Topic: Lights - the novel (new project)
My new project---which will be written concurrently with Breathing---is now up.
https://www.thenextbigwriter.com/conten … /version/0
1 2018-04-10 16:22:19 (edited by Lynne Clark 2018-04-10 16:23:36)
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I'm getting a lot of comments about the use of future and present tenses in the first chapter of Lights. I am not sure how to explain that this is written as though it is a tour itinerary, so for example, this was taken from an online itinerary of a tour of India
Day
8
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Udaipur
Today the group will travel to Udaipur visiting the Ranakpur Temples en route. The main temple is unforgettable and took 65 years to complete. It is one of the five holy Jain pilgrimage centers.
Udaipur is known as the Venice of the East as it is one of the most romantic cities in the world. It offers a lovely blend of lakes, forts, palaces, temples, gardens, and mountains.
Day
9
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This morning the group will enjoy a city tour with a visit to the City Palace built on the bank of Pichola Lake. The grand complex consists of several palaces with a blend of Rajput and Mughul influences. Half of the complex is still occupied by the royal family.
It is a blend of future and present, where the present tense is used for things that exist, and ARE. Future is used for what you will do when you get there. For those here who have kindly reviewed, does that make it clearer? The chapters through Ekaterina's POV are written in more traditional past tense.
Should I put this explanation at the beginning of the chapters?
3 2018-04-15 17:35:30 (edited by Lynne Clark 2018-04-15 18:02:31)
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nonetheless, it does need tense tweaking, which I am doing now. Once it's done I'll revise the chapter. Be grateful for any once-overs you might care to help me with then. Here is fine if you've already reviewed.
In fact I have totally changed my mind, and now find it pretentious and ugly. So it's going into present tense. Let me know what you think later
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changed. See if you like it better.
- amy s
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I’ll fit you into my dance card
- Lynne Clark
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Thank you amy! I look forward to our waltz with pleasure 
Where have you been? It's lovely to see you are back
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I take prolonged breaks now and then. Not voluntarily, to be sure, but I pop back into the scene like a bad penny:-)
Update is on my thread if you want details. I don’t make a secret about it but it isn’t what defines me either, so it isn’t part of average conversation. I still look forward to your honesty. I find it refreshing to work with someone who has skills but still can benefit from what I’ve learned over the past couple of years (yes everybody, NJC, Norm, K, Elishiva, seabrass, I’m talking about you)
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Hi Amy, I saw your thread after I'd commented here. Toughest of all breaks and I'm glad you are feeling well enough to join us here.
- amy s
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K needs someone to put his 30 mph horses and naked bareback riders (ooo the chafe) in perspective. Sometimes he writes before he thinks.
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I real Lights. Mulling my impressions.
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oh dear... that sounds ominous!
