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Xline is for viewing the review, not for composing or submitting it.  Don't use Xline until after the review is submitted.

Re: Acts/ Dictates/ Mandates/ Mantle - Amy's Thread

Help again... I've been away too long.  I was in the middle of a review for Amy, and I needed to go back to an earlier chapter to verify something. I saved my review before I returned to the earlier chapter thinking that I could return to the saved draft. I couldn't, and had to start over again. So is this possible or what did I do wrong?

Thanks,

Ernie

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Ernie, if it's an in-line review, don't go back to the chapter you were reviewing. Instead, go to 'New Inline-Review Replies' on your home-page page under your profile pic or select 'Reviews' on the menu under your name in the upper right corner, and then select the 'In-line Posted' tab. There you will see all saved in-line reviews indicated with a red << Draft In-Line Review >> note/comment. If you select 'View' next to the applicable saved review, the saved review should be there. Note, that only in-line comments are saved. As far as I know, the closing comments don't.

Also, if you want to review previous chapters, depending on the browser you're using, I'd suggest opening another TNBW page in a separate tab and open the older chapters in the new tab. That way, you have both the chapter you're reviewing and the older one you're referring to open at the same time without having to find your review again.

Hope this helps!
Janet

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I have three whole hours…wait…two and half hours to write without ANY children being present. Husband is also elsewhere, going to a convention with his buddies to drink, draw, and have some quality no-baby time.

Best get cracking.

I commit to writing 300 words.

A

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Oh, hell yeah. Take a look at this picture and tell me that it doesn't belong in my world.

http://news.nationalgeographic.com/news … tals-cave/

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OK, New Jersey. You're gonna LOVE this chapter.

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That cave is absolutely fantastic. I want to go there.

-Elisheva

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Me too. It's on my bucket list.

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New chapter is up and awaits some shredding. Any takers?

This one was FUN to write!

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I've amended my review to answer your question.

You and I are Jack Sprat and his wife.  (I'll let you decide which is which.)  Your strengths are my weaknesses, and vice versa.

And, regarding your review of my chapter, there's a lengthy joke I've a mind to post.

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It's all good, Jack :-)

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amy s wrote:

New chapter is up and awaits some shredding. Any takers?

This one was FUN to write!

I have other reviews to catch up with, but what the heck, why not make Amy feel more guilty about falling behind with NS. Although, you're forgiven with all the help on the Humphrey's 'medical problems', so you're okay, don't worry! wink

I don't think I've replied yet to your other question. I had first dibs - so the fingerless gloves are mine, all mine *gruffy voice* I wear it most days now, especially in the afternoon driving home from work - it's colder than in the mornings, so it's in my bag for work permanently. The two (comfy) sleeveless jumpers are working overtime at home. Christian wears the trappers hat a lot - he agrees, don't care what it looks like, it's warm. Funny enough, it suits him. Gustav, who is still wearing shorts and walking around barefoot (I kid you not), wears the green jumper, gloves and scarf when it's really cold (and then it's effing cold, because he's not one that wears lots of clothes). The beanies are lifesavers, as are all the jackets.

We haven't gone looking for snow yet, but at the rate things are cooling down around our valley, we won't have to drive anywhere to play in the white stuff. I'm also taking my laptop home everyday - if weather is bad, non-essential personnel are allowed to work from home or come in late. So far, so good and haven't had one of those yet. Had a few icy mornings, but not much and the roads I use are well traveled meaning most of the sludge is gone by the time I get there. I still drive slower, wet is also slippery. One morning had icicles on the walking path at our office building (about 10ft or so - distance, not depth), so it was crunchy under my boots when I got to work and when I left. That morning was REALLY cold.

I luvvvvvv central heating, especially on those days when the minimum is something like 22F and the maximum 34F. Spoken to my brother over the weekend who informed me, the insensitive cow he is, that his swimming pool's water temperature is 29C . Well, I doubt he'll be complaining to me when summer really starts to get warm ...

But yeah, so far, we are surviving! And lots of thanks to you. xxx

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janet reid wrote:

I luvvvvvv central heating, especially on those days when the minimum is something like 22F and the maximum 34F.

Yeah.  In the southern US they don't do that nearly as well.  You should have maintenance on the system late every summer.  The things are marvellously reliable.  Keep it taken care of and you can go ten years or more without a failure.

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Now, Amy, appropos the pulsating spells on the shaft of Erevain's staff ...

The scene is a schoolroom, a small school from years ago.  It reads best with a Scots burr.

Teacher: Mistress Mary, will you stand up please.

[Mary stands]

Teacher: Now Mary, can you tell me: What part of the human body, when properly stimulated, grows to nine times its normal size?

[Mary blushes]

Teacher: Mary, what part of the human body, when properly stimulated, grows to nine times its normal size?

[Mary looks down at her shoes]

Teacher: Mary, quit your stalling, stand up straight, and answer my question.  What part of the human body, when properly stimulated, grows to nine times its normal size?

[Mary bites her lip and tries to stand straight.]

Teacher: Very well, Mary, you may sit down.  Master Johnny, will you stand up please.

[Johnny stands]

Teacher: Now Master Johnny, let us see if you can answer my question.  What part of the human body, when properly stimulated, grows to nine times its normal size?

Johnny: The pupil of the human eye, when properly stimulated, grows to nine times its normal size.

Teacher:  Very good, Master Johnny.  You may sit down.

Teacher: Mary, I've three things to say to you.  First, you've not done your homework, that much is for certain.  Second, Mary, you've a dirty, dirty mind.  And third ... Mary, I fear you are in for a grave disappointment!

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NJC, Just be careful, is all :-)

Janet: It's time to teach about how to drive in the cold. Especially when it is icy. 24 to 32 degrees F is mere inconvenience.

Rule #1: If you have an automatic car, the average person controls the car with the brake. (A manual controls the car with the accelerator.) When driving in ice, it is a key control point to stay at a steady speed because the acceleration is what makes you spin out. If you have antilock brakes, make sure that you press them down in a constant fashion. (No antilock? Then pump the brakes to keep from locking the wheels)

If you spin out, try to steer out of it with slow movements. Turn the wheel in the direction of the spin, even though it isn't the way you want to go. Then you can try to move out once the wheels grab again.

In heavy snow or ice, you drive straight, make wide and slow turns, and avoid lane changes. A big time of danger is during sunset since bridges freeze first because of the airflow beneath. Another is bright sunlight. People think the shiny line of black under their tires is water when in fact it is ice.

If you see ice sticking on your windshield despite the defroster, SLOW DOWN.

If you see semis stopped on the side of the road, SLOW DOWN. They know something you don't.

Put your hazards on if you are going less than the speed limit. Don't worry about stupid people who insist on passing and driving faster. I've seen more than a few spin out in front of me as I drove past them.

Don't stop for an accident unless your car is poised to protect you if someone slides off the road. Cars can be replaced. You can't. Call for help and let someone else deal with it.

If you are in an accident, stay in your car unless everyone is stopped around you. There are a lot of people hit once they get out of their cars.

Carry a shovel and junk towels in your car. Flares will only be useful once, but they will be REALLY useful during that time. Kitty litter is another thing that is handy to put in your trunk (Put it under your wheel if you are stuck and trying to get out of ice.)

Last thought. Don't let ice scare you. It's like fire. You learn to respect it and most of the time, there is no problem.

A

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amy s wrote:

NJC, Just be careful, is all :-)

Janet: It's time to teach about how to drive in the cold. Especially when it is icy. 24 to 32 degrees F is mere inconvenience.

Rule #1: If you have an automatic car, the average person controls the car with the brake. (A manual controls the car with the accelerator.) When driving in ice, it is a key control point to stay at a steady speed because the acceleration is what makes you spin out. If you have antilock brakes, make sure that you press them down in a constant fashion. (No antilock? Then pump the brakes to keep from locking the wheels)

If you spin out, try to steer out of it with slow movements. Turn the wheel in the direction of the spin, even though it isn't the way you want to go. Then you can try to move out once the wheels grab again.

In heavy snow or ice, you drive straight, make wide and slow turns, and avoid lane changes. A big time of danger is during sunset since bridges freeze first because of the airflow beneath. Another is bright sunlight. People think the shiny line of black under their tires is water when in fact it is ice.

If you see ice sticking on your windshield despite the defroster, SLOW DOWN.

If you see semis stopped on the side of the road, SLOW DOWN. They know something you don't.

Put your hazards on if you are going less than the speed limit. Don't worry about stupid people who insist on passing and driving faster. I've seen more than a few spin out in front of me as I drove past them.

Don't stop for an accident unless your car is poised to protect you if someone slides off the road. Cars can be replaced. You can't. Call for help and let someone else deal with it.

If you are in an accident, stay in your car unless everyone is stopped around you. There are a lot of people hit once they get out of their cars.

Carry a shovel and junk towels in your car. Flares will only be useful once, but they will be REALLY useful during that time. Kitty litter is another thing that is handy to put in your trunk (Put it under your wheel if you are stuck and trying to get out of ice.)

Last thought. Don't let ice scare you. It's like fire. You learn to respect it and most of the time, there is no problem.

A

Thanks for the advice! A few people at work have also been giving me training especially keeping an eye on the weather forecast. The kitty litter is a new one! I think the good thing around where I am is that it's mostly ice and not so much snow - if it snows, apparently it's 1-3 inches or so and melts fairly quickly again. Hazards when going slow - got it, I think I'm going to do that a lot.

The areas where snow/ice is prevalent has ice markers that turn blue if there is a chance of ice/snow around here. It even has the 'shape' of a snowflake.

What's really nice is knowing that I can go to work later and wait for daylight if need be to get to work. That helps a lot.

How is your vacation/time-off going? I can't wait, I have two and a half weeks off end of this month. Whoo-hoo. I just need to stop wasting time and get some writing done!

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njc wrote:

Now, Amy, appropos the pulsating spells on the shaft of Erevain's staff ...

The scene is a schoolroom, a small school from years ago.  It reads best with a Scots burr.

Teacher: Mistress Mary, will you stand up please.

[Mary stands]

Teacher: Now Mary, can you tell me: What part of the human body, when properly stimulated, grows to nine times its normal size?

[Mary blushes]

Teacher: Mary, what part of the human body, when properly stimulated, grows to nine times its normal size?

[Mary looks down at her shoes]

Teacher: Mary, quit your stalling, stand up straight, and answer my question.  What part of the human body, when properly stimulated, grows to nine times its normal size?

[Mary bites her lip and tries to stand straight.]

Teacher: Very well, Mary, you may sit down.  Master Johnny, will you stand up please.

[Johnny stands]

Teacher: Now Master Johnny, let us see if you can answer my question.  What part of the human body, when properly stimulated, grows to nine times its normal size?

Johnny: The pupil of the human eye, when properly stimulated, grows to nine times its normal size.

Teacher:  Very good, Master Johnny.  You may sit down.

Teacher: Mary, I've three things to say to you.  First, you've not done your homework, that much is for certain.  Second, Mary, you've a dirty, dirty mind.  And third ... Mary, I fear you are in for a grave disappointment!

I'm not going to ask and just make my own deductions ... *shakes head* Amy, Amy, Amy.

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amy s wrote:

Rule #1: If you have an automatic car, the average person controls the car with the brake. (A manual controls the car with the accelerator.) When driving in ice, it is a key control point to stay at a steady speed because the acceleration is what makes you spin out.

Don't be afraid to put the automatic in low gear so you don't have to brake as much.  Conversely, there may be times when it helps to push the tranny to a higher gear so the drivetrain can't put the same burst of torque on the wheels.
Be aware that (on most cars) only one pair of wheels pulls or pushes.  Both brake.  I've seen someone stopped in the slushy snow with their rear wheels turning even as they were holding the car with the brake and the front wheels.  Front wheel drive has the advantage that the strongest brakes are on the drive wheels, so that shouldn't happen.

With an automatic tranny, you manage the car's energy state by feeding energy in with the accelerator and bleeding it away with the brakes.  The manual allows you more direct control of the car through the engine.  (But the newer, many-geared manumatics change that a little.)

Remember--the ONLY control you have of your car goes through that 100 or so square inches of contact patch.

It's all physics.

Fun link one
Fun link two (simpler)
Fun link funk

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janet reid wrote:

I'm not going to ask and just make my own deductions ... *shakes head* Amy, Amy, Amy.

She read the same chapter you did, or nearly.  You read all the same parts.

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njc wrote:
amy s wrote:

Rule #1: If you have an automatic car, the average person controls the car with the brake. (A manual controls the car with the accelerator.) When driving in ice, it is a key control point to stay at a steady speed because the acceleration is what makes you spin out.

Don't be afraid to put the automatic in low gear so you don't have to brake as much.  Conversely, there may be times when it helps to push the tranny to a higher gear so the drivetrain can't put the same burst of torque on the wheels.
Be aware that (on most cars) only one pair of wheels pulls or pushes.  Both brake.  I've seen someone stopped in the slushy snow with their rear wheels turning even as they were holding the car with the brake and the front wheels.  Front wheel drive has the advantage that the strongest brakes are on the drive wheels, so that shouldn't happen.

With an automatic tranny, you manage the car's energy state by feeding energy in with the accelerator and bleeding it away with the brakes.  The manual allows you more direct control of the car through the engine.  (But the newer, many-geared manumatics change that a little.)

Remember--the ONLY control you have of your car goes through that 100 or so square inches of contact patch.

It's all physics.

Fun link one
Fun link two (simpler)
Fun link funk

Thanks for the info. I'm leaving those links for the weekend though - my brain is fried by the time I get home from work. It's been a busy couple of weeks - had to think at work a bit - harsh working conditions, I tell you!

Oh, one of our cars is a proper 4WD with low range - we knew we might have some trouble, so spend the extra money when we bought cars. The other car is AWD. So hopefully that would help a little bit too.

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njc wrote:
janet reid wrote:

I'm not going to ask and just make my own deductions ... *shakes head* Amy, Amy, Amy.

She read the same chapter you did, or nearly.  You read all the same parts.

Read the review. *shakes head* njc, njc, njc.

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It wasn't dirty until Amy told you it was.

4WD and AWD can help keep you going, but because you already brake with all four wheels they will help very little in stopping.  Thus they can get you deeper into trouble, and not help you out.

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So it's YOUR fault?  I should have known!

Say, whatever happened to Ghen's glowing green privates?  https://www.youtube.com/watch?feature=p … 108o#t=339

(Edit: That one's for you K.  Rewind to the very beginning.)

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janet reid wrote:

Read the review. *shakes head* njc, njc, njc.

From the romance writer who's determined to look under the monster's tail?  All I have are spells circling an oversized walking-stick.

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I was just picking on him for his wording when he describes staff use.

For what it's worth, my initial attempts at description were highly damning and pretty much unpublishable. All the descriptions used to describe weapon use have highly questionable second meanings when it comes to applying them to a staff, rod, stick, stave, or pole.

examples.

He held his staff in two hands

He fired his rod at the invaders, spraying them with his power until he realized he was shooting blanks.

(As George Takai would say, OH MYYYYY.)

I'm not the perv. I married one. He looks askance at me and reminds me of things like this. I am merely forwarding his wisdom. Don't shoot the messenger Though it is funny that I was the one who noticed this rather than Janet :-)