Acts/ Dictates/ Mandates/ Mantle - Amy's Thread (Page 50 of 77)

FYI, I agree with Erndog that the chapter ends like a Mahler symphonic movement: no extended closing, just BOMP-BWMP!  A paragraph describing the scene of victory might work well, followed perhaps by Jaylene's recognition that they'll have a lot more survivors to find, and they can't miss any.

I also think you could have a better title.

New Jersey, your reviews make my back hurt. Just saying. Too much leaning over the keyboard…

FYI, the chapter "FIghting for Lives" is revised, order issues are fixed, and I took Ernie's advice to slow the pace and avoid an abrupt ending.  Nothing other than the ending is different.

Oh, and NJC? You were right. I was describing and atl-atl.  Spot on.

There's still at least one impacted.  I have a few other suggestions, but in general it's a biiig step away from the weaknesses.  I'll try to get the suggestions up tonight but I really want to get the chapter done.  I've been three weeks on it.

*blushes prettily*

*blushes some more*

AMAZING?!

*bore big toe into sand, smiling shyly*

Awhhh!!!! THANKS!!!!! I'm glad I'm helping every now and again.

Thanks for letting me know!

*does a happy dance*

You're pretty amazing too, you know?!

Will it make you feel any better if I tell you you're not the only one that regularly goes "another @#%$& missing quote?!"

The Alda in you knows what she's talking about!

I don't need praise. It breeds confidence and security. Two things that I completely fear. But thanks anyway. Each rewrite is getting better…I'll admit that much.

Sigh. I just realized that if I want to keep Melody and Drezdorf in the series, then they need their own book. All of the other Wolves are getting major screen time and character work. If I don't do the same for the last two Wovles, then I need to delete their characters.

I was thinking about the focus. It would have to be about the non-humans. Elves and dwarves, rather than the human interactions that have been present so far. It would let me use the short story about Ia (I may change that to Ea so that it gets pronounced right).  I could also use the story where Melody goes to the elven city.

So anyway, I'm still debating another book, but the idea is growing on me.

Wait, 'might' be?  Oh, them's fighting words :-)

(Get my bootie writing and finish this first draft, huh?) Got it :-)

Done! Hope it helps! After this, I'm expecting to see a full-blown Romance from you!

Oooogh.... Janet, pretty pretty please!

-Elisheva

Mmm, I don't think I can, but I think I should at least try. I'll see if I can get a short story together this week ... But don't hold your breaths!

Janet,

I would love to see C and M in different places and times…living out a variety of situations where the clues come together to solve the mystery. Maybe something that the reader is given to understand but the characters never see because they are too immersed in the action.

It would be a great way to keep these characters that you love active and part of your storyline. And it gives their love a timelessness that could really appeal.

Whoa! This is getting really serious. I also want to write 3 books! lol Not sure I can do this, trust me, this is so not my genre, you lot should really be worried instead of enthusiastic! Lots of things to think about and would be good for a break too. *chews end of pencil*