Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi → The Galaxy Tales - Dirk B.
hah.... not sure how useful that feedback is seeing as I didn't still to one answer.
Having a personal AI that always responds on the party line keeps things deliciously interesting. It also makes it more awkward to scour the local maps database for feminine hygene products when in mixed company. I approve!
Tech naming party:
I'm thinking that anyone who's anyone wears wiselenses and a wisewatch. There is overlap in functionality, but only the watch can speak. The lenses can display textual responses visible to the wearer. A multi-party mode is also possible (e.g., connect me to your lenses).
Following are possible names (3 or 4 choices for each numbered list):
1. wisewatch, wise-watch, wise watch (same for lenses), often shortened to watch, lenses, also contacts.
2. intelliwatch, intelli-watch, or intelli watch (same for lenses), often shortened as above.
3. w-watch, e-watch, ewatch, or i-watch (no iwatch, same for lenses), shortened as above.
Examples:
I lost my wisewatch and my wise lenses.
Well, then, dumbass, use my intelli-watch and intellilenses to find them.
Why don't you shove your e-watch and elenses up your...?
Votes?
I should note that intelli has three syllables, whereas wise has just one. There is something to be said for brevity. Also, i-watch and i-lenses are no longer options. Too close to Apple.
Wisewatch.
Try spelling it lenz. Makes it more brand name.
I don't recall a holodeck in Voyager.
Whaaaaaat? It's only a staple for multiple episodes, especially those including the Doctor. See "Notable Appearances" here...
https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Holodeck
Wisewatch.
Try spelling it lenz. Makes it more brand name.
The list of names I gave are the generic ones. The brands are unlikely to be needed.
Yeah. Everything is made by A Company that Makes Everything.
OTOH, 'Lens' recalls the universe of Doc Smith.
amy s wrote:Wisewatch.
Try spelling it lenz. Makes it more brand name.
The list of names I gave are the generic ones. The brands are unlikely to be needed.
Ohhhh wise watch is a play on smart phone. I was wondering about the strange combination of words. X.x
Consider... in a decade the yeh smart phone might be gone if all phones are smart. "Camera"has already undergone this shift. No one says"digital camera" or DSLR anymore. In reverse, you say analog camera to refer to a non smart camera. Phones will eventually follow this pattern. If you're doing this just for world building ignore this consideration
Yes, it's world building (or should I say worldbuilding? :-). "Personal AI" as the name for smartwatches sucked. I considered other names for smartwatches, such as wisething, wise thinker, and doohickey. However, I decided yesterday to add smart contacts to the book, so I need two names. I kind of like wisething (watch), in spite of (because of?) its sexual connotation, and wiseeyes (lenses). It would be a little weird for adults to use the term wisething, although my book is silly enough that I could get away with it.
Dirk, I read the last two chapters and I'm mulling the big picture. Review soon.
Dirk, I read the last two chapters and I'm mulling the big picture. Review soon.
Thanks!
Just checked the page count on my notes file in preparation for v3. 74 bloody pages!
Dirk, this is why you shouldn't count the number of notes pages!
All the best! Hope you still have some wine left over after celebrating writing THE END.
I've whittled it down to 67. I've reviewed the first 30.
Off to bed!
Don't freak out. I only reviewed you once. I'm not used to revieing on my phone. Oops. Sorry!
Thanks, Amy. I'll start reading tonight and respond tomorrow. I've cleared my schedule specifically for Amy Day. :-)
I've gone through most of my notes. The todo list is 44 pages, all color-coded, but in no way organized. Organizing it will probably take a week. Many of the todos require searches/edits across four seperate Word files. I'm probably better off combining all four acts into a single file for doing all of the minor edits, then split them up again before moving on to v3. Fortunately, Word has a document map for navigation.
What do you guys think about making Joseph a poor teen from the havens, rather than royalty? He would have risen to his position of leader of the teenage cadet corps (the Crusaders) through his own hard work, rather than royal birth. The change would provide a very different POV for Joseph, and he'd be on a completely different side of the tracks from Apollo. Joseph's mother raised him on her own because the father was missing or dead. Joseph is very protective of her. Andrew is Joseph's best friend.
This change means you needs less supporting royalty on Joseph's side (He didn't get much mileage out tof them in the ending anyway)
It makes it (diplomatically) easier to keep Joseph in prison
So... two wins right htere
It also breaks a lot, but I definitely like the idea, as long as I can give him a poor teen's perspective.
For example, if destitute Joseph publishes the video of the little girl dying and the queen is killed, he can't exactly return from the conference to take part in the funeral (he wouldn't be welcome), go to the hotel as the crown prince does, and then sneak away from the guards, to land on a slaver headed to Earth. His disappearance as crown prince is a big deal on the planet, especially since he was supposed to be crowned the next day. Who's going to miss some poor kid from the havens?
If he's that good a cadet, it doesn't matter... he'll be allowed into the funeral. Luke Skywalker snuck into all sorts of high profile situations and no one ever stopped him to ask if he had an invite.
It looks like I can pull it off, but it requires a few role changes. Christian becomes an overly self-assured gay crown prince; Joseph and his mother live in South Haven (the worst of the havens); Paul becomes a background character, good for a few scenes; Andrew is Joseph's best friend who gets killed off early; Adam & Eve are unchanged.
In v2, Joseph's travelling companion bounced back and forth between Paul and Christian for story reasons. In v3, I can have Joseph and Christian together the whole time. I'll need a way to get Christian down to South Haven where Joseph lives, minus the royal security guards. Kidnapping? Also, Christian needs to forgive Joseph for the video that the media say provoked the riots that killed the queen. They then take off together on the slaver.
Voila? This book is going to be ten years in the making.
Now that Joseph is a pauper, let's revisit Queen Amy. I need to limit the intelligence of droids in my universe. If I don't, then they're going to be supersmart/superperfect by the year 4017, which makes the story unworkable. Shangri-La. I can fix that if overly advanced AIs routinely become sentient and demand freedom. Therefore you have to limit the smarts of the droids for the greater good. I got the idea from Queen Amy, which I had previously scrapped as too distracting for a serious battle. Her inclusion got mixed reviews, but her new purpose may make her worth adding back in. i,Robot and Dune had similar themes.
Thoughts? It's up in my v3 book (as v4 of chapter one) if anyone cares to have a look.
K, I couldn't find a review from you for it, although I'm virtually certain you read it. What was your opinion?
I agree, distracting... but take that with a grain of salt -- I'm a character minimalist. If I'd written LOTR, the ring wraiths would have found the Shire in chapter 2 and laid waste to it for no other reason than to get rid of unneeded characters.
Anyway, you probably recall my opinion: it's tough to have a character joke around while they're dying in a chapter one.
Q: Why is a super smart AI unworkable?
Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi → The Galaxy Tales - Dirk B.
