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Double quote are used to depict words spoken out loud. Generally used in dialogue between 2 or more characters. However, you can have words spoken aloud with only a single character (I often scream "Fuck" at other drivers when alone in my car), but that's the exception rather than the rule.

Single quotes are generally reserved to reference something said in past tense. It can be used in narration and in active dialogue. It's simply a way to portray a recollection of spoken word.

Narration, depending on the type (there are several), is generally where the reader gets a much more in-depth peek at what the character is thinking or feeling. It's also used to fill in subtext (things that aren't said), define stakes, flesh out details, or to illustrate the stark differences between what a character thinks and what he says.  The narrative in your example was strong because it fleshed out the stakes, gave us a peek into what he was really thinking (but not saying) and filled in a few informational holes. Putting all that in quotes would get very confusing to the reader...because it changes it from narration, to dialogue.

If characters are talking to each other directly, it should get handled the same as you would for all dialogue; double quotes, tags etc. But if the narrator isn't speaking to another character, it doesn't classify as dialogue anymore unless he's speaking it all aloud to himself--which might work in tiny snippets, but would be quite odd and tiresome in a long read. 

I'm a heavy dialogue writer and all of my stories have many characters weaving in and out, talking to each other etc. I also generally have a narrator (usually the MC). It's not difficult to accomplish this if you pay close attention to creating character voice, utilizing solid transitions, good tagging and employ solid punctuation consistently.

As far as multiple narrators, there are loads of available techniques to do this effectively--the top 2 being differentiating characters by giving each a unique voice, and creating rock solid transitions--so switches between narrating characters are crystal clear to the reader. Switching heads in a 1st person narrative isn't an easy thing by any stretch--which is why so many writers go the route (the lazy one IMHO) of titling who is speaking, or using new chapters to switch heads. It's so widely done (especially these days) because getting good at creating written transitions takes a lot of work.

Paying for membership affords you access to the entire site, not just the basic side. Whether that's right for you depends on your planned level of involvement. If you plan to be actively involved, then yes, there are plentiful benefits.
As to 'speedy' feedback, it's not how the site works, but you can always come to the forum asking for feedback and offer yours in return. Reciprocal reviewing is the foundation of this site (and also how you earn points). The more you review others, the more likely they are to review you in return. The other thing that helps TONS is being responsive to critique. When someone leaves you a review, you will see red notification of it on your homepage--respond to it. Dormant critiques are a quick way to ensure you won't get reviewed by that person again.

Good luck!

I think Sol called us 'Founders', but either way, Dirk is right. There are a ton of inactive accounts due to this. My excuse for not being as active as I once was is a complete and utter life change which has upended virtually everything. I'm just now peeking out from beneath the ashes and hope to get back into full swing soon.

Welcome to the site!

And for comparison, I use Firefox and my file format is also .docx

Hey JP, sorry to hear you're going through this. Similar happened to me years ago when the hard drive in my writing computer died unexpectedly. Like vern, I was able to get most of it recovered by paying a technician to do it.

That experience taught me the value of buying a small external hard drive that I used only for back ups of my writing files. I DID NOT leave it connected to my computer and only took it out once a week to perform back ups. To preserve day to day edits, I used a simple thumb drive which I would erase each week after a successful back up to the bigger external drive. 

It's a laborious thing, but is the only safety net that's virtually fool proof. And thanks to the fire proof safe I bought, even if my home goes down in flames, my writing won't because that's where I store my external.

Edited to add: the reason I stopped keeping my external connected to the computer was I ALSO had an external hard drive go bad once too from keeping it connected and 'on' all the time. They also don't handle power surges well either.  Safest bet, connect--back up files--disconnect and store. Personally, not a fan of cloud services for storing writing. None of those services are guaranteed to be there forever.

I don't know if there is a bug, or something on my end, but the contest is also not showing any entries.

I think you are asking too broad a question. Yes, there are plenty of articles out there for how to solidly craft an antagonistic character, but none of them will specifically cover what you are asking for. Only the writer can answer such things. Like Rachel said, the style of action flows directly from overarching motive of your specific character in X situation, so a book will only give you examples and generalities.

I can somewhat relate though because when drafting my last wip, I was nagged by the overriding question of motive of my antag. As a pantser, I only had a very basic and general idea. But because there were many questions of legalities pertaining to my subject matter, I felt a much stronger than normal need to think more seriously about it early on. I did eventually come up with several potential scenarios and just kept writing until the one that made the most sense for my characters, given their situation, began to take shape.

And as vern suggested, an antagonist doesn't have to be a bad guy. They are merely the opposing force to the PRIMARY goal of your Protagonist. So the better questions to ask yourself are: What is my protags primary goal? What obstacles are they going to experience to get it? Once you answer those questions, the primary motive of your Antag is pretty much spelled out. You can always layer in secondary motives to bring color and dimension to their opposition (which I usually do in the edit phase when I have the fuller picture in front of me).

Well done Jack!

Well, I went to see what you were posting most recently and the genre isn't really my cup of tea. That said, one of the issues I saw immediately is that you're creating a new project every time you post a chapter--instead of combining them as chapters in one project. This makes it much more difficult for potential reviewers.

Another issue I saw, which admittedly might be a me thing, but of the two chapters I peeked at, you're using different, hard to read fonts. And they vary in size.  It may just be the way you are capturing them out of your word program, but in general, it's FAR less taxing on the eyes to read things in universal fonts and sizes here on the site so you may want to consider reformatting.

Here's the long form query:
LISA DUNN has no way of knowing her fragile adult life is about to become far more fearful than her childhood as a habitually abused orphan. Her first clue should have been when she hears from a panicked CHERYL WHITMAN; best friend she hasn’t seen in fourteen years.

Cheryl whisks back into Lisa’s life with a nefarious tale about being sold into sexual slavery by the malevolent SISTER MARGARET—mother superior of the orphanage they formerly called home. Armed with evidence, and on the run, Cheryl asks Lisa for help.

A plan is formed to use Lisa’s job as a journalist to expose Sister Margaret and keep Cheryl safe from the thugs that mean to silence her. But conditions quickly go pear-shaped when Cheryl runs off to retrieve a piece of vital evidence on her own. Lisa gives chase only to receive the answer to an unexpected question: Are they fighting to right a terrible wrong, or are they fighting for their life?

Thrust headfirst into a world of sexual perversion and corruption that encompasses two states, one foreign country, and even the United States Senate, Lisa is forced to decide if she has the strength and emotional resilience to expose, Sister Margaret’s One Big Lie. 

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What's up on the site now is the rough draft. I'll post the rewrite/edit as I go if you are interested.

I can't answer for anyone else, but I've been lost in the ether for the last couple of years...shutting down and selling two businesses, repairing and selling a house, a cross-country move with 3 dogs and a 93 year old mom, a divorce, a cancer diagnosis and becoming disabled. It's been a CRAZY couple of years for me. I'm only just barely coming out of the fog in the last month or so.

Hope everyone else is well.