Topic: WIP Being Fifteen by Suin
I'm not sure how to advise you as to how to make the first chapter more dramatic. There's always the bloody or naked event that captures the reader's eye, then "Fifteen days earlier..." approach, if worse comes to worst. I'd look at best-selling teenage novels, their introductions, and then modify yours to fit. Don't change the essence, just give it a new pair of jeans. Sometimes, just a line or two could do. "After destroying the gym, Buffy's mother decided that they should move from Los Angeles to Sunnydale." That would do it. lol But that series had a hook in the title as well. Made you want to endure the first episodes, or the movie, just to find out how the hook played out. "Buffy" is a name given by effete, upper-middle-class couples and connotes a superficial, condescending bitch, not a vampire slayer, who would be named Brunhilde,Brandamante, Vanna Helsing or something. A title hook is perhaps more important than a first chapter hook. I'm struggling with mine. Temporarily settled on "The Fairy Princess and the Offworlder," or "The Fairy Princess: Cursed to Nakedness." 'fairy,' 'fairy princess,' 'offworlder,' all get good results on Amazon for the type of readers I want Of course 'nakedness' will too.
I should talk, but maybe considering changing your title? "Being Fifteen" isn't as magnetic as "Naked at Fifteen," "Guilty at Fifteen," "Meeting Godzilla at Fifteen." Heck, even "Condescending at Fifteen," which might fit the best.
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The one I'm having my students read now, Roald Dahl's, "James and the Giant Peach" starts with his parents being eaten by a rhinoceros that's escaped from the London Zoo. Then the author proceeds to tell the story from beginning to end. You might have some ominous event mentioned in her diary. "After the Giant Rat of Sumatra escaped Styles, I know we just had to leave..." "My father wasn't the alphabet killer, but his writing made people think he was..." "Other men have addictions to cocaine, alcohol, women--my father's was tractor pulls and demolition derbies..."