Topic: FOUNDERS - Graymartin

Thanks, NJC, for giving me some very helpful feedback about where/how to end book one. My first thought was to end with Astrid's POV in the last two chapters, since she's going to narrate a good part of book 2. There's a natural "break" in the story when she's separated from Wil and her friends, and this seemed like a logical place to start her thread. I'll have to revisit this after I've finished my main editing project: to remove all 3rd person POV chapters (told from the villain's perspective) and replace these with Wil's POV. That's what I'm working on now.

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Re: FOUNDERS - Graymartin

Thanks to incredibly helpful critiques by readers such as Don Chambers and GPyrenees, I'm removing my 3rd person POV chapters and replacing them with my MC's POV, starting with Chapter 5 (Aftermath), which I just reposted. I've left the old version up and would love any feedback on whether I should go with the new version or stick with the old. Thanks! Gray

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