The Next Big Writer — Children in the Temple

Re: Children in the Temple

null@example.com (Dirk B.) — Sun, 29 Sep 2019 16:29:28 +0000

You have two books in your portfolio with the same title, one of which is only available to Basic members. I'm not a member of that group (I'm maxed out at ten), so I can't access it. I'm reviewing the other one. If you plan to keep both, you should probably rename at least one of them to avoid confusion.

Re: Children in the Temple

null@example.com (Dirk B.) — Sun, 29 Sep 2019 16:25:54 +0000

Nuts. I've been reviewing chapter five instead of chapter one. I'm almost done with it, so I'll keep going. There's some stuff I'm highlighting in chapter five that applies generally to all chapters (e.g., punctuation, dialogue tags, internal monologue, etc.). It's funny, I didn't even notice it wasn't your opening chapter. Duh.

Re: Children in the Temple

null@example.com (Dirk B.) — Sun, 29 Sep 2019 16:07:53 +0000

I sent him the message. He'll be in touch, hopefully soon. FYI, since you're a trial member, once the seven days are up, you won't have access to inline reviews, only regular ones. If you plan to stay as a non-paying member for a while, be sure to inform people when your trial is up, otherwise they'll continue to leave inline reviews, and you won't be able to read them.

I'm working my way through your first chapter. Hopefully, I'll have it ready for you later today.

Dirk

Re: Children in the Temple

null@example.com (Dirk B.) — Sun, 29 Sep 2019 15:59:55 +0000

Nathan Young wrote:

I can't seem to login to the premium group. It says I'm on a seven day trial.

I'll send a message to Sol, our administrator. Maybe you're not allowed access to Premium, although that wasn't my understanding.

Re: Children in the Temple

null@example.com (Nathan Young) — Sun, 29 Sep 2019 14:33:25 +0000

Dirk B. wrote:

Welcome to the site.
We tend to use the threads in this forum for brainstorming with other writers, getting help with story and writing issues, and sharing nonsense. Usually one thread per story, but there's no rule about that. FYI, not all of this group's members write fantasy. We needed a semi-quiet place to "meet" outside of Premium, so we ended up here. For example, Kdot writes steampunk, Seabrass writes sci-fi, njc writes fantasy, and I wrote a space opera but have moved on to a supernatural thriller. If you can't get your questions answered here, you can always ask all of the site's members by posting in the Premium forum. Plenty of helpful folks around. Also, feel free to subscribe to any threads that interest you, so you'll receive emails when someone posts to those threads.
When you're ready for your first batch of reviews, put a post in the Premium forum introducing yourself and your story, and asking for reviews. You'll generally get a whole bunch to begin with, but then it's up to you to decide whom you want to trade reviews with on a long-term basis. Don't forget to respond to reviews. People spend various amounts of time reviewing your work, and a response is an acknowledgement of their effort.

I can't seem to login to the premium group. It says I'm on a seven day trial.

Re: Children in the Temple

null@example.com (Dirk B.) — Sun, 29 Sep 2019 14:18:29 +0000

I clicked on the link to your story on the Home page. I see you've posted without points. You'll still get some early reviews, but they drop off quickly if you don't post with points. Points are this site's currency and reviewers usually want to get paid for their effort. If you post with points, your reviewers earn points that they use for posting their own stories.

Re: Children in the Temple

null@example.com (Dirk B.) — Sun, 29 Sep 2019 14:06:36 +0000

Welcome to the site.

We tend to use the threads in this forum for brainstorming with other writers, getting help with story and writing issues, and sharing nonsense. Usually one thread per story, but there's no rule about that. FYI, not all of this group's members write fantasy. We needed a semi-quiet place to "meet" outside of Premium, so we ended up here. For example, Kdot writes steampunk, Seabrass writes sci-fi, njc writes fantasy, and I wrote a space opera but have moved on to a supernatural thriller. If you can't get your questions answered here, you can always ask all of the site's members by posting in the Premium forum. Plenty of helpful folks around. Also, feel free to subscribe to any threads that interest you, so you'll receive emails when someone posts to those threads.

When you're ready for your first batch of reviews, put a post in the Premium forum introducing yourself and your story, and asking for reviews. You'll generally get a whole bunch to begin with, but then it's up to you to decide whom you want to trade reviews with on a long-term basis. Don't forget to respond to reviews. People spend various amounts of time reviewing your work, and a response is an acknowledgement of their effort.

Re: Children in the Temple

null@example.com (Kdot) — Sun, 29 Sep 2019 12:11:28 +0000

You have arrived at the right place

Children in the Temple

null@example.com (Nathan Young) — Sun, 29 Sep 2019 11:29:17 +0000

I posted the first five chapters of my book "Children in The Temple, Book One of the Runner Series.
I'm an extremely new writer (1 month) and just took it up now that I'm retired and living a peaceful life of full-time RV'ing.
The book is heroic fantasy on a smaller scale. No dragons and Balrogs here, the town's main enemy has always been wolves (wargs in Tolkien's world) and they are enough to keep the small town garrison busy, with the help of the High King's Runners patrolling the forested hills surrounding the town.
I simple don't know what to expect from this forum. I'd like to say that I'll be reading and reviewing a lot right away, but in all honesty writing has consumed my entire day, and I'm loving it. I will sincerely make an effort to take an active part in this forum, but right now even the book I had been reading sits untouched on my nightstand since I started this writing binge 31 days ago.