Topic: Sneezing
When reading, do you prefer to read:
Phoebe sneezed.
OR
"Ah-ah-choo!"
I use both in my story, but what is your take? I need comments/suggestions/experiences.
- janet reid
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Re: Sneezing
As a reader, I prefer the second one "Ah-ah-choo!" But it might become annoying if over-used, so I'd probably suggest mixing it up using both your suggestions as well as mixing up the 'sound-effect' e.g. "Ah-choo" vs "ah-ah-choo". Also, have Phoebe try to stop the sneeze - I've tried, with varying degrees of success in my life. Or even internal dialogue - Phoebe's nose tingled. Argh, not again. "Ah-ah ..." Too late!
Hope some if this helps!
Janet
- Tom Oldman
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Re: Sneezing
There are all types of sneezes, too. My grandmother used to have a run of 5 or 6 in a row with a two-second breather: Chee-chee-chee-chee-chee. My wife stifles them - or tries to: Snork-snert. Me, I just let it fly: Waaah-hooo. Ha-phoob!
I've never put a sneeze in one of my stories, maybe I should.
~Tom
- Janet Taylor-Perry
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Re: Sneezing
I have never put in a sneeze either. Maybe you could have another character comment on the sound. I've been told I sound like a cat.
- PByrd
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Re: Sneezing
Thanks everybody! These are all good comments. I don't want to put in too many because it would be annoying, but I need a few.
