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(36 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)

I fear E. Free's message bounced back. It had kind of vanished into the cosmos for a few days and I thought it actually was delivered. But it showed back up last night. Troll Email had me fooled. I thought njc's wasn't working but it turns out I simply cannot spell.

So far most votes are for the 2nd option for the sidebar.

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(36 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)

I've managed to mail a bunch of you about the re-birth of the backup site.

This one is gonna have automation. The old, I had to log in and click "backup" which made it kind of poor at backing things up. The old one is also quietly dead. I will at one point go in there and export the forum stuff into the new... but ya, it was pretty ancient.

Golden Arches*
Collective Soul**
Soul Bank
Blessings of Shylock
Reluctant Jonases

* or gates or roads or anything conveying transition
**Well this one is trademarked, but nice to brainstorm on. Collective Gold. Silver Soul. Loaded With Blessings.

Darn, still have a stripping. Think... Think... Think

I wouldn't over worry about the existence of too many -ing's.
Excessive removal can cause unnatural formations in the prose.

I wouldn't over worry about having too many -ing's.
Stripping them with military favour can really stilt the phrasing.

Opps! I mean
I wouldn't over worry about the existence of too many -ing's.
Stripping them with military favour can cause unnatural formations in the elucidation.

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(4 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)

I take the 10-chapter arcs and bind them into full stories. So each release is 40 or 50 chapters (usually 50).

So VQF (all 4 books) would be released as one volume. Each volume with segregated parts and very few characters allowed to move from one book to the other. eg telling Ship story... done? Ok, blow up the ship, reset all the NPCs and move to the next tale.

So, re your question, J3nna was a volume of five... readers didn't have to buy a chain of sequels. In theory, one could read J and see Kimberly in there and migrate over, but cross-sales have been poor. Ever since covid hit, sales (and cross-sales) have been terrible and haven't recovered.

I'm unworried by this, in case you're wondering about the cold, hard facts. Im surfing to the next market-high with a nice back-catalogue ready to sell

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(4 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)

She blows up the ship at the end of book 2. Every publication contains 4-5 books each with a 10-chapter arc. What I've done is expand the 10-chapter arc into 20 chapters and wondering how to get it to 30.

Mind you, this is early in the v6 rewrite (Oh, please let there not have to be a v7). Alice is shaping up pretty strong, and she's tying in the generic members of the ship's crew Laurie never had time to interact with. She may well be good for half of the needed 15k by herself. Will have to see.

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Although the Big Crash scrubbed Laurie off the face of the planet revisions are on-going.

A structural issue I face is how to end it where she blows up the ship.

The explosion occurs at the 36k mark. Slightly more than halfway. I've retooled the story to show the lift crash that "Kills" Alice, effectively adding a fourth woman to the cast. The ensuing antics are good for around 15k, netting me 51k. Another 15k would round it out nicely. That's ~ 10 chapters. Hard to pad that much.

One idea is to add an indoor rail. Due to poor maintenance it tips on the doors (bad design) trapping characters in.  I feel like that's a good 3k But it'd be a diversion at best.

Don't wanna pad the chase scenes or increase the #

Any suggestions?.

Oh, he lost potential money big time. But you don't have a deal with them, so it's loss-less for you. I'd say "laser-ish-swords" are yours, go ahead. You're not going out of your way to infringe on "Jedi".

Similarly, I've been asked multiple times if my characters who summon lightning are trending on Sith, but eh... they don't get laser-swords, they don't have mild prescience, and I haven't received a cease & desist yet. Should one arrive, I shall fight it. I have a concept of "electric charge" but let them try to trademark a Farad. Hope that works out for them.

Mickey Mouse can be defeated
https://www.bbc.com/news/newsbeat-33235330

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(36 replies, posted in Fantasy/Magic & Sci-Fi)

Dirk B. wrote:

Ever hear of a 24 page prologue?

There's a rare good prologue in 2001's Dawn of Man (https://screenrant.com/2001-space-odyss … nal-scene/).

I could go on long rants on this topic but I can sum it down to: I buy a lot of non-Big-5-work from the market and have learned to peek past the prologue before making a buying decision.

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hah, yes, I always auto-skip prologues. I'm one of the eeevil people (muahahahaha)

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I wish I remembered where I heard this, but to paraphrase: introduce characters like their names are a new word. I’m 80% sure my source (I’ll update this if I find the video I got this from) worked with little kids learning to read once. She said that, as kids read, they would hold up a finger for each word they came across they didn’t know. If they got to five, they would stop and ask for help. This was to make sure kids were reasonably challenged by the stories but not overwhelmed.

She then goes on to say this same principle can be applied to character intros. Readers don’t know who these people are, so their names are “new” and lack meaning. Introducing one or two or even three on one page can be fine, but if you’re front loading all of the names/intros on one or two pages readers may feel more overwhelmed. Try to keep track of who’s introduced when and how frequently these introductions happen.

If I read correctly, you don't need a unique soul. You only need Campagna's DNA added to the existing batch. Why not kidnap her and make a few more Connors.

UNLESS the backup Connors won't have souls in which case abortion is okay because pregnancies don't create souls?

Sorry, I might have missed it but:

the mother's DNA as the source of why Connor is much more powerful, the geneticist could be the one who verifies that her DNA augments the DNA that Satan bred into the kids he used

Why stop at only one Connor? Why not make backups?

Neutral thoughts here. I feel it's a lot to pack into 3 books, but will have to wait to see the execution

Emails are actually quite hard. So many services are on the look-out for mass Emails with slightly similar bodies, you can land your server on RBLs within minutes. Same with SMS these days. My own phone company (Rogers) is on one which makes me laugh. Every time they try to text me their latest offer, my phone tosses it into junk without asking.

This will not be easy to solve, I fear

Sadly, I haven't found a way to circumvent that client-side on Chrome

Dirk B. wrote:

I typically get kicked out after about 15-20 minutes.

Mayhap you're on chrome? The secure=false would do that

I see the cookie issue has been scrubbed off the face of the planet by the Big Crash so in summary, three points
1) Some cookies have a rapid expiry. For example, I logged in today and 4 out of 8 cookies are set to expire a bit after midnight (~five hrs)
2) Five cookies have invalid domains (leading "dot"). Some are "secure"=false, which I believe causes Chrome to auto-discard (but not Firefox, oddly)
3) Some cookies have invalid expiry dates into 2026. This should not exceed 400 days or the browser is allowed to ignore it (https://discourse.mozilla.org/t/cookie- … pan/105916)

Teens are horny because teens used to marry for most of human history.

Clarification: It wasn't God who created the capacity for premarital sex. In 1653, mankind made it possible

Connor is still mad at Satan at the beginning of book two, and he looks for ways to piss him off. So, he starts talking about marrying one of the Goth twin girls he's sleeping with, But since he slept with both of them, who does he marry? :-)

I have my main with twins if I ever get around to posting. Though the girls don't remain twins for long because he got a lot of enemies. Sorry spoilers (but the story does nothing to hide this).

Later, he asks the gay kid he's trying to seduce if the kid is a virgin.

This could go south with the reader as easily as it could be a home run. My suggestion here is write where it leads but during revisions try to view it from all angles.

Connor then explains that if We had intended teenagers to abstain from all sex acts, we wouldn't have made you so horny.

Teens are horny because teens used to marry for most of human history. Back-checking on google, in 1610 the age of consent was 12. The act of 1653 moved it up to 14 (Women) 16 (Men)

Don't put it in Eden if you don't want them to touch it

Is still an issue of free will. If you don't want them to touch it, move it five miles south (so someone else can touch it)?

Nay, why create it at all? If you don't have the tree, and there is no decision, everyone is happy, right? No one can disobey in the absence of options.

Yet, Lucifer didn't face such a choice, yet sin still occurred.

(Disclaimer: My mom is also not a theologian, but I already know what she would say. If I actually presented this, it would be a 5000 word essay amounting to the same). I'll paraphrase her below for simplicity.

Regarding teenagers masturbating, since they supposedly have no need for ejaculating before marriage, why would God give them the ability beforehand? It serves no useful purpose.

Mom: OT says if you are married you stay married. If you're not married and you have sex, you are now effectively married (reference, Judges 14:7; Samson's first gf). Interpretation: So if two tweens have sex and ejaculation occurs, they must now marry (after the deed) or be stoned.

Murdering someone = killing someone, although for unacceptable reasons.

Mom: Murder = lake of fire
(*Me: It seems like there are exceptions such as murder by state, eg: stoning)

And killing someone is sometimes necessary (e.g., in defence of yourself or others).

Mom: You were attacked, you respond in kind. If they didn't murder you, you cannot murder back.
(*Me: But Abraham murdered the bandits who kidnapped his wife. Mom: Well that was okay because God said so)

Also not a theologian but...

In a similar vein, the Catholic Church says teens will go to Hell if they masturbate. Why would God give teens the ability to masturbate, only to turn around and expect kids not to do so?

My mom (Jew) would say God also gives us the ability to murder with the expectation not to do so.
eg: Both are sins, but you have free will to engage if you really want to sin.

===insert devil's advocate part ===

Me (Converted): The specific passage in the bible is where the guy wastes his seed by spilling it at the side of the bed.

Genesis:38 wrote:

9 And Onan knew that the seed should not be his; and it came to pass, when he went in unto his brother's wife, that he spilled it on the ground...

10 And the thing which he did displeased the Lord: wherefore he slew him also.

The scene suggests God doesn't want seed wasted. So we get the rules that you can't masturbate and you can't use contraception.

Why was the Lord displeased? Was it really because of the spilled seed? Or was it because Onan was sleeping with someone else's wife?