Topic: paragraph question

I currently have the three sentences below in one of my chapters. Joseph is the POV character. Alexander is his father.

Is it better to write it as one paragraph?

Joseph walked around the back of his mother’s desk and stood behind her. Alexander walked over and placed himself next to her, both shielding their son. He looked over their shoulders, ready for… what?

Or three?

Joseph walked around the back of his mother’s desk and stood behind her.
Alexander walked over and placed himself next to her, both shielding their son.
He looked over their shoulders, ready for… what?


I lean toward the former. Granted, Alexander is the subject in the middle sentence, but all three sentences are very closely related (they're preparing for intruders who are trying to break through the study's doors).

Thanks
Dirk

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The first para seems to read better to me. It's cohesive and doesn't require the mental gymnastics to visualize where each person is before reading the next sentence.

Bill

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Neither of these really digs into the moment of someone banging your door, looking to murder you.

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Joseph walked around the back of his mother’s desk and stood behind her. Alexander walked over and placed himself next to her, both shielding their son. He looked over their shoulders, ready for… what? A surprise homework assignment? A wild email from Aunt Linda? Either way, it’s nice to see a family so prepared for absolutely nothing.

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Joseph sailed over his mother's desk and cowered behind her, his head under her skirt. Alexander grabbed him by the scruff of the neck and scourged him senseless for being such a wuss. Joseph wailed, terrified and in pain. His mother grabbed the Royal Sledge Hammer and hit Alexander in the nuts before tearing out both of his eyes with her fingernails.

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The hammer is a nice touch

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Kdot wrote:

The hammer is a nice touch

ROFL! That's too funny!

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Okay Dirk, have some eggnog that is spiked heavily and try again. :-)