Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi → The Naked Forest - Akhere I.
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Greetings, my name is Akhere. I was wondering if anyone wants to brainstorm idea about my book, the Naked Forest. It's a young Adult fantasy about a group of kids who practise forbidden magic in the woods of a tiny town. If anyone's interested, you can help me by giving feedback on the first chapter (Specifically on whether anything doesn't make sense or if it looks like I'm head hopping.)
Thanks in advance.
Akhere out
Good luck to you, here, Akhere. The more feedback, the better.
You've come to the right place! Everyone has their own strengths when it comes to reviewing writing. This is definitely a good group to belong to.
Just a quick bit of TNBW advice. We tend to reciprocate. Sometimes there's a miss or two, but for most, if you review someone's writing, they will return the favour and that's how it all begins.
If you need any pointers, just let us know!
Oh, dear. It didn't occur to me that you may be past the trial period. I hope you can open my inline review...
Don't worry. I'm premium.
I went back into the review to answer your questions or expand on something I said. I don't think the system automatically notifies you about my second round of feedback. If it does, please let me know. That would be useful to know.
It doesn't. Often I go back to an old review to find the comments have multiplied like bacteria. I'll go check out your comments. Is there anything you want me to do in return?
If you have the time, I'd be very interested in your feedback about my chapter one in my v3 book. It's a bear of a chapter, so I'll do another review or two of you're work to be fair. Then we can see if we're interested enough in each other's stories to keep going. I like YA stories and you're off to a good start.
Hallo Akhere! I reviewed your first chapter and I can't wait to read more. The story looks really interesting! Just be wary of magical props popping in out of nowhere, or disappearing mid-chapter (Amy has taught me this lesson). Like the purple book at the end. I pictured Kate holding it in the crook of her arm, but then suddenly pages are flipping and she's putting her hand on the cover (is that even possible at the same time?)
Good luck!
Hi Elisheva. The powers of these books transcend all of our understanding of possible. That's my way of saying, I forgot how I positioned the book before. It should be better now. Norm, I'll start on your book either tomorrow or Thursday (My courses are draining me.)
Akhere,
What classes? What degree?
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