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(46 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)

Hey Sol... dun forget invisible Apricots.
I'll just post this regularly

Star Craft used Confederacy but they boldly leaned right into the civil war aspect down to the character's accents. lol
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=ftQoP47wTRo

Dirk B. wrote:

Ugh, Kdot, how do I use that here, where I'm trying to name an interstellar republic?

For example, Simmons (iirc) used simply "The Ousters" even though they were technically a republic.
This option would see the whole group named after a place

Picture my last comment like this:

Elon Musk invents a rocket that can reach the nearest habitable planet. We happily scoot over there and meet a race of talking frogs.  How do we introduce ourselves? Earth isn't a republic or much of anything.

Fast forward 100 years and Earth founds a central government and acquires a prefix. Would the Frogees bother changing all their records? Or would they just keep calling us Earthlings?

An option I don't recall seeing is no moniker at all.

For example in my main series a group of humans settle at a star named Tirak (Name changed to foil google).

They call themselves the Tirakites. Even when they colonize other worlds, they still just call themselves the Tirakites. Eg not the Republic of Tirak or United Tirakites etc.

Graphene is some scary-level tech compared to the primitive tech of today. Imagine if some clever researcher found a way to bind it to living cells and bridge man to machine! Neuralink perfected right there. Laurie disapproves

The Enterprise uses fusion? I thought antimatter

Something to factor in, English caps more than the romance languages, which you may be getting advice from.

For example Canadian is lowercase adjective in French (Les hommes canadiens) but definitely adjective caps in English.

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(46 replies, posted in TheNextBigWriter Premium)

nah, I'm back in. Seems like my credit card's AI didn't like the membership change. It was probably seeing regular charges for the past 10 years then a sudden shift

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(22 replies, posted in medieval fantasy/ magic)

Oh hey... I'm back online. Wow. Laurie's been scrubbed from existence

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(22 replies, posted in medieval fantasy/ magic)

Oof!

Connor notices after Romano mutters and curses under his breath, plane suddenly crashes.

Connor reaching for holy water...

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(22 replies, posted in medieval fantasy/ magic)

Also, Rabbit Girl from R4 is on the way out the door. When I penned the outline, she seemed a logical extension of the beastlands... but felines are so strong in R3 that I think I'll streamline the leporids out completely. Elm can be from Trag's rival pride (not that Trag has a pride but I can change that too).

The harpies are out. I was checking other stories (eg the competition) and found them too common. I'll use "crower" instead.

Sirens are headed out. Also too common. I like their footprint on the story, so they can turn into mermaids (assuming mermaids can attain human form) which will put them in the class of water demon which aligns that spectrum of the world. Or I could make them selkies, which would be awesome but would eat a lot of page space

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(22 replies, posted in medieval fantasy/ magic)

Getting close to the end of R2. As I mentioned in my latest review, I really have no idea where the story is going. It's been mostly action-oriented chapters in various settings that don't connect well for me. I'm not sure how much of this is part of the genre and involves stuff I should already know as background.

To me it's a lot like a new TV show so far, with many apparently unrelated episodes, generally set in the same universe and involving some of the same characters, but you don't really know where anything is going for a season or two because the writers/showrunners often themselves don't know. The importance of non-main characters is also not knowable for a time until they reappear, if ever.

Yep, R2 is definitely the weakest of the five, mostly because the entire thing is an extended introduction to her initial state. In a normal story, you'd expect the intro to the character's home then the adventure to the first mission. In some ways, I've gone backwards. The unpredictability doesn't do me any favours.

Fionneche, in particular, is a huge problem because her story arcs fizzle in R3. So she teases the eye by seeming important but ultimately is not. This was an unintentional consequence of the MC being a stronger presence than she looked in the outline. I foresee demoting Fionneche to "5th business" next draft.

I read the content summaries of all four R books so far and reread the one for L. Nowhere is there a real summary of what the story (as a whole) is about. The third post in this thread is as close as you've come to a description, which is most noteworthy for saying your not following a formula. Since you're going to have to write a real blurb eventually, why not take a crack at it and drop it into the content summary of book one?

I checked the posts you mention, and can see the lack of clarity. Project R is a fallen angel story.

a blurb might wrote:

They took everything. My friends, my memories, my wings-- even my mother. But I have come to fight back. From the raw streets of one of Earth's toughest cities, I shall rise to vanquish evil. The only question is: once the dust settles will I have a home to return to?

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(22 replies, posted in medieval fantasy/ magic)

Hah, book signings would be hard, given the assumption I'm a woman. But even if I did any, I still haven't done one to explain the weird new sales

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(22 replies, posted in medieval fantasy/ magic)

Weird uptick in kindle sales in the past 4 weeks. I haven't released anything new since August, so it's not like I can say it's anything I did. Maybe the economy finally waking up from Covid?

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(22 replies, posted in medieval fantasy/ magic)

You aren't the only one thinking there should be blue in her outfit... the only problem is I haven't been able to make it work against a primarily green background. Also the specific scene in the story portrayed on the cover, she's wearing black and white (I'm a big fan of that energy rush when the cover-scene unfolds in the story).

I think someone also suggested Blue lettering

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(22 replies, posted in medieval fantasy/ magic)

Hmmm going back to the well for another shot for J3nna cover. Third time's the charm?

Whenever you get into a spiral of complexity, just come stare at this
https://images.ctfassets.net/22n7d68fswlw/AKmUAUNelUcSeuqOEEi6/626269c53fb85b7fcb77517387e0f297/ETsidebyside.jpg

This all sounds rather tangly... why not just forge ahead with the violence and simply don't draw attention to it?

I suspect the market you're after is already nervous about the guns. They probably asked Spielberg to edit the guns in ET into walkie-talkies because though the guns weren't fired, the mere presence of them on the screen was too much.

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(20 replies, posted in Close friends)

So she is not presented as a fighter/hitter so you have some work to do to build her up to throwing a punch

it was clear that both had crushes on J

Wanted to clarify, I wasn't suggesting building on the crush - that part is evident. I was suggesting to build how she decided she needed to resort to violence. That part blindsided me.

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(22 replies, posted in medieval fantasy/ magic)

Urban Fantasy