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vern wrote:

I would consider a pen name strictly as a matter of privacy. If you don't care about such things in any way shape or form, then you should There are lots of crazies out in this world and the less they know the better imho. Take care. Vern

For sure there are crazies in the world. I just got a box of chocolates from an anonymous admirer. Was scared to death. Until I found it was from the company I bought my latest car from...

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Congratulations, Randy! That's awesome news.

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Chronicles. Then I thought "how trite." The next to pop in was "J'on J'ones," which was a little better. Then Spock with a tail, as the original idea was to have him a Martian with a tail. Then, I gave up.

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Welcome aboard, Birdie.

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HAPPY NEW YEAR!

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I hope you all will have a Merry Holiday season and a Happy New Year. I will be out of town for most of the next two weeks, but will be active again around the 7th. Don't take anything down until then for me.

Again, hoping that Santa will be good to you.

Love, Rachel.

I enjoyed the parody very much.  I would have posted it myself but didn't want anyone to think I was referring to him or her. lol

Done

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We have to keep in mind, too, that a protagonist is the first mover of a story, the antagonist opposes him. This is important in understanding motive. In Atlas Shrugged, the book is mainly written from the antagonist's POV. Other POV's are present, but they dovetail into her. You find yourself rooting for her. The protagonist is vaguely felt and doesn't make himself known until way into the book. In Heart of Darkness, the antagonist is within the character of the protagonist and the reader is wondering about his motives until faced with the horror. (Something repeated in the movie based on it, Apocalypse Now.)

Sometimes, the antagonist is a whole system. Claire, in OUtlander, is constantly thwarted (at first; haven't gotten very far) in her goal to get back to her own time. Circumstances are the antagonist until BlackJack Randell graciously decides to fit that role. Then, his motives are brought out--he has experienced the heart of darkness and gone over to the dark side (how's that for mixing literary metaphors?) He's till a patriot, though, and is motivated by a desire to find the Jacobites.

The antagonist and the protagonist could be good guys, both working for the good, but at odds in how to achieve it. The antagonist might think the protagonist is the villain, only to find out (usually, almost too late) that he or she isn't.

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I could use a binge review. I want to publish my book, "Exile in Elsewhen," early in 2020. So far, my steadfast, loyal reviewers have gotten to a little over halfway. You can make a lot of points reading, but warning you, it is 750 pages, and that's after a serious cut.

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I agree with jp. What matters is how well the reader is absorbed into the story and how well the story flows. When R.D. Robb changes POV in the middle of a paragraph, unless you're looking for trouble, as you put it, no one cares. The story carries you away. Louise Penny changes POV from paragraph to paragraph. In your example of "in concentration," most people, in "real life" would know if someone is in concentration, so it doesn't necessarily involve any POV glitch. 

Some publishers and editors are frustrated school teachers (my opinion), and fuss over these things, but only as a way of making their job--exclusion--easier.  Others recognize a good story and forgive things like this. For beginning writers, care about POV is part of learning the craft, but after a while, the story's flow is the crucial thing.

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njc wrote:

What I'm looking for,  as near as I can frame it, is some kind of map linking motive, character, and style of action.

For me, motive would flow out of character, and the style of action would be determined by the motive. I suggest writing a biography of the character or a shadow plot with him as the star to see what he does.  As to why he's opposed to the protagonist, that can be anything--from being mad that the main character saved his life at the expense of his hair (Lex Luther and Superboy) to not understanding why the protagonist is doing what he's doing (Dagney Taggart vs John Galt) to the horrors of war turning a good man bad (Black Jack Randell vs. Claire Beachamp).

Lex Luthor is an example of how you can deepen the character's motive based on his character. In the latest incarnation, he fears for the safety of his planet, has self-esteem problems, so he hates Kryptonians and is anti-alien. He plays on the insecurities of others and his own sense of irrational inferiority drives him to destroy those better than him and to be a world dictator. It's easy to see what his motives are for destroying Superman, Supergirl, and Argo City, and his attempts at world domination. This leads to his theatrical style, using classical music as a background to his escape from custody. And that, in turn, gives his style. Yes, a graphic novel/TV series example, but it's illustrative.

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I could go on and on about run-on sentences, Runaround Sue, Blade Runner, running to feel God's pleasure, running for office, running noses, and runways, but I won't.

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Have a great Thanksgiving. And maybe post something on what you are grateful for.

I'm grateful for my spouse, my dogs, my home, my tutoring gigs, living in the best country in the world, just to get started.

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Congratulations, Jack!

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I hope you feel better soon. Bronchitis and breathing problems are really hard.

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Just do it. You publish it either as v 2 or as a new chapter and title it as the old one, so people will know.

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My view on this subject:  At the old site, you did get a number of reviews, although there were dry spells and sometimes a lot of waiting. But most were of the "Good job!" variety. The reviewers were fans, not critics. I say this, although there were thoughtful suggestions and proofreading.

At the new site I noticed a difference right away. Fewer reviews, but the ones given were more thoughtful and more holistic (to use current pedagogical jargon). So for me, it's the difference between 20 fan comments (always appreciated) and three or four people willing to work with me to make a great manuscript.  That's better in my opinion.

And with that said--hey, come on. Review my stuff. It's been ages. What's with this site, anyway?  lol

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Welcome back, ray. My sympathies about your treatment. I hope everything is better now.

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Welcome back, Linda Lee WIP sounds like a real winner!

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I'm sorry to hear that. May she rest in peace.

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It depends on what you're writing. Vern is right for an action thriller. But a fantasy novel carries with it the expectation that a fair amount of time will be spent on clothes, buildings, settings, etc. Although even here, if you plug into cultural tropes, you don't go into a lot of detail. Everyone has a visual of a castle wall-walk, for example. Somewhere between no description and Gormenghast is my advice. lol

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Welcome to the site, haxxodus. You'll find a lot of helpful people here and a good lauchpad for first flights.

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jp said, "I don't know about masculine/ feminine. I'm just visualizing Mad Magazine-style illustrations... "Blonde vs Blond," etc."

I'm sorry I did that to you, jp. lol

njc, very interesting discussion of the technical aspects of a planetary orbit. The only weird thing about Dareau is that its magnetic poles are on its "side," like Uranus. (In fact, in a prehistoric version of my stories, they took place on Uranus. A very different Uranus than ours, probably exists in Earth-38, where Mars and Titan are inhabited, too.)  So yes, there is an intense magnetic field and it does shield, just like Earth's does. The seasons are about the same as Earth's, although there are areas, like on Earth, where it is about 70 degrees all year round. In the central forest, there's fall, winter, spring, and summer. Dareau will be closer to one sun for half the year and to the other, the other half.

I don't worry about mass, except to point out each sun is about 85% of the Earth's sun.  Another complication of setting this on another world is the existence of warp drive. As it depends on warpage of space, that probably isn't a good idea close to a gravity well that already warps space. (Not something considered by Gene Roddenberry, as for him 'warp drive' was just a cool way of referring to FTL drive). Alos, no navigation is possible in warp drive, as the ship is outside the normal universe. You hope your computers are working right.  This isn't a big point, as there is also a mystical portal that people use to navigate between the two planets. It has the disadvantage that all of reality get scrambled in it, and it's not for the faint of heart.

For me, it is all background. The story takes place on the planet, and the rules there are, much to the humans' chagrin, the rules of magic, not science.