The Gathering Darkness (the Connor series) - Dirk B. (Page 22 of 57)

Dorothy Sayers was educated as few are today.  She was a hard worker and very talented.  Do not compare yourself to the natives of Mt. Olympus.

Amen! Hopefully no more major rewrites of chapter two. I'm so sick of that chapter.

I poked through it. I think I liked the pacing of the previous version better, but I won't know for sure until I read the final chapter so I can see that what the story is looking to accomplish

Believe it or not, the summary doesn't help. It tells me what the book is about, but not /how/ it plans to arrive there. Doesn't specify the order of events in the final three chapters and the culmination of execution.

Therefore in this chapter, I don't know yet which version contributes better

As far as execution goes, I think you know from earlier posts that the Catholic Church will send Connor to the Holy Land to get him away from the Antichrist and to retrace the footsteps of Jesus to try and jog his memory of his past life as Jesus, assuming it's him. The latest version of the prologue is taken from a future chapter somewhere in the Holy Land, near the Sea of Galilee.

Yikes! I went to save my new names bible and found one already existed in my directory. Had fifty detailed entries in it. Last updated in April. Can't remember doing any of it. 8-(

No, it's a names bible, not merely a character bible. With all the Italian people, places, and things, it's essential. I can't believe I forgot I had it. Galaxy Tales, though, had one hundred characters, including names from history.

"Idiopathic" means that it's something that's unique as far as anyone knows.  In other words, no diagnosis.

In the Girl Genius story, a character is diagnosed with Vericus Pentiliax's Chromatic Death ... which is not usually fatal.  But it turns out that he has Hogfarb's Resplendent Immolation.  Which is, although he might just melt instead of going off like a Roman Candle.  Hard to tell ... and they don't let it happen.  They kill him instead ... but only temporarily, so they can clear the disease from his system.  But not before everyone who matters comes down with it as well.  Which leads to one of the best fifty or sixty lines in the story: http://www.girlgeniusonline.com/comic.php?date=20100113

Take that kid who always bullied you in school and name a disease after him.

So it's BillyBully's Idiopathy.  Everything should be this easy.

Hinkley deserves a better-named disease than that.  Hinkley's Elusive Idiopathy might do.  Professor Hinkley insisted that he suffered from it ... but nobody could see anything wrong with him.  Though they did wonder why he bought stock in a handkerchief manufacturer.

Idiopathic Acute Systemic Inflammation (IASI)

That works as the disease name, but the acronym is meh. If I take idiopathic out of the acronym, that leaves ASI. Not much better.
The other option is to give him throat cancer to explain why he coughs up blood, and have the chemo play havoc with his immune system, exacerbating his gold allergy, causing the severe rash around his neck. Seems rather complicated.

Thoughts?

Hinkley's Elusive Idiopathy suggests that nobody else can see the disease.  They think he's imagining it ... but wonder why the bit with the handkerchiefs.  Either he's got something nobody else can see, or he's on a slightly different salutory plane.