Northern Skies - Janet! (Page 11 of 21)

Yeah, but we've only seen part of it!

Don't we al.

It's posted ... have at it! I need it this time around for sure!!!!!
Thanks!
Janet

Nah, I don't think this one was the worse. And I agreed with you all the way, except for one (sort of). Note - this is not to say I want to see a second review, just that you don't need to feel bad about it!

Now for the bad bad news. This chapter has awakened the reviewer beast in K apparently. So I think he's taking care of it good this round around (if I'm very very lucky, he won't get around to doing a NS spreadsheet! LOL). And Amy hasn't been around yet either. So see, I knew I shouldn't have posted the bloody chapter! Dirk just better hope the beast is tired when K's done with my poor Chapter 7 before he does more reviews - it's not pretty (pig with lipstick stuff, I tell ya)! LOL

And thanks for the review njc, it's appreciated as always!

I'm working!  And they haven't glued the door shut at work, so people keep coming inside!  I'm getting to it!  I'm getting to it! 

(GUILTGUILTGUILTGUILTGUILT)

Ok, had a thought of how to prove M's battle prowess via showing instead of telling. To learn and keep the skills in hand-to-hand combat, constant practice is required. Consider a training session with the major players. Even better, have the MC or Black John set up a training course in the stable (or kitchen) that involves knife throwing or an ambush scenario. Have the cooks roll their eyes and call it the men's little game'. This way, C can sneak to watch and get caught up in the scenario(just like she did as a child)

Brilliant minds! I have a plan too, and it involves admiration from all kinds of people as well as a few surprises and Anthony of course - I think if Matthew gives him a solid hiding, there won't be too many readers upset about it! LOL

You're the best Amy, this is taking reviewing someone WIP to the next level (thinking how you can solve someone else's problems and it's appreciated - not only me, I'm sure of that).

I'll get to the reviews after work today! Thanks!!!!!

It was my impression that if you wanted to be on the wrong side of Black John it would help to have either an army or a death wish.

See Matthew training and wiping the floor with people--and schooling them, so it's clear they are not toadying.  (Maybe he walks in, then interrupts where necessary.)  Then have Black John critique Matthew privately, leading to a training session where Black John schools Matthew--soundly.  And the discussion turns to strategy, politics, and the human element, and it's clear that Black John is the eternal student who nonetheless asks hard questions.

(Maybe Black John lacks the patience to instruct the lesser students?  Or presses them to learn faster than they can?  He asks others to do things when he wants to husband his patience?)

And yet he played well with Matthew as a child.  Impatience could explain him not 'playing well' as an adult.  That, and not being able to live out adventures as he did when he was playing.

This is Romance.  The villians add danger as a complication.  They are serious potholes, but unlike Tom Clancy villians they must never completely drive the story.

Except in your stories, of course.

The only thing that might help with this is a list of who exists in this world. That way, we have a chance to know who it ISN'T.