The Sorcerer's Progress (Page 52 of 62)

A thought for Amy on her last review of =The Lunar Contract=:

It's written with a first-person narrator, which makes it easy to put the description in.  The narrator, who is part of the story, wants us to see those things.  It's harder in third-person, especially if you don't want the narrator addressing the reader directly or offerring reflections (as mine did in the hole-in-one story).

And hey, I can't keep you from working on a private copy, but I'd much rather have you working on your story.

I'm working slowly on Pausonalie and Merran's trip to the place where the Seemings are held.  I keep finding ways to cut it and flesh bits out.  It takes a lot of time each time I pick it up.

I owe a passel of reviews.  Look for them in the next 30 hours.

An explicit first-person narrator can steer the story into description and the reader knows the narrator is piloting the story.  In the third person, you need an excuse to move the spotlight over the scenery.  This wasn't always so true--look at the description in some of Chesterton's stories, or the opening of Carr's =Hag's Nook=--but that style would never escape a modern editor's scythe.

More's the pity.

Yeah, good luck with that

Nearly finished now with the new Rockpile chapter, draft (-1).  It's a here-to-there chapter with a lot of milieu and setting, and enough little adventure that I hope it will be engaging.  It looks like about 7000 words.  We'll see if I can have it ready before the weekend so Amy can ask me for 3000 more words to describe yellow rock.  I =really= want to get started on the full version of =The Seeming=.  I want you to meet Count Hulhauzen Lundersot.

Humboldt
Humbolter
Humbuggler
Magnificand
Löwenzähmer (Google Translate gives this for Liontamer)

Hulhauzen Lundersot is meant to evoke Baron Munchausen.

Got it: Maximus Aemilianus. Those were two Roman generals whose names were originally combined in the 15th century to form the name Maximilian. I'll change Maximilian to Maximus and use Aemilianus as the last name. It fits because the evil character has been around since the time of Christ.

Thanks for name suggestions, njc.

I've edited the end of Ch 16: Dirtier than Dirt (previously: The Rockpile) to fit the opening of the next chapter.

Do you want a review of Dirtier than Dirt?

Oh, and who is demanding more details of a r*pe scene? They aren't going to be published, so ignore them.

Was I having a chemo moment? Some stray comment that you had saying that reviewers were wanting more detail and you didn't know why.

I think you're referring to K's recent post to my thread. He has a rape scene that he didn't "show", but his reviewers were asking him to do so.

Ahoy! You done tweaking Dirtier than Dirt? Is it okay for me to proceed on it?