Hey Rach! I'm in the same boat. Back after a two year hiatus. Started posting a contemporary romance but I normally do heavy sci-fi fantasy romance.
It's fun being back!
Bimmy
52 2016-09-05 22:43:04
Re: Say the first word that comes to mind... (1,634 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)
scones
53 2016-09-05 22:07:50
Re: Question about Voice and First Person (6 replies, posted in Writing Tips & Site Help)
thank you!
54 2016-09-05 18:44:56
Re: Question about Voice and First Person (6 replies, posted in Writing Tips & Site Help)
Norm d'Plume wrote:
I don't write in first person, but the same problem arises in 3rd person. I use a short "tell" when I don't want to slow the scene by showing. The example I ran into was "The admiral bristled." I could have shown bristling, but it was a tense, high octane moment and flowery description wouldn't cut it.
Hey Norm,
I think that's the perfect place to "tell" is when you don't want to weaken tension or slow down action. In my case, I don't necessary want the scene to be absurd, just want the reader to know the MC thinks it's absurd. So would maybe an italicized thought that its' absurd be better? But to me that seems like more words than needed to get the point across.
Bimmy
55 2016-09-05 18:42:37
Re: Question about Voice and First Person (6 replies, posted in Writing Tips & Site Help)
Tom Oldman wrote:
Don't cut the word, Bimmy. I see this out of context, but I have a feeling that you've woven this word/sentence into part of a description of a a given scene. If you've described the scene properly, even the reader might see it as absurd.
~Tom
Hey Tom,
Thanks for the reply. I don't necessary want the scene to be absurd...just want the reader to know the MC things it's absurd.
Bimmy
56 2016-09-05 18:40:13
Topic: Adjective order...never thunk (0 replies, posted in Writing Tips & Site Help)
57 2016-09-05 15:37:50
Topic: Question about Voice and First Person (6 replies, posted in Writing Tips & Site Help)
Okay, I tried to write this a hundred ways, but I'm not coherent today. So I'm just going to give a specific instance.
I'm writing in first person. The line is:
I stood in the shadows and watched the absurd scene before me.
Several reviewers have suggested I cut the word 'absurd' out and let the reader decide. My problem with doing this is...the reader might not think it's absurd and the MC definitely does. I'm going to come to areas like this many times in this story where the MC views things a certain way and the reader might not agree with her. I understand the concept of show not tell and letting the reader decide how a thing is. Is there another way to handle this?
Thanks,
Bimmy
58 2016-09-05 06:21:35
Re: Acts/ Dictates/ Mandates/ Mantle - Amy's Thread (1,905 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Hey Amy!
I know I can fimd.you on this forum. You don't have to review my current wip if you don't want. It's contemporary romance .... sort of. It's not even my thing so
.. lol! Anyway...look at it if you want or wait until I do something more fantasy related. Im.glad I'm back too. Feel like my brain is just waking up after a coma or something. Feel like I'm learning how to write again.
Bimmy
59 2016-09-05 00:44:15
Re: Say the first word that comes to mind... (1,634 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)
Gator aid
60 2016-09-04 16:16:30
Re: Who felt the quake? (7 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)
Yep...we had LIke 7 in the 24 hours preceding "the big one". I didn't feel any of those though.
61 2016-09-04 15:32:38
Re: Say the first word that comes to mind... (1,634 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)
Fire proof
62 2016-09-04 15:25:27
Re: Who felt the quake? (7 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)
Only one report of a head injury. Some structural damages near the epicenter. Our governer demanded all fracking cease immediately since the epicenter was an injection well.
63 2016-09-04 02:32:29
Re: Who felt the quake? (7 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)
Pawnee, OK but I had friends all the way in Dallas and North weastern Missouri feel it.
Bimmy
64 2016-09-04 00:47:03
Topic: Who felt the quake? (7 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)
I did. 7am. Wynnewood, ok. W9ke me up from a dead sleep and almost shook my double wide off its blocks!
Bimmy
65 2016-09-03 04:39:26
Re: Say the first word that comes to mind... (1,634 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)
Baby chicks
66 2016-09-03 01:44:00
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Deez Nuts
67 2016-09-03 00:11:33
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Donuts
68 2016-09-02 19:18:03
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Ocean's eleven
69 2016-09-02 18:10:30
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7/11
70 2016-09-01 18:33:48
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Pizza
71 2016-09-01 14:52:52
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White Castle
72 2016-09-01 02:58:05
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Ovulation
73 2016-08-31 19:51:28
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Clap on
74 2016-08-31 16:59:44
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Clingon
75 2016-08-31 16:48:30
Re: Say the first word that comes to mind... (1,634 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)
Woof
