a cascade of deadly effects from other, dependent genes that have also been messed with. Essentially, is it possible to construct a house of cards from which there is no realistic hope of return?

My second question I can probably research on my own, which is how is gene therapy able to alter all copies of a defective gene in a body with trillions of cells that are constantly dividing?

Ideas?
Dirk

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The character, Apollo, experiences tremors in his left hand and forearm, especially when he is under stress. Tentatively, it's called Trembler's disease. There's no known cure and the only way to control it is with narcotics. By the time the story gets rolling, Apollo is already an addict.

The mental disease plays into a larger theme in the story about Apollo and his cousin, Joseph, both secretly hearing the voice of God, their reactions to him, and the consequences for the galaxy.

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Thanks, dagnee. I'll wait to see if anyone on the site has any knowledge on the subject and then contact DiSalvo with (hopefully) intelligent questions.

I do plan to keep the mental illness a secret from most of the character's family and the galaxy at large, as I do currently. However, my previous attempt at this fell apart after several chapters. I'm hoping to avoid that in my next draft.

Thanks for the lead.
Dirk

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Hi.

I'm trying to create a mental disease that strikes one of my characters in a sci-fi future set in 4017. I was hoping to make the disease a side-effect of genetic engineering that cannot be undone.

1. Is it possible to tinker with our DNA to such an extent that the side-effect becomes essentially permanent (e.g., a series of interdependent gene changes that are too complex to unravel just the gene causing the mental disease, without also causing a cascade of other, more serious side-effects)?

OR

2. Can I make it simple, such as making genetic changes to fight off a fatal disease, which results in the mental disease as a side-effect?

Thanks.
Dirk

amy s wrote:

I think there are two kinds of funny bones. Ex- those who get Seinfeld and those who don't. I am one of those who don't.

And no, I didn't google. I was laughing too hard.

I could never get into Seinfeld. Ditto for Everybody Loves Raymond. However, for years I thought Married With Children was too crude. I'd watch a few minutes here and there while channel surfing. Eventually, I watched whole episodes and soon thought it was a riot. I've since seen every episode.

There are two answers:
a) I have more named entities in my spreadsheet than I will probably ever use. For example, I have ten classes of warships, ten classes of weapons, etc., but I ony sprinkle some of those names in here and there to add a little realism. So far, I've only ever mentioned one ship class by name in the book. Similarly I have ship names (only three in book one), and ship types that are easy to understand (e.g., starfighter, troop carrier, civilian transport, etc.).
b) I remind the reader what the named entity is. For example, rather than saying Dawn, I refer to it as the planet Dawn or the rebel planet, etc. Similarly, rather than saying General Equitius, I say General Equitius, the Imperial physician. In my case, it's especially important because those planets and characters generally only appear once every two chapters (I alternate back and forth between two interwoven stories.