Acts/ Dictates/ Mandates/ Mantle - Amy's Thread (Page 29 of 77)

Or a movie for old action hero's hehehehe

Working on the review.  Meanwhile, I'm wondering  ...

Kha has someone inside Behira's temple, feeding him information.  Could that leak also be leaking to the Enemy?  For that matter, might Kha himself have been open to the Enemy, at least until Sil shows up?  Or even after?

Is that why Zyrtec doesn't want Kha to see him when they are in Zyrtec's apartments?  Or is there another reason?

Uh-huh.

Regarding the review: 'twas Lewellen, not Valharic, who spoke of breathing.

If Kha has been compromised, what about the earlier adventures, in which Kha's company averted disaster?

Amy, what does hayfever meds have to do with anything?

Zyrtec is the brand of hayfever meds I'm using .... and njc mentioned a Zyrtec in one of his replies ... so I thought I'd be clever even if I haven't read one chapter of Acts or Mandates.

https://www.google.com/search?q=zyrtec+ … &dpr=1

But are you saying you're not getting inspiration for character names from the meds cabinet at work? Maybe I should start to google Tazar .... *squints at Amy, you won't fool me, missy*

OK. I definitely got the name from the medicine cabinet. I just think of it as a name now and completely forgot that little detail. (My mind is like a cup of coffee. I keep pouring things in and stuff overflows over the side of the cup.)

Why? Is she called Kay?

I see the point. What's the purpose of a superhero story with out a fight scene? I guess being philosophical didn't get the point across that any hero can be a villain. It just depends which way they turn on the street.

Got it. Big Pete has to pay.

My point of ending it there is that any manifestation can result in either a hero or villain, thinking that it depends on how the person reacts to the event. However, K's point is well taken. If a power manifests, you can't define the hero by leaving them at a point of crisis. The combat is part of a definitive evolution that results in a hero. And the requirement of this contest is to see the birth of a hero.  Therefore, I wasn't meeting the requirements of the contest.

So my story was ambiguous and artsy-fartsy, but didn't meet the criteria. K, I realize I don't have to add a whole lot of wordage to get the hero bit across. But I need to make it clear that Jenna is a hero without any doubt.

Point taken. We'll see what I come up with. First, I've come up with another superhero for a second submission. A teen who apparates chicken from thin air whenever he is stressed.

Not all heros are born to the job. Some have to deal with stupid powers and make them into something great. Maybe I'm channeling The Mystery Men.  Either way, they allow more than one submission, so I'm going for it.  Maybe I'll win this way so I can finally buy me some beer:-)

I fixed the end so it is clearer that the MC is evolving and her power may grow. Still need to add more combat. I may take her past Big Pete's hideout to catch him on camera.

Do you want me to change it back?