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I've seen more and more research confirming the health benefits of writing.

(4)  Sarah nodded in agreement. “You’re absolutely right, Mrs. Tucker. I’d go with the beige drapes over the camel ones any day.”

Wordiness

Sarah nodded. “You’re right, Mrs. Tucker. I’d go with the beige drapes.”

I'm going to choose Harry Potter & The Sorcerer's Stone

A) The inciting incidence is when Hagrid arrives and gives Harry the letter inviting him to attend Hogwarts.

B) The external conflict in the book is Harry versus Voldemort (man vs. man/monster). The internal conflict is Harry trying to reconcile the death of his parents and his famous lineage with the reality of being just a child at this point. There are many expectations put upon him and he is still unsure of himself and his capabilities.. Ginny and Ron provide the support he needs to begin growing into the person he is to become.

C) For a particular scene that shows tension, I'm going to choose when the letters begin to arrive at the Dursley's house. The letters themselves are mysterious and the fact that the Dursley's don't want Harry to read them only adds to the tension and mystery. As more and more letters appear, and the Durlsey's become more and more exasperated, it's like pushing back a spring more and more. Eventually, some of this tension is released when Hagrid appears although it starts a new cycle as we begin to wonder about Hogwarts and where Harry is going and who exactly is Hagrid.

No need to apologize on my end. Life happens. Take care.
- C

I was always taught that when there is a dialogue from a new speaker, it requires a new a paragraph. So, in paragraph 1, this would initiate a new paragaph:

“Everyone, Paul and I are leaving. If you want out of here, we can escort you.”

This is how I would have written this:

  1. Next, Joseph exited the bathroom, set the weapon back to full power, and fired at the glass booth over the head of the remaining guard. It exploded in a shower of glass, momentarily stunning the guard. Joseph quickly reset the weapon to stun, then fired repeatedly at the man until he was sure this guard was unconscious as well. He called to his fellow slaves.
     2. “Everyone, Paul and I are leaving. If you want out of here, we can escort you.”
     3.  Paul and the others came running. At Joseph’s direction, they carried the unconscious man into the bathroom, stripped both guards of their uniforms, and placed them in restraints. Joseph and Paul quickly put the uniforms on, grabbed the rifles, and led the others out of the warehouse.
     4. “Try not to act suspicious,” Joseph told everyone. “It’s a simple slave escort. Nothing more.” The group walked past multiple open warehouses where other guarded slaves loaded and unloaded ships. “So far, so good,” Joseph said.

I could be wrong though.

Hi everyone,

I'm excited to be here. This is the first writing class I have taken since high school.

To answer your questions.

1. I write in a blend of different genres. I really like science fiction, fantasy, horror a la Stephen King or Dean Koontz. The book I am working on now is actually far afield from those genres, so I've taken a step into unfamiliar territory. It's a terrorist themed thriller.

2. I have been writing since elementary school. I have always loved to create stories and then see them take shape on paper.

3. My primary goal is to self-publish. I'm pretty confident I can earn more money this way and retain control.

4. I have never submitted my work to an agent or publisher.

5. Favorite authors include Stephen King, George Martin, J.K. Rowling, Dean Koontz. But I read a pretty wide array of authors and genres.

6. Hmm. Fun, quirky, or interesting? How about the fact that I have a real interest in quantum physics, especially the esoteric stuff around parallel universes, string theory, etc. So I was a real big fan of the movie Interstellar.

On a less nerdy level, I am a Patriots fan so I hope they beat the Colts today. Go Pats
I took a quick look at the group and I may also be the only male in the group. So I will do my best to represent my gender.

I look forward to interacting with everyone.

- C

He'll be back.

Very nice reading this and getting glimpse into your life. It sounds like you are a busy mother! Best wishes back to you and your family.
- C

Well they could add some help forums for help and bugs. I think that's a good idea.

You need to have uploaded the image somewhere first and then you can call it using the code below:

[img=PunBB bbcode test]Put in url to image here[/img]

This part if the url of the image: http://www.thenextbigwriter.com/forums/img/test.png

I think you can upload content using the site's content uploader and then call it using that code in the forum or you can upload it somewhere else and then use the image url.

I like Koontz although I always considered him more of a horror writer.