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Completed a review of Chapter 4 from Jube's, The World of Phyries

Completed a Review of Randall's, A Cartel's Revenge, CH 3

Completed a review of Chapter 28 of Cobber's State of Vengeance.

Completed a review of njc's Sorcerer's Progress Book 1, chapters 1 and 2

I've completed reviews for chapters 17 and 18 of Alkemi's Souring Seas.

You'll have to read the first three chapters to get a sense of things, but they've been reviewed thoroughly. So, I don't mind if you start with chapter #four.

Completed reviews of Chapters 7 and 8 in CJ's, "Raven's Curse".

I look at the reviews as a type of conversation. From that perspective, it would be rude not to respond  in a timely fashion. Part of the response is incorporating corrections. As some of you may have noticed I put a revision time stamp in the chapter descriptions. I wish this was a more common practice. This has proven useful to a number of reviewers to send a message to me about the chapter changes. I agree with Randall that it is rare to receive the same nits. Once the grammar nits are corrected the reviews focus on more meaty matters.

Tanessa's last talk with him is a subtle Chekov gun. Johan does not get much face time but he's a major plot mover. He leads the expedition back to Earth, sends his grandson to meet with Taikei and Akira, ensures Tanessa is successful in the naming ceremony, conducts the abduction of the Syndicate leaders and the cybercriminals, and warns the MiBBs about the prisoners. He prepares Tanessa for her future destiny and sacrifices himself to prevent the total elimination of humanity. I have to figure a better way of portraying that last part. The sidebar scene should help.

Now I've hinted in book one (Colony a Bye Bye) during Tanessa's conversation with Johan that he see his impending death. That his mission is to mitigate the MiBBs crusade. Part of this is done by informing Earth of the impending invasion. So, should I reveal in the Command Center chapter that he is "Nightstalker" or wait till a  later point?

How to make an Anti-Hero.
In my novel Jenny is not a villain but an Anti-Hero. A villain intentionally wants to create pain and suffering, an Anti-Hero intends well but creates evil nonetheless.

So, what's the best way to portray an Anti-Hero?