Natalie's House of Sin

Alleson is a gorilla of a man, working in a lunar colony bar in the spaceport. After the death of his father he decides to take a vacation earth side. His father left him two intriguing things, an old key from earth, and a book of matches. Surviving long enough to catch a shuttle to Earth, however, is entirely another matter. I am looking for all levels of feedback. I want to get this story ready for submission and sell it. It's been gathering dust long enough.

• Chapter 1 - Platitude Schmatitude"Alleson is a gorilla of a m..."
• Chapter 2 - Frozen Schmozen"Alleson has just experience..."
• Chapter 3 - Wayward Hayward"Who doesn't want an interes..."
• Chapter 4 - Makin' Bacon"An assassin takes a shot, N..."