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Love it. For some reason, it's not the repeated falling that bugs me, but rather the repeated use of the word 'rotten'.

Laptop screens are fun to replace. I once received a free like-new laptop because a customer didn't want to deal with the hassle of replacing the screen, which they had broken by stepping on the darn thing.

I have a slight dialogue dilemma. I decided at one point that dragons don't use contractions in their speech, however I have two instances where I can't seem to find a smooth replacement for "I'm". It just sounds strange to use "I am". At this point, I'm half-tempted to make "I'm" an exempt phrase from my no contractions rule. Any suggestions would be greatly appreciated!

Dea starts following a human and says the below. I love the phrase, so I'm having a hard time finding a replacement.

This one's for a dragon that hasn't been introduced yet. It's during a high-tension scene, so it needs to remain short.

So much to write, so little time. I'm having troubles with the ending of Dea's next chapter. Might flip to another perspective temporarily so I can keep my brain cells from frying. That is, if I can actually manage the time to write. I think my average lately has been 100 words per day, a rather depressing average in my opinion.

I brought two bottles of sunscreen, one of which is now empty. Somehow, I still managed to get a sunburn on my shoulders (backpack rubbed it off). Anywho, Disney was super fun, but super exhausting. I feel like I need a vacation from my vacation. I did manage to write a bunch, though. Getting it typed up and edited, then I'll be posting it for y'all to poke and prod.

No worries. I'll be MIA for the next week, so no rush. I appreciate it, Amy. Your reviews always manage to improve my writing as a whole.

That's a difficult list to make. It all depends on what defines a trial, as well as what defines a win, fail, or draw. A quick glance at my outline says I have 19 trials with 5 draws, 5 fails, and 9 wins. But I also have multiple protagonists and a win for one could be a fail for another. For instance, one of my first chapters is about a main character stealing an item. She successfully steals it, but then her sister (another MC) gets arrested for the crime. Is that a win, fail, or draw?

Aww, good luck Amy! I know it doesn't even remotely compare, but I just got four wisdom teeth pulled and the pain meds make me seriously sleepy. I'll be glad when the healing is over and I can finally eat real food like steak and fried chicken and hamburgers.... Ack! Now I'm drooling.

Anywho, I appreciate the time you spent tackling my latest chapter and I hope your nausea and fatigue get better!

Alright. An entirely new chapter six is almost complete, after which I will be working on eight, eleven, or twelve, depending on which PoV I'm in the mood for (yes, I know my writing is beyond chaotic). I'll try to get some reviews done in the next few days, between my summer projects and a job change. Any specific requests?

I use Word 2016 on one of my computers (I bounce between two due to my work) and while I very rarely have the word correction problem that you do, Janet, the program still regularly tries to suggest words in places that make absolutely no sense. I can't find any examples at the moment since I usually right-click and 'Ignore' it (those squiggly lines irritate me to no end), but it is highly aggravating when your word processor decides it's a better writer than you are.

I've been working on getting my chapters sorted properly since I revised the plot and outline. Chapter 7 is done and up, re-posted so y'all can get some points. It's a combination of my previous "A Change of Fate" and "The Auctions". The dialogue between Maya and Merrin has been completely re-done, but the rest of it has only endured minor revisions like changing Madame to Madame Nightsend and changing the elf's gender. I'm hoping I'll be able to get one of my newer chapters up soon, as well... after I do a bucketload of reviews, of course.

Maybe I'll phrase it different, then. If we want to be technical about it, they are "gone" from their seat of power, but I see your point. I could say the royal bloodline was diminished, or something along those lines?