Yeah I know. I have reviewed a lot of good work. Just haven't had the chance to do much reviewing lately so I will do some this afternoon.
2 2015-03-03 12:53:21
Re: Struggling (11 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Thanks very much. Sorry from your message I didn't quite get it.... Whats the name of that group.... Is it 'The First Chapter Whips'?
Thank you for being encouraging, as I am sure you know, it always help a young or amateur writer. It is difficult when you think you have the perfect start and then it gets constructive criticisms and bad review but as you say, just got to keep plodding through.
Keep Writing
Samuel
p.s nice metaphor with the mud 
3 2015-03-03 11:30:45
Re: Struggling (11 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Thanks a lot. I admit it is discouraging but like you said the first draft is about getting your basic story down and what you want to achieve then go back over it. It means a lot so thank you very much. I will try chapter one one more time but if it doesn't work then I will just keep on writing the story because I am loving it at the moment but that has stalled because I was too busy trying to perfect the start which wasn't needed.
All of your replies have been great and have certainly picked me up out the mud. So thank you
Keep Writing
Samuel
4 2015-03-02 23:35:27
Re: Struggling (11 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Thank you for your advice..... I have written eleven chapters so far, starting from 'It's too late' so I am going somewhere with the story. I might need to rewrite them, with the advice that I have received so far on my other chapters before posting them on here but I hope to give people a sense of what my story is going to be like.
Thank you all very much for listening
Keep Writing
Samuel
5 2015-03-02 18:22:36
Re: Struggling (11 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Thank you very much for that idea Philisha. It is greatly appreciated. Maybe I could start with that and then go back to memories of the girls with their father. Start with the girls beginning to run into the tunnels then move onto the father up above.
6 2015-03-02 17:26:04
Topic: Struggling (11 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Hey guys,
I must admit I am really struggling with trying to get the start of my book right.
I obviously decided to get rid of the prologue because that was a good decision. I am now working on establishing the relationship between the daughters and their father before killing him off.
But introducing the characters didn't pay off because some readers found that the chapter didn't hook them. I added a chapter at the start to add a bit of jeopardy and I admit using a dream was not a good idea. Maybe I should use a memory instead.
Do you ever feel like you can't win?
Has anybody got any tips or suggestions for me? Any would be greatly appreciated.
Keep Writing
Samuel
7 2015-02-24 23:35:53
Re: Prologue (9 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
Thank you for all your comments. They are very useful. The short stories that I have written on here are examples of pieces of history of my world and I really enjoying writing them. I have decided that I am going to write a chapter where it introduces my two main characters and then leads into the dramatic scene which is the starting turning point for my characters. I think it will flow better.
Keep Writing
Samuel
8 2015-02-24 19:31:25
Topic: Prologue (9 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)
I am writing a fantasy novel but have discovered that has slightly terrified me when it shouldn't because I can obviously rewrite.
I have started with a Prologue which explains the part of the history of the world but doesn't introduce my main characters.
Do you think I should start with the introduction of my main characters and their relationship to their father who dies, so that the readers can realize more about the process his daughters go through and where their story takes them.
I think that is a better way to write it but I just wanted people's opinion. If you aren't sure what I mean then feel free to read my first chapter and get back to me.
Keep Writing
Samuel
