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if were including movies based on short stories then i know which film it is. I'll let someone else have a crack at it since I had my chance.

Galaxy Tale, for me, feels like a serious epic. You have the destiny of kings, the fate of mankind, a machiavellian God, so the running gags get a little lost on me. Not that you can't have humour.  Fred Saberhagen's Berserker had very funny moments, which helped build character and mood.
Like I've mentioned a few times, the only issue I have with ACME is its modern day connotations. it's Greek meaning makes it a worthy corp-name but as it stands ACME INC really grinds at a Scifi reader. For such a small aspect of the story, it can do so much damage to the world building. Maybe if you add another Greek work to it and latinise the Incorporated. Or at least explain the hell out of it from the outset. [Acme ˈakmi/ noun the point at which something is at its best or most highly developed. "physics is the acme of scientific knowledge"] As a kid watching roadrunner I never knew Acme was the greek word akmi, nor did I realise Eureka was the words 'to vríka', and these are word we commonly used. So a face-smacking expose on the high-tech corporation in the early chapters would suffice.
With Aussie, as long as this character plays an integral part of the plot, then this character is intriguing. If Aussie is inconsequential to the story then it becomes another complexity a reader has to follow without any payoff.

Cain sounded sincere, his point of view was naive yet valid. add this to his plea to save his son makes his motives genuine. I enjoy this aspect. politics is such a grey area. villains are greatest when their worldview is tainted with truth.

Having the public react like this is a nice touch, plays on their emotions.

GT Galaxy Tales or is TGT better?

Yes, this not really a term many here use. It pretty much cringe-worthy. Only our lame and tacky media use it for some reason, they seem to forget in translates to 'arse-end of the world' thanks to a prime minister long ago.

It's 4017. You can't escape the technology affecting every aspect of your story. This IMO is a plus and could enhance things. A cheap way around, if you choose to get rid of these thing is banning the stuff because of a nasty side effect in the past, à la Dune. But even then this becomes another subplot and end up infecting the rest of the story. Either way you can't lose.

BTW I vote the wiseeyes, wisethings, etc.  as cool terminology.

this could be interesting. causing conflict and upsetting His plans.

This is a tough one. having not read to the end yet, this 'real or imaginary' concept puts a heavy assumption in the readers head. The chances that two galactic young leaders suffering from delusions are slim so from reading this I would think God obviously has a hand in this, that there is some kind of cosmic master plan at play here, beyond the understanding of human beings. As a scifi reader I'd be looking for something like this. This story promises this. The title promises this. In the synopsis you lay out a major plot twist, and a scifi reader like me could feel that they might be cheated if they invest in this story. This could be end up being about mental illness and not about high cosmological/theological concepts, or left open ended.

I have a question that will help me better understand how to approach this.
Without spoiling the details in  final act of the story, have you made a decision on whether these boys are both delusional, or is God real in the Biblical sense, real is a high scifi conceptual sense, or is one delusional and the other not?