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Norm d'Plume wrote:

I've made great progress myself. Today I printed my notes for the next chapter. It may not sound like much, but I have an HP printer with a fussy output tray. It took at least 5 seconds to open the thing. After that I took a break to read more of my new physics textbook, watched the "Passion" episode of the Bible series on Netflix (too graphic), watched part of the Dune miniseries while in a deep tub of hot water (it was Heaven, if you'll pardon the pun) reread my Caligula chapter for further tweaks before Amy makes me rewrite it, and am about to read the news, followed by a reread of the first New Testament chapter, since I forgot it all. So basically, I didn't write a damn thing today. Tomorrow I'll read the notes I printed today (7 single spaced pages of drudge!), and then I may actually write something. I'll start small: one sentence. I'll report back after it's written.

Nite all!

I'm tired just reading this! How did that sentence come along?!

njc wrote:

Hey, I think I was the first to mention it here.

You did! But you underplayed the importance and glamour of the post though! tongue

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njc wrote:
Janet (AJ) Reid wrote:

LOL! And also, don't let the feminists see those silly princess warrior outfits! They'd get all upset and they're already really so upset they can't make sense. big_smile

Oh, but they don't know what's really important.  Fortunately, Agatha has some goot pipple to look after her. smile

Somewhere a feminist's blood just boiled! LOL

Love girlgenius! smile

Elisheva Free wrote:

I have officially 'outlined' chapters 1-16 using flash cards and mini sticky notes. Yay for cheap office supplies! Now I just have to rearrange everything and in the process, rewrite all my chapters. Whee!
Also, I finally figured out how to use the word quota aspect of my writing program, so now I can keep track of how much I write in a day/week and make sure I'm not falling behind.

Maybe I can keep up this time?! *crosses fingers*

njc wrote:

I'm slacking off ... by going over the old Darwin Awards.  The site's less busy than it used to be, but if Amy hasn't read it, she should.  There are a lot of interesting ER stories.

There are some golden awards from days gone by. But it has been quiet recently ... Maybe all these rules and regulations are working after all?

njc wrote:

What, you're the privy councillor?

Nay, 'tis the Groom of the Stool that's a most coveted position.

https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Groom_of_the_Stool

View yourselves educated as from now. tongue

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amy s wrote:

Amendment to previous statement: date will move up if/when Janet's boss irritates enough to make her leave.

We can also meet somewhere halfway if that works out cheaper/easier/better. I'm stuck until end of March next year, minimum time before I can transfer back to anywhere. My current visa end March 2018 and can be extended for another 2 years, but no way how I feel at the moment. Things are much better at work overall given that people are doing their work again. I'm still working the next two weekends still, but was promised time off, so I don't mind.

But I'll let you know what's happening! Because THIS needs to happen to make it worthwhile!

Oh, and I got my tax return back. Not good!!! But we think we know where the problem is and if so, it'll look not bad. I won't tell you about my life insurance benefit problems, it's a long sad story. But all this frustration got me writing again, so there's that.

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Unbar wrote:

I've been working on a query for my first book and thinking about the hook for the beginning.  This is what I came up with, "When your greatest wish is granted, there is always a price to pay.  Tommy has lived his dream, but in so doing has unwittingly cursed the world to certain destruction."

What do you think?

Here's my 2 cents. Pretty good and does what I think you intend it to do - made me wonder/curious and I'd want to read more. But I think you can make it shorter still while giving even less away without sacrificing impact and still maintaining the mystery:

"When your greatest wish is granted, there is always a price to pay. Tommy is living his dream, but at what cost?"

Or maybe if you want the reference of the world paying the price to stay in:

"When your greatest wish is granted, there is always a price to pay. Tommy is living his dream, but the world will pay."

You might use some or none of this, but who knows, maybe it gives you a few more ideas to play around with? But personally, I'll leave out the destruction bit as to up the mystery.

Hope this helps! Cheers Janet

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I wrote a bit tonight. smile Things are 100% better at work, so that helps. I'm still going to work overtime until the end of the month, but then things should almost be as good as back to normal. The plan is to try and do a few reviews where I can, and write in between as much as I can find time with life, family, food and sleep. So hoping to have a new chapter out soon!

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njc wrote:

There's a way to use terms and delay defining them.  See this page and the next.  You can let the kolee and zumil be  fully defined later, with just a hint now.

LOL! And also, don't let the feminists see those silly princess warrior outfits! They'd get all upset and they're already really so upset they can't make sense. big_smile

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amy s wrote:

Sorry about the manager, Janet. Take a deep breath since you aren't concerned about getting the boot and hatch nefarious plots to help make the work situation tolerable. This just moves up my plan to visit sooner. Can't let you leave the States without sharing a bottle of Aussie wine with you.

Thanks Amy! It's almost taken care of now that my boss has started again to do her @#$& job.

Elisheva Free wrote:

What about Warden, at least for the human half of the partnership? It is their responsibility to care for their dragon, so the definition fits, but isn't necessarily obvious. The general populace could assume that Wardens care for them instead, keeping the intrinsic nature of the dragon-human bond a secret. The only problem then is finding a name for the dragons that are partnered this way.

Dragon Warden doesn't roll of the tongue so to speak. Dragon Keeper maybe? Or even Dragon Ranger but Ranger could sound too modern again.

As for the dragons, Human Alter (as in Alter Ego or Alternate), Human Kin or Kinsdragon as in Kinsfolk, Human Console or Human Solace (as in giving comfort), Human Squire (maybe not the last one, that's just me showing off my 'research' hehehehe).

I might not even understand your question correctly, but these are my suggestions and I stand by them! smile

ps - this is also THE most creativity you're going to see from this side today! tongue wink big_smile

I thought K was more my age?! yikes

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njc wrote:

Oh, don't hold back.  Tell us what you really feel!

LOL, I think your ears are bleeding enough already and this is the dragon's thread. Those guys just turn you into a little heap of ashes, so I don't want to take any chances! wink

njc wrote:

Seriously, that looks like a reason to bring someone in from overseeas.  Once you go back, you'll be a buried body on this side of the divide, and back home it will be your word against management's.
Hmm.  Write what you know.  I wonder if I can use your misfortune in my story somewhere.  (Your lemon, my lemonade.  Sorry.)

I'm sure once I leave, I'll be blamed for everything that goes wrong for at least a year or so! That's how life rolls! smile

I'm actually thinking, one of my villains will be a female in one of the next books! I won't even need to dig deep! tongue But by all means, if you can work this into one of your stories, it would be so worth the pain. So please do! I can only imagine what you'll do with this!!! So please please, will you?!

ps - no need to apologise, if I don't want that, I shouldn't rant on a writer's site! big_smile

I know we might have a few erotica writers, don't think we have any Dark erotica writers. But that's not the point. It always starts somewhere and then expand, so one day, this could be us 'light' writers ...

http://www.huffingtonpost.com/mara-whit … 97502.html

For most, there's not clear guidelines or criteria to what Amazon deem 'questionable'. But it also seems as if Amazon are simply reacting to complaints, and it only seems as if only one person need to have an issue for them to pull books ... I hope this isn't so.

A writer in another group I belong to, had this happened to him. His book (the 3rd one of a series) was on pre-order and doing really well, but was pulled by Amazon due to 'content'. He had to write humiliating emails and FB posts to explain the situation as he didn't know who had pre-ordered his latest book - Amazon's message to his potential (and existing) readers read more like he had something to feel ashamed about.

He has since moved so Smashwords, and his readers are following him over there in droves, more than he had pre-orders for, so the impact ended to be a blessing really. He's also planning to remove the first 2 books of the series from Amazon once his KU contract expires. The rest of the series will also not see the light on Amazon.

So it's not the end all. But it's still a concern that Amazon are now deeming themselves to be our Watchers.

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njc wrote:

You shouldn't be a techie.  You should be a manager.  Managers get up early so they can boss us around.  Techies stay late trying to figure out how to do what the bosses want--and they prefer to work after the bosses go home because the bosses like nothing more than to keep the techies tied up in meetings stroking their nefarious egos.  smile/2.718... .  (That denominator is the limit [as n goes to zero] of the nth root of ( 1 + n ).  A most wonderful number.)

Don't get me started after the week I just had. My opinion of managers, which I already thought pretty low, dropped even lower - at this rate, they're approaching the elevation of my opinion for HR and IT if not risking overtaking those two who really put in extraordinary effort to get me to think more of a rock than their capabilities i.e. instead of asking them to their job, it's just easier to do it yourself.

Over the last 3 weeks, things happened and I realised that my current boss is a lying control freak of epic proportions. Just because she doesn't trust anyone else and had to cover her arse, she directly caused one of my projects to slip with more than a week (it would've been a month if it wasn't for the project manager and the team, me included, that put in massive amounts of overtime to come up with ways and implementing them to minimise the overall impact - so no writing happening).

She hates me at the moment because I got tired of her f#cking empty promises that never realised (and all the while, she tells everyone else she has the info when she didn't) because she's too busy with everything else apart from what she's supposed to be doing - so Thursday, after 3 weeks of begging her to take the 5 minutes she needed to do her f#cking job and being told it WILL happen that week, I send out an email with a "status update" - and copied a few other people (I held back and kept it to her pay-grade, I was sorely tempted to take it one level up, but decided to leave that for the Friday update if needed). Funniest thing - got the info that afternoon! More funnier - the guy doing the work was done Monday already ... If I had known who was working on it, we would've been able to make this whole thing go away actually. But I didn't, because my f#cking boss is a control freak (which is a nice way of saying she doesn't trust me ...)

If she doesn't move soon, I'll have to. I can't work with people like that and keep my mouth shut. I have zero respect for her anymore. And like I said, she's not impressed with me at the moment. But she can go f#ck herself for all I care - if she can't manage and delegate, I'll do that for her too. And if she doesn't like it, well, she can stop involving herself in all kinds of other sh#t she has zero reason to, and start doing it herself. I'll go back to being an engineer (and relatively happier) then too.

There's no way she can get rid of me - there's only one other person in the department that can take on 2x $40-50 million projects at once - and he's already working on a $200+ million and a $5-10 million project - he got the second project because the guy that does all the 'small' projects couldn't cope with his workload (but it was more he couldn't cope with a $5-10 million project or knows what to do with projects once they have a clue what needs to be done). She advertised recently for more positions because we're understaffed at the moment (one of the reasons why they moved people from other parts in the world to here - I also now understand much better why they can't keep people), and got 3 replies with, combined for all of them, less process design experience than what I have in my small toe (what they need to learn, I have forgotten already, and I'm not even one of the best, they have that much). So yeah, she can ask me to go back to Aus (and the company can pay for the privilege) and then have to find 2-3 people from somewhere else to take on my workload (more if they don't have experience and need to be trained). Or she can dish it out to the others in the department and let the whole project portfolio go to hell. Tough choices, but hey, that's why they get paid the big bucks, right? Have to love it when you can't blame the engineers too! *I'm a bad person, I'm working on it!* wink

From my experience, bosses hate not being in control, and she's really bad, so I can just imagine that my work environment is going to be great (\sarc). Once I've done my time and met the conditions of my contract (7-8 months to go), I'll feel no guilt to start looking for other opportunities (except for the project teams, but by that time, me leaving shouldn't be too bad).

/rant

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Sometimes you get a comment like: This shouldn't be a flashback, but have it's own scene. And you agree, despite knowing it's not just a misplaced comma. *looks at everyone in the room, you know who I'm talking of* smile

Have no idea (as always) what you guys are talking about. *googles* SF from before I was born (that doesn't happen often!). Okay, that makes sense why I haven't heard of it. *phew*

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How about creating an experimental one, close it and see if it's deleted or not? That's what I would've done. smile

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Elisheva Free wrote:

It is morning and I am awake!! big_smile

So... I just switched to a morning shift, which is going to take some getting used to. My only free time lately has been my commute, so I keep making notes on plot ideas rather than writing. Hopefully I'll get used to this new schedule soon and pump out another couple chapters. smile


-Elisheva

You have my sympathies. We've switched from 4x10hr days per week to 5x8hr days and my whole routine has been turned upside down.

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Norm d'Plume wrote:

What is a Mar and why does it eat the word 'everyone''?

It's a scary thing from Dr Ess's imagination and it's THAT hungry that it's eating words!

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njc wrote:

But ... still something remains undisclosed.

Patience, dear Watson! Heaps are still undisclosed. Baby steps ... the mystery of the bad guy and his motivation will be cleared up over the next chapter or so, and right at the end, the mystery for book 2 will be alluded to. I wonder if anyone will catch it. Well, time will tell!

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MAJOR ANNOUNCEMENT!!!!

(1) The latest chapter reveal the villain and someone in this group was right all along. He or she gets bragging rights. smile

(2) I will catch up with reviews this week. I've been really bad focusing on getting this chapter done. I'm not entirely happy with the emotional content, but will fix that with all the rest when I review NS again in future.

Thanks for all the support so far. This group is AWESOME! Luv you guys! xx

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Norm d'Plume wrote:
njc wrote:

A small (groundhog meat) correction on that Standardese quote: A =type derived by a derived type definition= may be further derived if the derived type is used as parent type in another derived type definition.

Reads like C++.

Then C++ is Romance. smile

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njc wrote:

Malcom Turnbull Wants to Destroy Australian Literature -- linked via The Passive Voice.

I don't think they'll go through with this. Of all the things, this should be last on the to-do list, if at all. Then again, politicians have the cunning ability to throw all reason and logic to the wind. Best will probably be to join the resistance if this starts to look possible.

I kill characters to make readers hate the bad guy. So far it works like a charm. Then again, I write Romance. Killing is frowned upon and should be used sparingly as we all know peeps read Romance because it's sweet and not ao much bloody. Looks at K. Looks at my time period. Well, that's the theory for MOST Romances anyways! smile

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So the attack from behind with a dagger can hit say the kidneys and death could occur in 10 minutes or so? The dagger will be pulled out, so bleeding is a go.

ps - K will be proud at all the support you guys are giving me to kill good guys! tongue