Me and Mrs. Matthews (repost)

This is one of the stories I'm hoping to publish in a short story collection entitled "Afro-Bougie Blues", about situations in the black community that can't be avoided just because one has money. I have edited this story to keep to one tense (for the most part. Let me know if I did that correctly!), and using some techniques from a book called "The 10% solution" that help edit out unnecessary or non-descriptive words. I have also added a bit more description. I am woefully inadequate at describing settings. In terms of review, please tell me if this is now more believable, suggest tags for the dialogue, and if you have ideas about how much more description I need for settings, let me know.

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