The Midas Gauntlet

This is a rewrite of my previous work following Tommy Travers, a 14 yr old boy with the ability to enter the World of Books. I have switched this to first person in an effort to better flesh out Tommy and add more life to the story. I am looking for constructive help with POV issues, storyline and just a general opinion of the concept. I try to reciprocate review for review.

• Chapter 1 - Pulled In"This is my rewrite of my pr..."
• Chapter 2 - True Sight"This is Tommy's first foray..."
• Chapter 3 - A Small Skirmish"This is the final chapter i..."
• Chapter 4 - The First Offer"Tommy is back in the real w..."
• Chapter 5 - From the Crossroads…"This Tommy's second and mor..."
• Chapter 6 - The Knife Of Qazeel"I have cut about a thousand..."
• Chapter 7 - Conversation With A Wizard"The aftermath of Mardel's m..."
• Chapter 8 - Flight From Jurulus"Tommy picks up a new skill ..."
• Chapter 9 - The Forest Battle"Tommy discovers life on the..."
• Chapter 10 - The Scroll of Midas"In this short chapter Tommy..."
• Chapter 11 - Passage"The Travelers reach the por..."
• Chapter 12 - The Center of the Middle"Tommy has to complete this ..."
• Chapter 13 - Full Sail"Having failed the test of p..."
• Chapter 14 - Mephitis"In this chapter we take a s..."
• Chapter 15 - In Memory of a Friend"We are back with Tommy and ..."
• Chapter 16 - Dreams"Back on the road Tommy has ..."