Acts/ Dictates/ Mandates/ Mantle - Amy's Thread (Page 26 of 77)

If the enemy can use Behira's Veil against Behira's forces, can that enemy also strip the Veil, to fuddle the forces?  Or has Behira withdrawn it altogether so it cannot be used against her?

Has an enemy breached Asgaard?

This is really good! (It made me go, aha! So yeah, well done njc!)

But ... it's still kind of just being dropped in the reader's lap. So it will depend on whether Amy wants to cater for the clever readers (like njc) or the slow ones (like me - but in my defence, I'm fairly new to this fantasy genre thingy - weak, I know, but I stand by it! )

So, for the slow ones, this needs to be spelled out somehow. Like Amy would say, thin it to that. The fix in my mind isn't a massive one either. Just Alda (who else?!) or maybe even Taz-man saying something in those lines would be pretty effective in my opinion.

I still have to read the new version ... I had to choose between writing my next chapter or doing reviews, I didn't have time for both, and writing won. I hoping to fix that over the next few weeks ...

Ok, to clarify one or two of the rules within the world.

The Veil can't be stripped away without a very limited set of circumstances happening.

Behira can't remove the Veil for Her own protection, even if she wanted to. I tied the goddess' hands on this one. It has to stay in place.

It ought to be Alda.  These are our friends big man.  Wait 'til you see our enemies.  And maybe Valheric adds something about the ones you can't see.

Remember (as I'm sure you do) that Tazar has his own unseen enemies.  I'm assuming that he's going to meet them again, maybe in the catacombs.

Alda and Tazar both have independent streaks, don't they?  They come out in different ways, but they are both there, no?

You're right. I'm going to add some dancing critters. Score one for the peanut gallery.

Maybe in those frescoes of Behira you could show Sil's transition to dragonhood and her assault.  Don't name her and don't give away so much that anyone could guess that she'll appear.  And maybe they don't even know her name.  You could have Lewellen tell Tazar the story.  We only need to see a line or two of dialogue.

I'm not sure you do need that.  Your slow reveal seems okay so far.  It depends on what route you plan to take us on.

In the meantime, I wonder about how those memories were wrenched from Kha to harm his friends.  Did that happen before or after he was exposed to the Black Staff?

Has the Black Staff been burnt, by the way?

So the Black Staff may have been an instrument of what happened to/through Kha?

Is it naturally petrified?  Then surely it is much older than the Age of Diminishment?  Maybe even older than the Age of Magic?

And it is seemingly linked to the Defiler?

NJC,

Yes. No. Yes. Yes. Yes.

K,
(I stick out tongue and blow raspberry.) It's called an outline.