The Galaxy Tales - Dirk B. (Page 23 of 49)

All of those make me think of cooked chicken. Is that a good thing or a bad thing?

the (micro) wave-master
The As-Seen-On-TV World's Best Leg and Thigh Machine
The Incredible Meatball Magic Maker
Zoombies-Boombies
A Stir-fry Gun

Oh, and crisper wins as the default rifle. Toaster reappears as the handgun. The other names may be versions of those.
Knife tech will be a third class of weapon.

If you have or are going to read chapter 4, I suggest listening to this first. It's a hoot, and relevant.
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=9CnPv_1SVh0
Aussie will just die.

too current. Breaks the verisimilitude

I think tweet is probably safe since future candidates are going to have to have a Twitter presence, at least until the fad runs its course. You're right, though, I have to find a name that "could" be Trump, without naming him. Pastor Bling? Reverend Bombast?

Bigly.

Those aren't nice ways to talk about Kdot.

As K noted somewhere, my early chapter ordering bounces around quite a bit between semi-prologue, MCs, and Galactipedia articles:

The Great Collapse has to come before The Rise of the Julii (about 2 pages each), and both need to come very early in the story. I could potentially delay Rise of the Julii to just before chapter 8 (Apollo's second full chapter). That would give me three story chapters after the Great Collapse before the next article. I also snuck in a two-page "essay" by Joseph into chapter 4 which would have otherwise been another article. I'm still itching to do it that way. Add to all this the fact that the story chapters alternate between Joseph and Apollo. Any publisher looking at this would probably say WTF? Talk about demolishing a formula.

Thoughts?

Here's the ordering if I delay both articles until later:

It just doesn't work. Joseph writes his essay before the reader knows anything substantive about the Great Collapse. Also, we then seesaw back and forth between story chapter and Galactipedia starting from chapter four. One of the advantages of having the Great Collapse before the main story chapters is that it gives history that affects both MCs. The New Bethlehem essay is relevant to Joseph. And the Rise of the Julii is relevant to Apollo.

Here's what it looks like if I move the essay out as a Galactipedia article:

This one at least is balanced. Two opening chapters, an article before starting the main story, two story chapters (one per MC), followed by one article+chapter for each MC.

Or maybe Trump is sick of seeing politicians get away with things that Even Trump Would Go To Jail For?  Then this is his revenge on the whole hideous mutant strain?

It's intentionally tongue-in-cheek, which is something I began doing in act three onward (and on into v3). And don't forget about ancestry.com. That kind of search will be a simple lookup in a few years. Also, the Queen of England is known to be a descendent of King David (now that's cool!).

If I get rid of the tweeting, I would drop US president too. Technically, you would expect that the president's real name be given in such an essay/article anyway, so that was a known weakness to the writeup. I kind of like Bombast, though, so that begs the question who better than Trump for that role? It should have the potential to be based on someone real without coming right out and saying it. It helps if they're dead, so I can't get sued.

I was originally going to use Bishop Bling, but that's already taken. $30M to renovate a church?! Might as well rebuild St. Peter's Basicala.